How to make good notes An analysis of errors in selected student work PS: Only promising examples included

Useful examples of notes for Manufacturing and services, Reader, p 18! Manufacturing and services in the past, population worked mostly in agriculture today, only 2-3% work in agriculture MANUFACTURING → DESIGN (Paris, London, NY → important part of economy) → these changes are inevitable TEACHER’S COMMENT:     

Useful examples of notes for Manufacturing and services, Reader, p 18! Manufacturing and services in the past, population worked mostly in agriculture today, only 2-3% work in agriculture MANUFACTURING → DESIGN (Paris, London, NY → important part of economy) → these changes are inevitable TEACHER’S COMMENT: - layout ok - an important element missing, which is it? - effect of the changes on employment → message incomplete, impossible to grasp

MANUFACTURING AND SERVICES (p 18) INTRODUCTION 1AGRICULTURE 200 years ago → today → the wast majority of2 -3 % of the population population 2 service industries → “the post-industrial countries” manufacturing → “the developing countries” Pg.1– loss of manufacturing industry in the advanced countries e.g. US Pg.2- industry of entertainment Pg.3- more evidence e.g. Paris, London, New York Pg. 4 – conclusion: inevitable progressive change

MANUFACTURING AND SERVICES (p 18) INTRODUCTION 1AGRICULTURE Nice structure! 200 years ago → today → the wast majority of2 -3 % of the population population Key word is missing! 2 service industries → “the post-industrial countries” manufacturing → “the developing countries” Pg.1– loss of manufacturing industry in the advanced countries e.g. US → unemployment – mention it!!! Pg.2- industry of entertainment, design... → new jobs in services Pg.3- more evidence - evidence for what? e.g. Paris, London, New York Pg. 4–conclusion: inevitable progressive change Why? So what?

John Kenneth Galbraith EMPLOYMENT (U.S.) Once – heavy industry Nowadays: arts, music entertainment amusement PEOPLE country 1 supplied with physical objects of consumption 2 concerning with design→ CITY 3 persuading people to buy* arts * entertainment * music ECONOMY Manufacturing → design, entertainment

John Kenneth Galbraith – title? EMPLOYMENT (U.S.) – only U.S.? Once – heavy industry Nowadays: arts, music entertainment amusement PEOPLE country 1 supplied with physical objects of consumption 2 concerned with design→ CITY 3 need to persuade people to buy* arts * entertainment * music ECONOMY? EMPLOYMENT!!! Conclusion? Manufacturing → design, entertainment grammar issues

Student’s name Pg. 1 The decline in primary sector Two hundred years agovs. Today -Vast majority worked in agriculture- only 2-3% of... - growth of service industries Pg. 2 Reason for the loss of manufacturing industry -Larger social developments -E.g. USA Pg. 3 New ideas for employment -Art industry, music, entertainment, amusement, design Pg. 4 Examples of new ideas -Paris, London, New York live on design and entertainment Pg. 5 Conclusion - It is inevitable to stop the changes in consumption

Student’s name – title? Pg. 1 The decline in primary sector how many pgs.? Two hundred years agovs. Today -Vast majority worked in agriculture- only 2-3% of... - growth of service industries Pg. 2 Reason for the loss of manufacturing industry -Larger social developments – explain!!! -E.g. USA Pg. 3 New ideas for employment – why not join with Pg. 4? -Art industry, music, entertainment, amusement, design Pg. 4 Examples of new ideas -Paris, London, New York live on design and entertainment Pg. 5 Conclusion - grammar/vocabulary problem + incomplete - It is inevitable to stop the changes in consumption

I.GLOBAL EVOLUTION agriculture vs. advanced industrialized countries  post industrial countries majority in primary sectormajority in higher sector II. LOSS OF INDUSTRY PAST – US depends on heavy industry III.DESIGNED GOODS NOWADAYS–goods connected with arts, entertainment, music IV.BIG CITIES PASTNOWADAYS Manufacturingvs.Entertainment, design V.OPINION: Changes are inevitable. Conclusion: When the country is developing, most people climb to higer sectors.

I. GLOBAL EVOLUTION agriculture vs. advanced industrialized countries  post industrial countries majority in primary sectormajority in higher sector II. LOSS OF INDUSTRY PAST – US depends on heavy industry III. DESIGNED GOODS NOWADAYS–goods connected with arts, entertainment, music IV. BIG CITIES PASTNOWADAYS Manufacturingvs.Entertainment, design V. OPINION: Changes are inevitable. Conclusion: When the country is developing, most people climb to higer sectors. You should address the issue of employment more directly!

Making notes I.NOT MANUFACTURING ONLY Social developments → US no longer depends on heavy industry for employment II. ENTERTAINMENT – LATER STAGE OF EMPLOYMENT -Consumption -Arts, entertainment, music, design III MORE EVIDENCE -Paris, London, NY – live on design and entertainment IV CONCLUSION Increase in demand for entertainment is inevitable Future of employment in western countries is entertainment!

Making notes I.NOT MANUFACTURING ONLY Social developments → US no longer depends on heavy industry for employment II. ENTERTAINMENT – LATER STAGE OF EMPLOYMENT -Consumption -Arts, entertainment, music, design Great thinking! III MORE EVIDENCE -Paris, London, NY – live on design and entertainment IV CONCLUSION A bit ironic! Increase in demand for entertainment is inevitable Future of employment in western countries is entertainment!

Homework loss of manufacturing ≠ unemployment –E.g. UK design & entertainment → new jobs  important parts of economics = fact

Homework loss of manufacturing ≠ unemployment –E.g. UK design & entertainment → new jobs  important parts of economics = fact Very, very brief, but also very clear thinking! Might want to include more info for later reference! E.g. you are not saying why design became so important.