Topic Sentence: Priscilla is brave to confront Monk and his gang of thugs. For example, Priscilla calmly asks the Kobra, “Who’s your leader, wimp?” This shows that Priscilla is not afraid to speak her mind. This is important because everyone else quivers in fear, terrified of Monk, but Priscilla reveals true courage in the face of danger.

2 nd chunk CD In addition, she chops the Kobra to break his hold on Melvin. CM (This shows that) Priscilla is not intimidated by Monk or his gang, even though they have hurt other students in the past. CM (This is important because) She is the only person at her school with the confidence to defeat a bully. CS It is heroic and bold of Priscilla to help Melvin escape from Monk.

Priscilla is brave to confront Monk and his gang of thugs. For example, Priscilla calmly asks, “Who’s your leader, wimp?” Priscilla is not afraid to speak her mind. Everyone else is afraid of Monk, but Priscilla shows courage while defending her friend. In addition, she chops the Kobra to break his hold on Melvin. Priscilla is not intimidated by Monk or his gang, even when they have hurt other students in the past. She is the only person at her school with the confidence to take on a bully. It is heroic and bold of Priscilla to help Melvin escape from Monk. 102

TS: Monk is a bully because he likes to intimidate his fellow classmates. CD For instance, he makes the students pay to eat in the cafeteria. CM (This shows that) Monk has complete control over the weaker kids at school. CM (This is important because) Monk feels powerful taking the students’ money and he feels smug intimidating his classmates.

2 nd chunk Also, Monk and his gang are violent thugs, inflicting bruises on the other students at school. CM (This shows that) CM (This is important because) CS