Building up your Commentary Macbeth Style Happy 450th Birthday!!!!!!

What good commentary does… Analyzes the previous Concrete Detail (quote) with a fresh and insightful interpretation. (your highly intellectualized opinion!) This is what you did in the last part of your Quote Adventure. Remember Formatting! Your body paragraph begins with a Topic Sentence which creates focus, and then moves into your Concrete detail (quote). Your CD is followed by two sentences of good commentary. You may also weave in commentary with your lead-in (lead-out) if you feel comfortable doing so. TS, CD, CM, CM, CD, CM, CM, CS

But when you are analyzing text, there is no first person allowed. Ways to generate commentary when analyzing text: Consider the author’s diction. Why does he or she use this word/phrase? Does the word/phrase have a special connotation? Is it a charged word/phrase? How does this choice of word/phrase precisely reflect the author’s message? What is not stated in the corresponding quote or paraphrased example, but is rather implied? Connect to literary terms (aspects AND features) whenever possible. Consider how one event foreshadows another, or how a metaphor’s meaning is particularly relevant to the message the author is conveying. Analyze cause and effect relationships when it appropriately relates to your thesis.

Ways to generate commentary when analyzing text (cont.): Don’t just analyze what characters say; analyze how they interact with each other. Address the author’s purpose, theme or message. He or she wrote the text for a reason – what is that reason? Note: All concrete details in the same paragraph should support the same topic sentence, but they should not be interchangeable, or your commentary will grow stale quickly. That is to say, there should be a progression of ideas within each paragraph as well as the essay as a whole in order to keep moving forward toward the next level of insight.

What good commentary looks like… Transition Lead-In Concrete Detail (Quote): In addition, Lady Macbeth questions Macbeth’s manliness, exclaiming, “When you durst do it, then you were a man” (3.2.45-49). Quote CM #1: Lady Macbeth associates evilness and brutality with manliness, inferring that Macbeth is only a man if he is decisive about killing King Duncan. Offers analysis of previous quote CM #2: By attacking his ego, Lady Macbeth forces Macbeth to feel like he must commit the crime in order to prove that he is a “man” and ultimately worthy of her. Offers further analysis of quote/ connects back to main sentiment of thesis CS: This psychological threatening, therefore, becomes a predominant influence leading to Macbeth’s downfall. CS Offers a closing statement for the paragraph that isn’t merely repetitive

What bad commentary does…. Repeats the CD (quote) Offers obscure or unclear analysis Uses clichés such as: Macbeth keeps secrets from Lady Macbeth and everyone knows that secrets don’t make friends. Gives plot summary instead of analysis Is repetitive and vague because you don’t understand the text/literature. Begins with: “This quote shows” or “This shows” Is too general and does not offer specific analysis about the quote/text that supports thesis argument. You Try! Play Bad Commentary Match-Up on your own sheet of paper.

What bad commentary looks like… Concrete Detail (Quote): In addition, Lady Macbeth questions Macbeth’s manliness, exclaiming, “When you durst do it, then you were a man” (3.2.45-49). CM #1: Lady Macbeth then goes on to tell Macbeth that she would rather have her own baby’s brains smashed in, rather than give up on her ambition, but in Act two she isn’t up to the task of killing Duncan because he looks too much like her father. Plot Summary/Unnecessary information CM #2: Lady Macbeth doesn’t think that Macbeth is a man. Repeats the CD/Doesn’t offer anything fresh or insightful CM #4: Lady Macbeth doesn’t think Macbeth is a man, because he acts unmanly all of the time. Repetitive/Sounds like you don’t really understand the literature CM #3: Lady Macbeth urges Macbeth to essentially “wear the pants in the family” and do what needs to be done. Relies on a cliché instead of formulating your own opinion

Good Commentary “And you all know security is mortal’s chiefest enemy” (3.5.32-33). 2. “It will have blood, they say; blood will have blood” (3.4.152). 3. “Tis ‘ safer to be that which we destroy / than by destruction dwell in doubtful joy” (3.2.7-8).