Look at your hook. Does it transition smoothly into your topic? The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma Revising Revising Reread each paragraph. Does each one maintain the focus of the topic sentence? Should you move or cut info? Identify your longest sentence. Is that length necessary? Can you condense it? Split it into two sentences? The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma Revising Look at your hook. Does it transition smoothly into your topic? Revising Find at least one instance that lacks a fact/detail, an example, or needed explanation. Add what is missing to support the point. The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma Revising Revising Write your thesis statement on a post-it or index card and hold it next to each body paragraph, one at a time. Have you done anything in that paragraph to prove that thesis? Reread your draft looking specifically for abrupt transitions or choppy ideas. Can you add content or transitional phrases to fix this issue?

Revising Revising Revising Revising Revising Revising The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma Revising Revising Reread your conclusion. Does it paraphrase your biggest points? Does it end with an inspiring or motivating statement? Reread your introduction. Does the reader get a clear preview of what the essay will discuss? The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma Revising Revising Review the evidence you use to support your points. Is it introduced and explained? Pick one body paragraph and ask yourself if it really proves the topic sentence. Repeat. The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain“ The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” –Mark Twain The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug!” Ma Revising Revising Are story titles placed in quotation marks each time they are used? Find at least 10 words that you could replace with a better synonym, whether it’s to avoid redundancy, improve the formality, or just be more accurate.

Strategies Strategies Strategies Strategies Strategies Strategies LL Check each time you start a new paragraph. Have you moved on to a different topic/idea? Find each time the words “nice”, “bad” or “good” are used. Replace them with better words Strategies Strategies Ask someone you respect to let you see their draft. What are the biggest differences in content and/or appearance between their draft and yours? Read your work out loud, OR ask someone to read it to you. What do you notice? Do you need to revise anything? Strategies Strategies Reread the directions and/or rubric. Which essay requirement is the LEAST well done? How can you fix that? What resources do you have available to help you make this better? Choose at least ONE and use it. Strategies Strategies

Check the font, size, indenting, and spacing. Formatting Formatting Check the font, size, indenting, and spacing. Are they MLA compliant? Does your writing have a title? Is it centered? Does it grab the reader? Does it match the focus of what the writing is about? Formatting Formatting Is your heading where it should be? Does it have the necessary information? Did you put your last name and page number in the upper right hand corner? Formatting Formatting Are quotes longer than four lines formatted correctly? Are quotes embedded into the text? Do you have a works cited page? Is it formatted as expected? Are citations in alphabetical order? Hanging indents? Double spaced?

Editing Editing Editing Editing Editing Editing Be your own spell check. Read over the draft, looking ONLY for spelling. Circle anything that even COULD be wrong. Use CTRL+F to search for every comma. Does it create a run-on? Is it needed in that spot? Editing Editing Search for every FANBOYS word (coordinate conjunction). Is it creating a run-on sentence, or is it a needed part of a compound subject/ predicate? Find every adverb (usually ending in –ly). Is it necessary, or would a stronger verb eliminate the need for it? . Editing Editing Can this sentence REALLY stand on its own, or is it a fragment? Check all of them! Do you need to convert any sentences from passive to active voice? Can you use better active verbs? .

Editing Editing Editing Editing Editing Editing Look at all your verbs. Have you used present tense? Is the essay written in third person Editing Editing Look for semicolons. Are they used correctly? Find sentences that list things. Have you used parallel structure? . Editing Editing Check for apostrophes. Are they used to show possession? If not, get rid of them. Find your in-text citations. Are they enclosed within the sentence?

Feedback Feedback Feedback Feedback Feedback Feedback Read your partner’s writing and tell them what the best thing about it is. Read your partner’s writing and tell them what the ONE, biggest thing is that’s keeping them from a level 4. Feedback Feedback Show your partner any moments that lost your attention. Find at least one spot that is “okay”, but could be better. Feedback Feedback Is there anything missing, incorrect, not right for the genre, or not what the assignment is asking for? Tell your partner! Can you think of anything your partner could have said, but didn’t?