Improving Your English Writing Part 2: Introduction & Thesis John E. Clayton Nanjung University, Spring, 2004

Qingdao Anybody from Qindao? Anybody returning home to Qingdao for the National Day holiday?

A Balanced Paragraph Riding a bicycle is preferable to driving a car. First of all, a bicycle is relatively inexpensive to buy and to maintain. While a car may cost thousands of dollars annually, a good bicycle will cost only a hundred dollars or so, and its annual maintenance cost is very small. Biking is also healthier. Not only does the biker get more physical exercise than the driver, but bicycles are nonpolluting. The consequence is a person with strong legs and a strong heart whose bicycle helps keep the environment clean. Finally, bicycling is, unlike driving, personally satisfying. Instead of being a robot inside a machine, the biker pedals along, enjoying the scenery, becoming a part of nature. In all but the most inclement weather, the bicycle is a pleasurable means of transportation. Which is the topic sentence? Which is the concluding sentence? What specific points are being made?  It's relatively inexpensive  It's healthier  It's personally satisfying

Handout Hand out: Essay Structure and Sample Essay (one page)

5 Paragraph Essay Structure Body Paragraphs Begin with a topic sentence Explain, define, clarify the topic sentence with facts, examples, descriptions, etc. End with a concluding sentence that draws the paragraph together Conclusion Say the thesis in a different way “Grab” the reader, so he/she will not forget. Might include a prediction, a recommendation or a solution Introduction Motivate and interest the reader State your position - thesis Tell a little more about what to expect

Some Ways to Start the Introduction a quotation a question acknowledgment of an opposite opinion an interesting fact a definition or explanation

Don’t Block Your Essay

What is a Thesis Statement? Your thesis statement: expresses the main ideas of your paper is supported by the body paragraphs answers the question: "What is your argument?"

Avoid Statements of Fact Examples of poor thesis statements – “Hamlet is the prince of Denmark, and he dies at the end of the play” “The French Revolution, which started in 1789, brought about many changes” A good thesis statement should be debatable.

Divide into 8 teams

Thesis - Quick Quiz 1. Computers and automation increase unemployment. DEBATABLE 2. Smoking is harmful to people's health. NON-DEBATABLE 3. Plants produce oxygen that the world needs to sustain life. NON-DEBATABLE 4. A good education is necessary for a successful and happy life. DEBATABLE

Team Thesis Practice Write a debatable and a non-debatable statement about each of the following topics: Alcohol Rock music Television Chinese traditional medicine Public transport Students and computer games The Chinese education system University dormitories

Thesis Practice Alcohol Alcohol can be legally sold to adults over the age of 18 in Victoria Drinking alcohol is always bad for your heath Television Televison broadcasting began in Australia in Cable television will become more popular than free-to-air television in the next 10 years. Public Transport Trains, trams and buses are all forms of public transport. Public transport is more economically efficient than private car transport.

Homework Assignment Write a 5 paragraph argumentative essay: Subject: the most important of the five things that interest you (previous homework assignment) 1.Brainstorm ideas about the subject 2.Develop a thesis statement, stating your position 3.Your audience is your teacher 4.Your tone is argumentative 5.Write a rough draft (which you will not turn in) 6.Write the final draft, printed on the PC, to turn in Don’t forget your English name and student number Due October 18 th or 20th