CEP Set 3 (E) Task 1

East College celebrated its 50 th anniversary on 12 February, 2011, with one hundred past graduates and four guests attending. The school was originally located in Jordan, and there were only 5 teachers and 65 students in its first years. However, it moved to a larger building in Hung Hom in 1972, and there are 22 teachers and over 800 students now.

Our past graduates have done very well in many different areas. For example, Mr Jeremy Kwok won the Hong Kong Book of the Year Award in In addition, Ms Tracy Liu is the Secretary for Education while Ms Lucy Tung owns a successfully business called Hi Tech International. The celebration included a full stage programme. The special guests gave speeches about themselves and the school, and some of the past graduates and students sang the school song and other songs together. In addition, the principal presented awards to outstanding past graduates and past teachers. The programme ended after the Drama Club staged a musical to honour the celebration.

Besides the stage programme, visitors were also treated to two displays. There was a display of school annuals from past years and a display about the school’s history. The celebration would not have been possible without the hard work of the student volunteers. The Form 4 volunteers greeted the guests and designed the invitations. The Form 5 and Form 3 volunteers decorated the auditorium and the lobby. They were also responsible for the displays and the cloakroom.

We would like to thank all the student volunteers for their efforts in making the celebration a wonderful success.

Reminder for Task 1 Point 2: give the number of graduates (total) Point 3: don’t give names of guests Points 8-10: focus on achievements of graduates X Jeremy Kwok wrote a book called Rain Shadows.  Address the graduates by surname

Style: X The details are as follows: X In the introduction: We had many student volunteers this year, yet do you know the details of the celebration? Let me give you more information about the anniversary celebration. X Don’t use contracted forms.

Relevance Detailed address of school Full names of guests Exact time of reception and performance Taking photos is not stage performance Giving starting time of reception and program time e.g p.m., 8.30 p.m. Detailed description of the achievements Form 4 volunteers help with sending thank you letters to guests

Task 1 Details of the event Date: 12 February, past graduates NOT special guests Brief history of school Location: originally in Jordan 5 teachers & 65 students Location: Hung Hom in teachers & 800 students

Past graduates ’ achievements 8. Mr Jeremy Kwok …. Award 9. Ms Tracy Liu … Secretary for Education 10.Ms Lucy Tung … Hi Tech International Details of stage programme 11. Guests … gave speech 12. Graduates … sang school song and other songs 13. Principal … presented awards 14. Drama Club … a musical

Details of the displays 15. Display of school annuals 16. Display of school ’ s history Various contributions of student volunteers 17. F.4 volunteers greeted the guests 18. F.4 volunteers designed the invitations 19. F.5 and F.3 volunteers decorated the auditorium and lobby 20 F.5 and F.3 volunteers were responsible for displays and cloakroom 21. Thank all student volunteers for their efforts

Task 2 (32 marks) Positive comment: key information Criticism: key information Specific suggestion for next time Use bare infinitive after ‘ should ’, ‘ could ’, ‘ can ’ sb suggest sb (should) do sth

Common mistakes History display X attracted a lot of attention  good selection of items Dining X good food  wide selection of food Songs X graduates built school spirit  songs built school spirit

Photographs X photographers did very well  photos are of high quality Flowers X select flowers in the course  smart to have flowers in school colours

Criticisms Dinner X not enjoy eating while standing up  people not enjoy eating while standing up Musical X The lights were not working.  Some lights were not working. Photographs X Not enough photographers  Not enough photos

Specific suggestions Photographs  Ms Au suggests that students help (to) take photos. X Ms Au suggests taking photos. X Ms Au suggests students can help take photos. X Ms Au suggests students helping take photos. Cloakroom We ought to have two areas for the cloakroom.

Task 3 ( marks) Factual errors : content (7 + 3 marks) Grammatical change Grammar for last section: 3 marks Total: 13 marks * Use third person plural ‘ they ’ in the last paragraph to refer to student volunteers.