Greshki Slide Show GNED 102 Dr. Fike

Greshka (pl. greshki) Bulgarian: mistake, error

3 (4?) Errors Here Being that I am an African-American, I have seen the first hand physical and mental effects of prejudice at a very young age.

Answers Being that I am an African-American, I have seen the first hand physical and mental effects of prejudice at a very young age. –Never say “being that.” Use “since” or “because.” –The hyphen in “African-American” is okay for social science as in Webster’s, 11 th ed. Do not use it when writing for your English professor. –Use past tense: “I saw.” –Use correct spelling: “firsthand.”

1 Error As girls get use to the concept of having others, they eventually stop playing with the Barbie doll….

Answer As girls get use to the concept of having others, they eventually stop playing with the Barbie doll…. –Spelling: “use” should be “used”

2 Errors Let us take basketball for instance, say your coach is teaching you how to dribble a basketball.

Answers Let us take basketball for instance, say your coach is teaching you how to dribble a basketball. –Put a comma after “basketball.” –Eliminate the comma splice after “instance.”

2 Errors It is taken to far when vulgar language and disturbing sexual content is taken into songs that will be heard in CD’s and in movies.

Answers It is taken to far when vulgar language and disturbing sexual content is taken into songs that will be heard in CD’s and in movies. –Spelling: too –Subject/verb agreement: “is” should be “are.”

3 Errors But on the other hand, it has been suggested that the American Negro are at least partly responsible for their own situation.

Answers But on the other hand, it has been suggested that the American Negro are at least partly responsible for their own situation. –Comma after “But” –Wordy: “it has been suggested that” –Subject/verb agreement: “are” should be “is” –Pronoun agreement: “their” should be “his”; a better fix would just put an –s on “Negro”

1 Error This states that females are programmed genetically to be the sympathetic caretaker and males as the competitive provider.

Answer This states that females are programmed genetically to be the sympathetic caretaker and males as the competitive provider. –Parallel construction: “to be” and “as” are different parts of speech.

4 Errors Verbal abuse hurts ten times more than a punch, because the fact that you are punched does not stick in your mind it is the “you’re fat” or “your stupid” that does.

Answers Verbal abuse hurts ten times more than a punch, because the fact that you are punched does not stick in your mind it is the “you’re fat” or “your stupid” that does. –Omit the comma after “punch.” –Wordiness: “the fact that” –Run-on sentence after “mind” –Spelling: “your” should be “you are”

2 Errors We had our choice to either do two jumps at one point or a standing back tuck.

Answers We had our choice to either do two jumps at one point or a standing back tuck. –Split infinitive: “to either do” –Parallel construction: “either do” (+verb) vs. “or…tuck” (+noun).

2 Errors I was one of the many to experience the off-putting side of favoritism and hopefully I will be able to carry my lessons from this experience throughout the rest of my life.

Answers I was one of the many to experience the off-putting side of favoritism and hopefully I will be able to carry my lessons from this experience throughout the rest of my life. –Put a comma after “favoritism.” –Dangling modifier: “hopefully” means “in a hopeful manner”; it does NOT mean “it is hoped that.” It is an ADVERB!

1 Error Referring back to education, some blacks were not fortunate enough to attend school.

Answer Referring back to education, some blacks were not fortunate enough to attend school. –Dangling modifier: “some blacks” did not do the “Referring” in the first clause, which the sentence does not need.

2 Errors Girls on the other hand, have been known to participate in more passive, intimate pastimes; which tend to develop within them greater sensitivity and understanding.

Answers Girls on the other hand, have been known to participate in more passive, intimate pastimes; which tend to develop within them greater sensitivity and understanding. –Put a comma after “Girls.” –Use a comma after “pastimes.”

2 Errors The childhood of the blacks have a direct affect on the success of the black sprinters.

Answers The childhood of the blacks have a direct affect on the success of the black sprinters. –Subject/verb agreement: The verb must agree with the subject of the sentence, not the object of the preposition “of.” Therefore, “have” should be “has.” –Spelling: “affect” should be “effect.”

2 Errors Being apart of a boys team, I noticed a lot of things.

Answers Being apart of a boys team, I noticed a lot of things. –Spelling: “apart” should be “a part” –Apostrophe: “boys” should be “boys’”

Last One: 2 Errors Essentially, me remaining in Christ is what enables me to really live.

Answers Essentially, me remaining in Christ is what enables me to really live. –The word “remaining” is a gerund (an –ing word used as a noun); therefore, “me” should be “my.” –Split infinitive: “to really live” –A better way to cast the sentence: “In short, remaining in Christ enables me to live more fully.”