MENU EXIT Wordiness Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. Can you spot the unnecessary words in this sentence? I am of the opinion that the reason why our air quality is declining is due to the fact that not enough people in this day and age drive fuel-efficient vehicles. Click to view the unnecessary words

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. Can you spot the unnecessary words in this sentence? I am of the opinion that the reason why our air quality is declining is due to the fact that not enough people in this day and age drive fuel-efficient vehicles. Click to see a revision

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. I am of the opinion that the reason why our air quality is declining is due to the fact that not enough people in this day and age drive fuel-efficient vehicles. ORIGINAL REVISED Our air quality is declining because not enough people drive fuel-efficient vehicles. Next

MENU EXIT Wordiness Use the following strategies to revise wordy sentences. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENU Eliminate padding Delete repeated ideas Reduce the number of modifiers Change clauses to phrases Remove unnecessary information

Eliminate Padding Wordiness MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Continue…

Eliminate Padding Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Phrases to watch out for include the following: because of the fact that the reason is I believe that the point is what I mean is Next

Eliminate Padding Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence? The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire. Click to view the unnecessary phrase

Eliminate Padding Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence? The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire. Click to see a revision

Eliminate Padding Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence? The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.

Eliminate Padding Wordiness MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire. The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.

Eliminate Padding Wordiness MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.

Eliminate Padding Wordiness MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. The bus was late because o the fct tit had a flat tire.

Eliminate Padding Wordiness MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. The bus was late because of fit had a flat tire.

Eliminate Padding Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. The bus was late because it had a flat tire. Menu

Delete Repeated Ideas Wordiness MENU EXIT Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. Continue…

Delete Repeated Ideas Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. Which idea is repeated in the following sentence? At 7:00 A.M. in the morning, we were waiting at the bus stop. Click to view the repeated idea

Delete Repeated Ideas Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. Which idea is repeated in the following sentence? At 7:00 A.M. in the morning, we were waiting at the bus stop. Click to see a revision

Delete Repeated Ideas Wordiness PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. At 7:00 A.M. in the morning, we were waiting at the bus stop. ORIGINAL At 7:00 A.M. we were waiting at the bus stop. REVISED Menu

Reduce the Number of Modifiers MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Continue…

Reduce the Number of Modifiers PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Where are the modifiers in the following sentence? The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers. Click to view the modifiers

Reduce the Number of Modifiers PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Where are the modifiers in the following sentence? The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers. Continue…

Reduce the Number of Modifiers PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Which modifiers could be removed? The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers. Click to see the unnecessary modifiers

Reduce the Number of Modifiers PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Which modifiers could be removed? i The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers. Click to see a revision

Reduce the Number of Modifiers PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Which modifiers could be removed? The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.

Reduce the Number of Modifiers MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. The bright, hot, The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.

Reduce the Number of Modifiers MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.

Reduce the Number of Modifiers MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. The bright, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.

Reduce the Number of Modifiers MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. The brigblazing sun beat down on the travelers.

Reduce the Number of Modifiers PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. The blazing sun beat down on the travelers. Menu

Change Clauses to Phrases MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. Continue…

Change Clauses to Phrases PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation. In the following sentence, which clause could be changed to a phrase? Click to view the clause

Change Clauses to Phrases PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. In the following sentence, which clause could be changed to a phrase? The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation. Continue…

Change Clauses to Phrases PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. How could you rewrite this clause as a phrase? The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation. Click to see a revision

Change Clauses to Phrases PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. How could you rewrite this clause as a phrase? The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.

Change Clauses to Phrases MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation. The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.

Change Clauses to Phrases MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.

Change Clauses to Phrases MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. The police officer, who a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.

Change Clauses to Phrases PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. The police officer, a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation. Menu

Remove Unnecessary Information MENU EXIT Wordiness Remove Unnecessary Information Only include information that is important for your reader to know. Continue…

Remove Unnecessary Information PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Remove Unnecessary Information Only include information that is important for your reader to know. What information could be removed from the following sentence? My best friend, who lives across the street, builds functioning robots. Click to view the unnecessary words

Remove Unnecessary Information PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Remove Unnecessary Information Only include information that is important for your reader to know. What information could be removed from the following sentence? My best friend, who lives across the street, builds functioning robots. i Click to see a revision

Remove Unnecessary Information PREVIOUS MENU EXIT Wordiness Remove Unnecessary Information Only include information that is important for your reader to know. My best friend, who lives across the street, builds functioning robots. ORIGINAL My best friend builds functioning robots. REVISED Menu