Essays & Resume Building Dunbar Pre-Engineering High School First Workshop October 28, 2007

Workshop Objectives By the end of this presentation, you will be able to: –Craft an AMAZING resume –Know how to use action verbs –Share effective ways to enhance essays Lets get started!

Resumes What is a resume? What do you think is in a resume? Why are resumes important?

Resume Details: Part 1 OUTLINE FOR RESUME FORMATOUTLINE FOR RESUME FORMAT –HEADING –EDUCATION –EXPERIENCE –LEADERSHIP –ACTIVITIES/COMMUNITY SERVICE –INTERESTS –REFERENCES

Resume Tips… Make a list of all of your experiences, skills, coursework, and honors. Format your resume with headings and put them in bold. Use fonts like Times New Roman or Garamond in sizes between 10 and 12. Bold all headers, italicize locations, and make sure dates are on the right-hand side. Identify your accomplishments! The layout of your resume is important. Make sure the way you list information and the dates of participation is easy for readers to follow. Use action verbs to begin sentences describing your accomplishments. Write a draft and then show it to someone to you trust. Ask them to be critical. Are your explanations clear and easy to follow?

ALISHA K. SCRUGGS 1234 Washington Road Washington, DC (202) EDUCATION Brookline High School (Brookline, MA) GPA: 3.02/4.00 Expecting high school diploma in June, 1999 Advanced Placement Courses in Comparative Government, 1999 WORK EXPERIENCE Intern, Massachusetts Attorney General's Office (Boston, MA) June-July, 1998 Completed research on high school truancy in Massachusetts. Sales Associate, Gap, Inc. (Brookline, MA) June- August, 1997 Assisted customers, processed payments, greeted customers, answered phones, and cooperatively worked with other employees. Traffic Clerk, Brookline Police Department (Brookline, MA) June, February, 1996 Processed payments, entered data into a database, sorted citations, filed materials, and completed special projects. LEADERSHIP Co-Captain, Varsity Volleyball (Brookline High School) Help lead practices, team events, and led team to conference championship [describe what you did] Co-Founder, R.E.A.C.H (Racism, Education, and Communication in Brookline High School) Led student-led task force to research the tracking practices at our high school. AWARDS Most Valuable Player, Varsity Volleyball, 1999 Who's Who Among American High School Students, 1997 EXTRACURRICULAR ACTIVITIES The Sagamore, Contributing Sports Writer, 1998 Eighth Dimension Community Service Club, INTERESTS Reading, traveling, spending time with my family, jewelry making, and photography. REFERENCES Available upon request

Action Verbs Revise Achieve Coauthor Eliminate Initiate Plan Revitalize Acquire Collaborate Employ Innovate Prepare Accelerate Clarify Effect Incur Pinpoint review Accomplish Close Elect Inform Pioneer

Harvard University Personal Essay This personal statement helps us become acquainted with you in ways different from courses, grades, test scores, and other objective data. It will demonstrate your ability to organize your thoughts and express yourself. We are looking for an essay that will help us know you better as a person and as a student. Please write an essay (250 words minimum) on a topic of your choice or on one of the options listed below. Please indicate your topic by check the appropriate box. Attach your essay to the last page on a separate sheet(s) (same size please). You must put your full name, date of birth, and name of secondary school on each sheet.

Possible Questions __ 1. Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you. __ 2. Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you. __ 3. Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

More Questions… __ 4. Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence. __ 5. A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you. __ 6. Topic of your choice

From the time I was able to realize what a university was, all I heard from my mother's side of the family was about the University of Michigan and the great heritage it has. Many a Saturday afternoon my grandfather would devote to me, by sitting me down in front of the television and reminiscing about the University of Michigan while halftime occurred during a Michigan Wolverines football game. Later, as I grew older and universities took on greater meaning, my mother and uncle, both alumni of the University of Michigan, took me to see their old stamping grounds. From first sight, the university looked frightening because of its size, but with such a large school comes diversity of people and of academic and non-academic events.

Critique… There is a lack of focus. Where is the author going with this? The author also needs to tighten up some of the phrasing. For example, instead of “from first sight” it should state “immediately.”

In Springfield High School, non-academic clubs such as the Future Physicians and the Pylon, both of which I have belonged to for two years, give me an opportunity to see both the business world and the medical world. These two clubs have given me a greater sense of what these careers may be like. In Future Physicians, I participated in field trips to children's hospitals and also participated in two bloodbanks.

Critique… Abrupt transition into the 2 nd paragraph.

Currently I hold a job at Maas Brothers. This lets me interact with people outside my own immediate environment. I meet different kinds of people, in different moods, with different attitudes, and with different values. This job teaches me to be patient with people, to have responsibility, and to appreciate people for what they are.

Critique… What does the author do at Mass Brothers exactly?

The past three years of my life have given me greater visions of my future. I see the University of Michigan as holding a large book with many unread chapters and myself as an eager child who has just learned to read. I intend to read and probe into all the chapters. The University of Michigan offers me more than the great reputation of this fine school, but a large student body with diverse likes and dislikes, and many activities, both academic and non-academic, to participate in. With the help of the University of Michigan, I will be successful after college and be able to make a name and place for myself in our society.

Critique… Overall, the essay lacks focus and proof. A lot of information repeats itself.

In the community I am active in my church Youth Group. As a high school sophomore, I was our church's representative to the Diocesan Youth Fellowship. I helped organize youth group events, the largest being "The Bishop's Ball," a state-wide event for 300 young people. I also played high school junior varsity soccer for two years. As a senior I will be playing varsity soccer, but in the off-season. As a junior I coached a girls' soccer team for the town. This gave me a great deal of responsibility because the care of twenty-four girls was put into my custody. It felt very satisfying to pass on the knowledge of soccer to another generation. The girls played teams from other parts of Florida. Though their record was 3-8, the girls enjoyed their season. This is what I taught them was the greatest joy of soccer.

Critique… Information in this period has already appeared elsewhere in the essay.

Essay Tips A great application essay will present a vivid, personal, and compelling view of you to the admissions staff. It will round out the rest of your application and help you stand out from the other applicants. The essay is one of the only parts of your application over which you have complete control, so take the time to do a good job on it. Check out these tips before you begin. Keep Your Focus Narrow and Personal

Tips Continued… Prove It Develop your main idea with vivid and specific facts, events, quotations, examples, and reasons. There's a big difference between simply stating a point of view and letting an idea unfold in the details: Be Specific Avoid clichéd, generic, and predictable writing by using vivid and specific details.

Things to Avoid in Writing an Essay Don'ts –Don't Tell Them What You Think They Want to Hear Don't Write a Resume –Don't include information that is found elsewhere in the application. Your essay will end up sounding like an autobiography, travelogue, or laundry list. Yawn.

Things NOT to Do Cont’d Don't Use 50 Words When Five Will Do Eliminate unnecessary words. Don't Forget to Proofread –Typos and spelling or grammatical errors can be interpreted as carelessness or just bad writing.

Quick Review 1.What are resumes used for? 2.What are the components of a resume? 3.What do essay questions ask? 4.What are some do’s and don’ts of essay writing? Good Luck!!! I know you can do it!!!