From Angela's Ashes take home exam Transition Examples From Angela's Ashes take home exam

The Good: Seamless Transitions: They got married because [Angela] became pregnant with [Malachy’s] child. Furthermore, “On the feast of St. Joseph a bitter day in March, four months after the knee trembler…”(17).

Another Example: Angela goes into a completely depressive state and completely starts to abandon her children and their needs. In addition, the author goes on to say, “My mother screams again, Dead…. Her head drops and she rocks back and forth…”(37).

The Bad: The reader trips over the period and is moved from 3rd person (Malachy) to 1st person “I” It was even harder for Malachy to find a job in the United States. “I have just returned from America with wife and four children. We have nothing” (52).

The Bad: Huh. What Just Happened The Bad: Huh? What Just Happened? The quote is thrown in for an unknown purpose. A theme that is demonstrated in “Angela’s Ashes” is poverty. The family lives in a run down area in Ireland. “He hauled the mattress outside again to the backyard. On a cold day like this the fleas would surely freeze to death…”(61).

An improvement : Add a transition Poverty is a theme noticed in the book. Malachy’s remedy for getting rid of the bedbug infestation is to “[haul] the mattress outside again to the backyard” (61). His rationale is that “on a cold day like this the fleas would surely freeze to death…”(61).

Finally… Punctuation is needed before a quote (usually a comma) Finally… Punctuation is needed before a quote (usually a comma). In most cases you still need the transition. [Malachy] doesn’t help the family survive because he is spending his pay on alcohol: “Are you coming home so that we can have a bit of supper?”(26).