As you look over your essay… Capitalize proper nouns (ex: Middle Ages, Age of Feudalism, Golden Age etc.) Avoid vague pronouns (ex: “it” “they”) Avoid vague words/ references (ex: stuff, things)

BASIC CORE 1.Acceptable thesis 2.Majority of documents 3.Addresses all parts of the question 4.Understands documents 5.Analyzes point of view 6.Organization – 3 groups IF YOU GET 6/6 THAT IS A PERFECT SCORE ON THE DBQ!!!

EXPANDED CORE (0-3 POINTS) *Clear analytical thesis *Uses ALL documents *Addresses all parts of the question *Uses documents persuasively *Understands small details of documents *Analyzes POV for at least 3 documents *Additional groupings *Outside information included

1. THESIS Example of an UNACCEPTABLE thesis: “I believe the best label for the Middle Ages is the Age of Faith”

2. DOCUMENTS DO NOT fall into the LAUNDRY LIST trap!!!!! Document 1 says….. Document 2 says…. Etc. Quotes should be NO LONGER than one line!!

INCORRECT USE OF DOCUMENTS “Documents 9 and 10 show the power of the church because one is talking about a Pope calling for a crusade and the other shows a picture of a Cathedral”

CORRECT USE OF DOCUMENTS “The Middle Ages can be identified as the Age of Faith because of the religious impact the Church had on the entire European continent. During this time there was an increase in the church’s power… One could tell the church had power by looking at their cathedrals. Building a cathedral that almost looked like a castle would also require a lot of money and power (Doc. 10)”

3. ADDRESSES ALL PARTS OF THE QUESTION “The Middle Ages has different identifications and names… one being the Dark Ages. I disagree that this is the best label for it because, yes there was the black plague and invasions, but not everything about these times was dark and gray”

4. UNDERSTANDS DOCUMENTS “The church had so much power, that in 1095 Pope Urban was able to call for a holy crusade in order to regain the Holy Land. He persuaded people into fighting for the church with the promise of being forgiven from all sins in case they died fighting (Doc. 9)”

UNDERSTANDS THE DOCS CONT. “Citizens in Europe needed order and control. Frantz Funck- Bretano shows how urgent the situation was. He talks about a country that lacked [a central] government; tells of a place where everything is corrupt and laws are ignored. Peasants would leave the fields trying to escape the violence and anarchy. (Doc. 1) They needed an organized government and society [and got these] through feudalism”

5. ANALYZES POV “The historian Frantz Funk- Bretano described the conditions European society lived under… “…. Such as John of Toul stated in his, Homage Oath…”

6. GROUPS In order to form a group you MUST have more than 2 different documents per paragraph!