Writing Claims And adding evidence

Learning C – E – I CEI stands for Claim, Evidence and Interpretation. This is a specific form of writing that will help shape your paragraphs and give them structure. You will need to use this formula throughout your high school career at Hillgrove.

Claims Claims are when you clearly state your opinion. Claims must be 1 sentence – no more, no less.

Claims (cont) Claims include 3 parts: 1) Restate the question/prompt 2) “because” 3) Your opinion responding to the question/prompt

Claims example What is your favorite part of English class? My favorite part of English class is ____________ because ___________________________________.

Sample Claims P1 – structure review Barack Obama used pathos the most because he was able to connect with his audience through emotions by showing some stories of when he was younger. The rhetorical appeal that Obama used the most was ethos because in a lot of his statements he talks about his experiences and used them to persuade kids that he pushed himself. Barack Obama used pathos most effectively because he made his audience feel like if they get an education they could be whatever they want to be. Mr. President Barack Obama used ethos most effectively because he tried his best to relate and tell life stories to get his point across.

Sample Claims P2 – structure review Barack Obama used the rhetorical appeal pathos because he talked about an emotional time in his life that made him become better and stronger. Barack Obama used pathos in the best way possible because he introduced us to his past and how anybody can have a future if they try hard enough. Barack Obama uses pathos most effectively because he related with the children and teens with him growing up and past experiences.

Common Mistakes Writing in the first person  “I think” or “In my opinion” 2) Using “wishy-washy” words  probably, might be, sort of 3) Overusing pronouns  he, she instead of Barack Obama 4) Using slang terms  “messed up” or “freaked out”

Practice with revision – P1 I think he used pathos because when he was talking about how he expects us to get a good education I think he made the kids feel obligated in an emotional way. Pathos because he shared his lifestyle without his dad. Barack Obama used ethos the most effectively because he is a credible speaker.

Practice with revision – P2 The most effective use of rhetorical appeal is ethos because he talks about his mom and I rely on my mom. The rhetorical appeal he used most effectively in his speech I think is ethos cause he kind of played in school but turned around and is the president. The rhetorical device he used most effectively in his speech I think is ethos cause he kind of played in school but turned around and is the president.

Claim writing practice: Using a new notecard – edit/rewrite your claim.

Adding Evidence Lead ins, “quotations” (citations).

Lead ins, “Quotations” (Citations). Evidence must also be 1 sentence. Each evidence sentence contains 3 parts: Lead in, “Quote” (Citation).

Evidence Sentence: Lead ins (3 Types) Somebody said (most common) Punctuated with a COMMA , Scott Gillespie said, “Each program allows students to earn college credit while still in high school” (Gillespie 81). Blended  Punctuated with NOTHING (NO Lead in or comma) Some dual enrollment programs are different but “Each program allows students to earn college credit while still in high school” (Gillespie 81). Full sentence  - Punctuated with a COLON : Dual enrollment programs help students get ahead in academics: “Each program allows students to earn college credit while still in high school” (Gillespie 81).

Common Mistakes SomeTHING says  “The book says,” or “The article says,” 2) Incorrect Punctuation  “Ms. Curran says” (says,) 3) Forgetting to include the lead-in!

Citations For MLA (Modern Language Association) format, include the author’s last name and page number that the quote is found on. DO NOT add extra information, words or punctuation. CORRECT EXAMPLE: (Gillespie 81). INCORRECT EXAMPLES: (Scott Gillespie 81). (Gillespie page 81). (Mr. Gillespie pg 81 para 8). (Scott page number 81).

Choosing your quote to prove your claim Write our claim on your index card: The legislature should make it possible for more students to take dual-enrollment classes because the program allows students to get a head start on college. Read paragraphs 9-10 page 81. Find 1 piece of evidence (quote) that would support our claim (opinion). Write your evidence sentence on your notecard after the claim. Include ALL 3 elements needed for evidence: lead-in, quote, citation.

Do your claim & evidence sentences look like this? The legislature should make it possible for more students to take dual-enrollment classes because they will not start college being already behind. Scott Gillespie said, “But if more students take advantage of dual-credit options, more will be prepared for college and other postsecondary level work” (Gillespie 81).

Claim/Evidence Examples P1: What type of lead-in follows each claim Claim/Evidence Examples P1: What type of lead-in follows each claim? (Somebody said, Blended, or Full sentence) Elie did not make the right choice by telling Stein that his family was fine because he was giving false hope to Stein to fool him. After Elie gave the news to Stein “He was weeping with joy” (Wiesel 44). _______________ Elie did not make the right choice because his family didn’t receive a letter from Stein’s family and Elie lied to Stein. Elie Wiesel writes, “…my mother had not received a single letter from them” (Wiesel 44). _______________ Elie made the right decision because it was to help Stein stay hopeful, happy, and live for something. Stein reacts to Elie’s lie with a rare contentment: “He would have liked to stay longer, to soak up the good news…” (Wiesel 44). _______________

Claim/Evidence Examples P1: What type of lead-in follows each claim Claim/Evidence Examples P1: What type of lead-in follows each claim? (Somebody said, Blended, or Full sentence) Elie did not make the right choice by telling Stein that his family was fine because he was giving false hope to Stein to fool him. After Elie gave the news to Stein “He was weeping with joy” (Wiesel 44). Blended Elie did not make the right choice because his family didn’t receive a letter from Stein’s family and Elie lied to Stein. Elie Wiesel writes, “…my mother had not received a single letter from them” (Wiesel 44). Somebody said Elie made the right decision because it was to help Stein stay hopeful, happy, and live for something. Stein reacts to Elie’s lie with a rare contentment: “He would have liked to stay longer, to soak up the good news…” (Wiesel 44). Full sentence

How to Quote Dialogue, Use Ellipses and Use Brackets Elie Wiesel writes, “‘The only thing that keeps me alive,’ he kept saying, ‘is to know that Reizel and the little ones are still alive’” (Wiesel 45). Example of quoting dialogue Stein tells Elie, “‘The only thing that keeps me alive…is to know that Reizel and the little ones are still alive’” (Wiesel 45). Example of using ellipses

Practice: Turn text into evidence sentence Original text: “Yes, my mother did hear from them. Reizel is fine. So are the children…” He was weeping with joy. After Stein asks about his family Elie says__ ___Yes, my mother did hear from them. Reizel is fine. So are the children…___ ____________ was weeping with joy (Wiesel 44)__

How did you do? Original text: “Yes, my mother did hear from them. Reizel is fine. So are the children…” He was weeping with joy. After Stein asks about his family Elie says__ ___Yes, my mother did hear from them. Reizel is fine. So are the children…___ ____________ was weeping with joy (Wiesel 44)__