In what way and to what extent did constitutional and social developments between 1860 and 1877 amount to a revolution?

What you did well… Introductory paragraph Clear statement of thesis: directly addressed the question of how/to what extent this period was revolutionary Inclusion of several pieces of relevant, significant evidence Inclusion of half (or more) documents in essay response

What you need to improve upon… Don’t simply state that a development was revolutionary: “This change was revolutionary.” ANALYZE the documents; don’t simply mention them. Chronology!! “The 13th Amendment was passed. South Carolina seceded.” NO! Connect your evidence back to your thesis: Always answer the question of “SO WHAT?” You told me what happened, but you didn’t tell me why these events were important. Capitalization, 3rd person, run-ons, organization…