Outcome C, Benchmark 3 Prep E1H - 2019

OC/B3 PROMPT Write a well-developed essay that analyzes 2 rhetorical strategies (ethos/logos/pathos/ repetition/rhetorical questions) the speaker uses to convey his/her message. Include a thesis statement followed by 2 body paragraphs (1 paragraph per strategy). Each body paragraph should include 2 fully integrated quotes (4 quotes total), as well as formal language and MLA format.

OUTLINE Thesis Statement Body Paragraph 1 Body Paragraph 2 Topic Sentence Context for Quote #1 Blended sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #1 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #1 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim Transition to context for Quote #2 Blended Sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #2 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #2 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim Concluding Statement (transition?) Body Paragraph 2 Transition + Topic Sentence Context for Quote #3 Blended sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #3 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #3 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim Transition to context for Quote #4 Blended Sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #4 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #4 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim (transition?) Concluding Statement

THESIS – In the Ted Talk “What Adults Can Learn from Kids,” Adora Svitak uses (strategy 1) and (strategy 2) to prove (speaker’s claim). TOPIC SENTENCES – A topic sentence is the main idea of the paragraph. So, what is your first paragraph about? What is your second paragraph about? The answers should be, “My first body paragraph is about strategy 1 and speaker’s claim. My second paragraph is about strategy 2 and speaker’s claim.” So, split and re-word your thesis for your topic sentences. CONCLUDING STATEMENTS – A concluding statement summarizes the main idea of the paragraph. So, re-word and re-order your topic sentence. Synonyms are your friends. Feel free to elevate your writing by including a transition to the next idea. TRANSITION WORDS/PHRASES – Make your writing flow smoothly. Guide your reader through your essay by including varied, effective transition words/phrases. Ex: in addition, similarly, likewise, also, another, for example, as well, while, during, after, before, as a result, therefore, finally

EXAMPLE In the TED Talk “What Adults Can Learn from Kids,” Adora Svitak uses logos and pathos to persuade adults to have more reciprocal relationships with kids. Svitak appeals to her audience’s sense of logic to prove adults and kids should learn from one another. She expresses frustration with adults’ stereotypes and mislabeling of children, as well as argues that age does not dictate ability or character. Early in her speech, Svitak challenges the definition of “childish” and demands her audience to “take a look at these events: Imperialism and colonization, world wars, George W. Bush. Ask yourself, who’s responsible? Adults” (Svitak). She utilizes historical and contemporary cases of irrational, irresponsible behavior by citing several well-known instances of poor decision-making by adults that have caused global problems. By stating facts and real-world examples, Svitak uses logos to pivot the misconception that only children are immature, and she demonstrates that adults are also capable of this so- called “childish” behavior. Svitak opens her speech in this manner in order to persuade adults that they should learn from kids because, as she later explicitly points out, adults do not have all the answers themselves. Similarly, Svitak uses logos again when she provides examples of young people accomplishing great feats. She mentions the past achievements of “Anne Frank [touching] millions with her powerful account of the Holocaust,” and more “recently, Charlie Simpson helped to raise 120,000 pounds for Haiti” (Svitak). She lists examples of children evoking positive change in an adult-run world as further evidence. By describing these factual events, the audience can logically conclude that it is possible and perhaps beneficial to put more faith in today’s youth. Svitak not only uses logos, but also pathos to show adults should value kids’ ideas. Additionally, Svitak appeals to her audience’s sense of emotion to convince adults to trust and support children’s imagination and talents…. Repeat the steps above to complete this paragraph with 2 integrated quotes that are examples of pathos.

OUTLINE Thesis Statement Body Paragraph 1 Body Paragraph 2 Topic Sentence Context for Quote #1 Blended sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #1 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #1 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim Transition to context for Quote #2 Blended Sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #2 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #2 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim Concluding Statement (transition?) Body Paragraph 2 Transition + Topic Sentence Context for Quote #3 Blended sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #3 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #3 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim Transition to context for Quote #4 Blended Sentence (T.C.S. lead-in to Quote #4 w/MLA citation) Analysis of Quote #4 – explain effect on audience AND connect to speaker’s claim (transition?) Concluding Statement

ROUND 1: Read your classmate’s entire essay. Circle the following: 1st/2nd person pronouns (you, your, I, me, my, our, us, we, etc.) contractions spelling/punctuation/grammar errors weak words, clichés, slang, abbreviations “this quote shows”-type statements repetition past tense PEER EDIT ROUND 2: Switch papers with another classmate. Read the entire essay, think about ALL of the following questions, and underline as well as note any issues/suggestions directly on your classmate’s paper: Is the thesis statement complete? Does each body paragraph start with a topic sentence that emerges from the thesis? Does each bp end with a concluding statement? Are all 4 quotes integrated? Is each quote blended with a Transition- Context-Speaker lead-in? Are all quotes cited properly? Does the evidence match the thesis? Is each quote an example of the device stated in the thesis? Do all quotes support the speaker’s claim? Is the analysis thorough and specific? Does it address the device that is used, HOW/WHY it appeals to the audience, and HOW it supports the speaker’s claim? Does it avoid repetition, summary, and vagueness?

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