Getting your paper back- DONT PANIC! 1.Review the comments – on the rubric AND on the paper 2.Research how to fix your errors – use the tools you have: Your book, the internet For example – if you have a problem w/ Run- ons or Fragments, research in your book how to fix them. 3.If your grade is below a 75, ask about resubmission.

Effective sentences Chapter, pg 125

Whats wrong with these? In accordance with your instructions, I have given birth to twins in the enclosed envelope. There will be a discussion tomorrow on the problem of adultery in the ministers office Passes will not be given to members until the manager has punched each of them first.

Assignment Jigsaw: form into 4 groups Each group will be assigned to make a poster of one (1) subtopic within developing effective sentences You will have 20 minutes to create a poster Posters will be presented to the class

Develop a Clear Style Give your sentences content – bulleted sentences on pg 126. – How could you put more information into each. Make your sentences specific – Vague to SPECIFIC Avoid Over-packing your sentences Fix fragments Pay attention to word order Avoid mixed constructions and faulty predication

Practice what youve learned, pg Theres a new detective show on television. Starring Phil Noir. It is set in the 1940s. According to TV guide. 2.Rogers marketing skills made him important to his companys sales department. I cant help but wonder if hes welcome. 3.Biofeedback: How to Stop It has so many funny and sarcastic comments about California self-help fads, I couldnt put it down. 4.The magician became disillusioned when his assistant stole the disappearing rabbit, the magic wand and the invisible ink. 1. According to TV Guide, the new detective show on TV stars Phil Noir and is set in the 1940s.

Developing a concise style Avoid deadwood constructions Avoid redundancy Carefully consider your passive verbs Avoid pretentiousness

Developing a lively style Use specific, descriptive words Use specific, precise modifiers that help the reader see, hear, or feel what you are describing Emphasize people when possible Vary your sentence style Avoid overuse of any one kind of construction of the same sentences Dont change your point of view between or within sentences

Developing an emphatic style Use specific, descriptive words Use specific, precise modifiers that help the reader see, hear, or feel what you are describing Emphasize people when possible Vary your sentence style Avoid overuse of any one kind of construction of the same sentences Dont change your point of view between or within sentences