+ Technique Bank 3 - Please copy into back of jotters © Assonance Repeating the same sounds within words close together Euphemism Saying offensive things in a nicer way Personification Giving human characteristics to inhuman things Onomatopoeia Words that mimic the sound they describe Pathetic Fallacy Using events such as weather or other action to show dramatic content of a text

+ © Essay Writing for Int 2 Glasgow 5 th March 1971 Or how to do your first critical essay without embarrassing anyone.

+ Aim of this lesson: 1. Completely understand how to PEEL 2. Practice PEELing 3. Head towards an A grade with analysis and evaluation ©

+ Reminder - What the examiners are looking for 1. Understanding – am I showing I understand what the writer is trying to do? 2. Analysis – can I identify the technique and comment on how it works? 3. Evaluation – can I form a personal opinion about the ideas in the text and support it with quotes? 4. Expression – can I write in a way that is clear and stylish? ©

+ Step 1: Mind Mapping © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? Seems like true story Clear visual imagery blood pain Realistic characters violence Present tense Newspaper headline Everyday place but dark and wet Innocent victims Faceless criminals Society just drives by

+ Step 2: How to PEEL © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? The ideas will become paragraphs in your essay Each paragraph follows a simple structure: P E L

+ Step 2: How to PEEL © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? 1. Point 2. Evidence 3. Explain 4. Link back to question

+ Step 2: How to PEEL © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? 1. Point (what I will show in this paragraph) 2. Evidence (quote from the poem) 3. Explain (explain how this proves my point, unpack any techniques, and give a personal reaction to them) 4. Link back to question (show how this answers the question)

+ Step 2: How to PEEL - example © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? In “Glasgow, 5 th March 1971”, the poet creates a particularly vivid description of a violent incident. One of the most powerful ways he does this is by describing the injuries to the victims: “The young man’s face is bristling with fragments of glass” Morgan uses a metaphor to create a disturbing picture of the young man’s face. The shards of glass seem to make a beard, there are so many. This is effective because it shows us how many pieces are embedded, and how he will be scarred. This horrible image is one of the ways the scene is made vivid and memorable. P E E L

+ Step 2: How to PEEL © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? In “Glasgow, 5 th March 1971”, the poet creates a particularly vivid description of a violent incident. One of the most powerful ways he does this is by describing the injuries to the victims: “The young man’s face is bristling with fragments of glass” Morgan uses a metaphor to create a disturbing picture of the young man’s face. The shards of glass seem to make a beard, there are so many. This is effective because it shows us how many pieces are embedded, and how he will be scarred. This horrible image is one of the ways the scene is made vivid and memorable. PEELPEEL Analysis

+ Step 2: How to PEEL © Glasgow 5 th – how is the scene made vivid? In “Glasgow, 5 th March 1971”, the poet creates a particularly vivid description of a violent incident. One of the most powerful ways he does this is by describing the injuries to the victims: “The young man’s face is bristling with fragments of glass” Morgan uses a metaphor to create a disturbing picture of the young man’s face. The shards of glass seem to make a beard, there are so many. This is effective because it shows us how many pieces are embedded, and how he will be scarred. This horrible image is one of the ways the scene is made vivid and memorable. PEELPEEL Analysis Evaluation

+ A Quotation Sandwich? In “Glasgow, 5 th March 1971”, the poet creates a particularly vivid description of a violent incident. One of the most powerful ways he does this is by describing the injuries to the victims: “The young man’s face is bristling with fragments of glass” Morgan uses a metaphor to create a disturbing picture of the young man’s face. The shards of glass seem to make a beard, there are so many. This is effective because it shows us how many pieces are embedded, and how he will be scarred. This horrible image is one of the ways the scene is made vivid and memorable. cracker cheese P E L

+ Your Turn to make sandwiches… One of the ways this poem makes the central incident exciting is by having a fast, dramatic opening. “With a ragged diamond of shattered plate-glass a young man and his girl are falling backwards into a shop window” Explain how this is done. Include analysis (how techniques are used) and evaluation (how effective or good it is). Link back to the question to show how it makes the incident in the poem interesting. PEELPEEL

+ One of the ways this poem makes the central incident exciting is by having a fast, dramatic opening. “With a ragged diamond of shattered plate-glass a young man and his girl are falling backwards into a shop window” The poet uses enjambment in the first sentence to create a sense of urgency in the opening lines. This is effective because it makes it seem fast-paced. The metaphor “ragged diamond” has connotations of love and marriage, so we feel sorry for the couple, not only because they have been attacked, but because they are young and in love. This makes the start very dramatic. PEELPEEL

+ Your Turn to make sandwiches… The poem is one of Morgan’s “instamatic” poems. This means is it like a word photograph, which makes it more interesting: “evidence” - clue…look for the starfish… Explain how this is done. Include analysis (how techniques are used) and evaluation (how effective or good it is) Link back to the question to show how it makes the incident in the poem interesting PEELPEEL

+ Revision Every paragraph (apart from introductions and conclusions) follows PEEL Include analysis and evaluation in each paragraph Use a quote in every paragraph Aim for 5-7 paragraphs