Show NOT Tell WHAT DOES THAT MEAN?

Add in all five senses; add sensory detail If you're describing a beach, don't just talk about the heat or the colour of the sand Use a simile, metaphor, onomatopoeia, alliteration, etc. Add in the smell of Coppertone, the feel of the sand beneath your toes, the sound of the seagulls, etc.

It is cold outside

Your turn It is windy outside.  The streets are icy and it is cloudy.  There is a salt truck coming down the road.  My car is covered in snow and I need to remove the snow. Start with – As I walked out in the early morning, …

It is cold outside. As I walked outside early that morning, I was greeted with a mean gust of wind that left me feeling the chill in my bones.  The slick, icy streets were freshly covered with soft powder, and the ominous clouds blocked any chance of sunlight coming through to warm me.  The streetlight still glistened a faint yellow and around the corner I could hear the grumbling of the salt truck coming slowly.  I looked at my car, completely covered with fluffy snow and knew my hands would soon be numb from scraping the windshield without gloves on.