开课教师： 福清一中 王云英

Tips on a good composition 1. good and neat handwriting （书写） 2. few mistakes, especially in the first and last paragraphs and the first and last sentences in each paragraph 3. beautiful sentences 4. coherence and natural transition ( 一致性和自然的过渡 ) 5. structure

假定你是王强, 福清人。有一批英国的交流生要来 福清参观学习。现在市政府正在招募与那些交流 生年龄相当的高中生志愿者，来给这些交流生当 导游。你希望成为其中一员。请按要求用英语给 市政府写一封申请信. 内容应包括 : 个人情况 : 年龄, 性别 个人条件 : 英语好, 爱好科学和文化, 善于交往, 乐于 助人, 熟悉本地情况. 承诺 : 提供最佳服务 注意 :1. 词数 120 左右. 2. 交流生： exchange students

Dear Sir / Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like to work as volunteer to help the exchange students from England. I’m a boy and I’m 19. I was born in Fuqing. I’m a student in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like science and culture. Third, I’m good at communicate with others. Fourth, I like help others. Last, I’m familiar to Fuqing. It is important to the work. If you gave me the chance, I’ll try my best to provide the best service to them. I won’t disappointing you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hear from your letter. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang a volunteer communicating helpingwith give working fordisappoint hearing from you.

Dear Sir / Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like to work as volunteer to help the exchange students from England. I’m a boy and I’m 19. I was born in Fuqing. I’m a student in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like science and culture. Third, I’m good at communicate with others. Fourth, I like help others. Last, I’m familiar to Fuqing. It is important to the work. If you gave me the chance, I’ll try my best to provide the best service to them. I won’t disappointing you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hear from your letter. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang

Dear Sir / Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like to work as volunteer to help the exchange students from England. I’m a boy and I’m 19. I was born in Fuqing. I’m a student in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like science and culture. Third, I’m good at communicate with others. Fourth, I like help others. Last, I’m familiar to Fuqing. It is important to the work. If you gave me the chance, I’ll try my best to provide the best service to them. I won’t disappointing you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hear from your letter. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang

Dear Sir / Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like to work as volunteer to help the exchange students from England. I’m a boy and I’m 19. I was born in Fuqing. I’m a student in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like science and culture. Third, I’m good at communicate with others. Fourth, I like help others. Last, I’m familiar to Fuqing. It is important to the work. If you gave me the chance, I’ll try my best to provide the best service to them. I won’t disappointing you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hear from your letter. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang

Dear Sir / Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like to work as volunteer to help the exchange students from England. I’m a boy and I’m 19. I was born in Fuqing. I’m a student in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. First, I’m good at English. Second, I like science and culture. Third, I’m good at communicate with others. Fourth, I like help others. Last, I’m familiar to Fuqing. It is important to the work. If you gave me the chance, I’ll try my best to provide the best service to them. I won’t disappointing you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hear from your letter. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang

the same subject “ I ” simple words simple transitions （过渡词） simple sentences four aspects & ways of improving them: use different sentences ( 使用多样句型 ) change the subject ( 改变主语 ) use good transitions ( 使用好的过渡连接 ) use advanced phrases ( 使用高级词汇 )

Ⅰ. change the subject ( 改变主语 ) ： 1. I’ll provide the best service for them. →________________________________ is my goal. (-ing 形式作主语 ) → It is my goal ______________________________. ( ( 用 it 形式主语 ) 2. I like helping others. →__________________________________________. (-ing 形式作主语 ) →__________________________________________. ( 用 it 形式主语 ) Providing the best service for them to provide the best service for them. Helping others is my favorite/ what I like. It is my favorite to help others.

Ⅱ.use advanced phrases ( 选取高级词汇 ) of (great) importance be ready to / be willing to … Word Phrase 1.I like helping others. 2. I like science and culture. 3. This is important to the work. be fond of/ be interested in / have great interest in…

Ⅱ.use advanced phrases ( 选取高级词汇 ) Simple phraseAdvanced phrase 1.I’m good at English. 2. I’ll try my best to provide the best service. have a good knowledge of/ have a good command of spare no effort /make every effort/ make efforts …

III. use good transitions ( 使用过渡连接 ) 1. Phrases: ( 选取高级连接词 ) 表层次顺序，罗列增加： first,…second, …third,…fourth,…last… to begin/start with, furthermore, moreover, in addition, last but not least first and foremost, besides, what’s more, in addition to that, last but not least

III. use good transitions ( 使用过渡连接 ) 2. Sentences: （加上常见句型开头） I’m familiar with Fuqing. → There is no ________ that I’m familiar with Fuqing. → Another reason ______ _____ the fact that I’m familiar with Fuqing. lies in doubt

Ⅳ. use different sentences ( 使用多样句型） 1. I’m familiar with Fuqing. It’s important to the work. I’m familiar with Fuqing,____________________ _______________________ ( 定语从句 ) 2. I’m a boy and I’m 19. I was born in Fuqing. I’m a student in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. _________________________________________ ____________________________________. ( 过去分词作状语和定语从句 ) which is of great importance to the work. Born in Fuqing,I’m a 19-year-old boy, who is studying in Fuqing No.1 Middle School.

Ⅳ. use different sentences ( 使用多样句型） 3. I won’t disappoint you. （倒装） 4. If you give me the chance, I’ll provide the best service for them. If ________ the chance, I’ll provide the best service for them. ( 使用省略） On no account ( 决不 ) _____________________. will I disappoint you given

６. I’ll provide the best service for them. → It is _____________ that _________________. ( 使用强调句） 5. I like science and culture very much. I ________ like science and culture very much. ( 强调动词） do Ⅳ. Use different sentences ( 使用多样句型） the best serviceI’ll provide for them

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like working as a volunteer to help the exchange students. Born in Fuqing, I’m a 19-year-old boy, who is studying in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. To begin with, I have a good knowledge of English. Besides, science and culture are what I like very much. Furthermore, I’m good at communicating with others. In addition, it’s my favorite to help others. Last but not least, there is no doubt that I’m familiar with Fuqing, which is of great importance to the work. If given the chance, I’ll spare no effort to provide the best service for them. On no account will I disappoint you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Wang Qiang. I feel like working as a volunteer to help the exchange students. Born in Fuqing, I’m a 19-year-old boy, who is studying in Fuqing No.1 Middle School. I want to do something for the exchange students. To begin with, I have a good knowledge of English. Besides, science and culture are what I like very much. Furthermore, I’m good at communicating with others. In addition, it’s my favorite to help others. Last but not least, there is no doubt that I’m familiar with Fuqing, which is of great importance to the work. If given the chance, I’ll spare no effort to provide the best service for them. On no account will I disappoint you. I would appreciate it if you could accept my application. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Wang Qiang self-introduction (the body) the purpose of the letter (the beginning) hoping to be accepted (the ending)

Practice 假定你是李华，从互联网上得知一个国际中学生组 织将在新加坡（ Singapore ）举办夏令营，欢迎各国学 生参加。请写一封电子邮件申请参加。 内容主要包括： 1. 自我介绍（包括英语能力） 2. 参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家） 3. 希望获准 注意： 1. 词数 120 左右 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

structure Paragraph 1: Paragraph 2: Paragraph 3: the purpose of the (the beginning) self-introduction and the aims of taking part in the summer camp (the body) hoping to be accepted (the ending) Try to use: -ing form 作主语或状语 / attributive clause ( 定语从句） / emphasis ( 强调） / inversion ( 倒装） / ellipsis ( 省略 )

Practice 假定你是李华，从互联网上得知一个国际中学生组 织将在新加坡（ Singapore ）举办夏令营，欢迎各国学 生参加。请写一封电子邮件申请参加。 内容主要包括： 1. 自我介绍（包括英语能力） 2. 参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家） 3. 希望获准 注意： 1. 词数 120 左右 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Try to use: -ing form 作主语或状语 / attributive clause ( 定语 从句） / emphasis ( 强调） / inversion ( 倒装） / ellipsis ( 省略 )

I am an easy-going person, which can contribute to getting on well with other students. Besides, having learned English for many years, I have no difficulty communicating with others in English. What’s more, I have a wide range of hobbies, such as singing and dancing. Thus, I can give performances if necessary. Last but not least, not only do I want to introduce my country to the students from other countries, but I also long to learn about their countries by making the best of this chance.

Homework: Write a complete application .