Writing 1. Thesis: This is what your entire paragraph, essay, report is all about. Thesis: A sentence that contains the following: a Subject + Opinion. TLQ: Transition leads into the quotation 2. Concrete Detail (CD): facts, specifics, examples, descriptions, illustrations, support, proof, evidence, quotations, paraphrasing, plot references 3. Commentary (CM): opinion, insight, analysis, inference, feelings, evaluation, reflection, interpretation, explanation, personal response (How does my evidence support my thesis? Start with the phrase “This shows that…) Conclusion: Restates the thesis/provides sense of “wrap it up”

Rules for Writing Follow these rules to improve your grade and your writing abilities: 1. Always use pen/type. I will not grade it if it is in pencil. 2. Never use a contraction. Incorrect: I’ll never forget my trip to Disneyland. Correct: I will never forget my trip to Disneyland. Use the word quotation, never quote. In this quotation, Darth Vader says, “I am your father” (Star Wars 1977)

Rules for Writing Continued… 3. NEVER use the following: I, me, you, we, us, they. Incorrect: I think you will like the story. Correct: Many readers will enjoy the story. 4. When you write about a story/movie/film etc. you must always keep it in the present tense. Incorrect: Hercule Poirot was the detective. Correct: Hercule Poirot is the detective 5. Never end with “In Conclusion…” “Finally…” 6. Never start with a question

Thesis Many times, your thesis will be based on the question/prompt. Example: Characterize one of the suspects in MOTOE. Use evidence to support your claim. One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge.

TLQ TLQ: Transition that Leads into the Quote Incorrect: One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. “It must not be chance, but design” (306).

TLQ TLQ: Transition that Leads into the Quote Incorrect: One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. * M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. “It must not be chance, but design” (306).

TLQ TLQ: Transition that leads into the quote Correct: One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306).

Transitions For example In addition Furthermore In fact Moreover Consequently Of Course Therefore Even So Still On the Other Hand

Commentary One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306). (CM)

Commentary One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306). M. Periot thinks the murder of Cassetti is planned not by chance. He thinks it is set up.

Commentary One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306). This quotation shows that the murder of Cassetti is planned and executed with foresight. The italicized word design shows that the killing of Cassetti is planned like a play, and one character who has experience acting or in the theatre is Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden). M. Periot’s quotation shows that Mrs. Hubbard takes on the role of conniving director to execute her play of revenge.

2 nd TLQ One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is a scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306). This quotation shows that the murder of Cassetti is planned and executed with foresight. The italicized word design shows that the killing of Cassetti is planned like a play, and the only character who has experience acting or in the theatre is Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden). M. Periot’s quotation shows that Mrs. Hubbard takes on the role of conniving director to execute her play of revenge. Moreover, the character of Mrs. Hubbard is actually a role played by the famous actress Linda Arden, mother to Sonia Armstrong and grandmother to Daisy Armstrong. When M. Peroit speaks to Mrs. Hubbard about the necessities of the crime, he tells her, “an artist was needed” (312). In order for the character of Mrs. Hubbard, a loud, obnoxious American, to be believed the role has to be convincing. M. Peroit’s comment and Linda Arden’s confession show that she is cunning and deceptive and accepts the role of Mrs. Hubbard to seek revenge for the death of her granddaughter.

Conclusion One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306). This quotation shows that the murder of Cassetti is planned an executed with foresight. The italicized word design shows that the killing of Cassetti is planned like a play, and the only character who has experience acting or in the theatre is Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden). M. Periot’s quotation shows that Mrs. Hubbard takes on the role of conniving director to execute her play of revenge. Moreover, the character of Mrs. Hubbard is actually a role played by the famous actress Linda Arden, mother to Sonia Armstrong and grandmother to Daisy Armstrong. When M. Peroit speaks to Mrs. Hubbard about the necessities of the crime, he tells her, “an artist was needed” (312). In order for the character of Mrs. Hubbard, a loud, obnoxious American, to be believed the role has to be convincing. M. Peroit’s comment and Linda Arden’s confession show that she is cunning and deceptive and accepts the role of Mrs. Hubbard to seek revenge for the death of her granddaughter. Mrs. Hubbard aka Linda Arden is a deceptive character whose cunning skills as an actress almost allow her to get away with murder.

Conclusion One of the prime suspects, Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden) is scheming character who seeks revenge. For example, on the train, M. Periot describes the events that take place on board the Orient Express. He tells his colleagues, “It must not be chance, but design” (306). This quotation shows that the murder of Cassetti is planned an executed with foresight. The italicized word design shows that the killing of Cassetti is planned like a play, and the only character who has experience acting or in the theatre is Mrs. Hubbard (Linda Arden). M. Periot’s quotation shows that Mrs. Hubbard takes on the role of conniving director to execute her play of revenge. Moreover, the character of Mrs. Hubbard is actually a role played by the famous actress Linda Arden, mother to Sonia Armstrong and grandmother to Daisy Armstrong. When M. Peroit speaks to Mrs. Hubbard about the necessities of the crime, he tells her, “an artist was needed” (312). In order for the character of Mrs. Hubbard, a loud, obnoxious American, to be believed the role has to be convincing. M. Peroit’s comment and Linda Arden’s confession show that she is cunning and deceptive and accepts the role of Mrs. Hubbard to seek revenge for the death of her granddaughter. Mrs. Hubbard aka Linda Arden is a deceptive character whose cunning skills as an actress almost allow her to get away with murder.

Sentence 1: Thesis Sentence 2:(TLQ)1st Concrete Detail Sentence 3:Commentary About S2 Sentence 4: More Commentary On S2 Sentence 5: (TLQ) 2nd Concrete Detail Sentence 6: Commentary About S5 Sentence 7: More Commentary On S5 Sentence 8: Conclusion 200 +words