Friday, September 10, 2010 DO NOW Complete right side of dual column notes, explaining 4-5 of the items from the left side. Novel/Book needs to be read by September 22 Agenda 1.Complete dual column notes #3 and turn in – 10 minutes. 2.Identify stylistic language ideas for your Change Essays. 3.Finish typing draft of your Change Essay today. 4.Turn in prewrites 1, 2, 3, one outline, and rough draft of your change essay at the end of the hour.

Learning Targets Compose a rough draft of a Change Essay. Understand various options for introduction and conclusion paragraphs.

Create Snapshots Find places to show a person’s movements/gestures. Paint a setting with description of a place. Listen to sounds and speech. Zoom in close with a physical detail of a person or place. Try to use more than one of the five senses. Paint a feeling in a setting without saing what the feeling is.

Introductions:How To Introductions: How To Introductions should have 2 parts: a HOOK SENTENCE HOOK and a FOCUS or THESIS SENTENCE. HOOKStart with a HOOK to “grab” the reader’s attention. Great hooks include (SHUDS): -Statistics -HISMOP (hyperbole, idiom, simile, metaphor, onomatopoeia, personification) -Unusual Facts -Dialogue -Scenarios

BoringHooks Boring Hooks Sample Prompts: Describe your room. OR Explain reasons you like/dislike your room. Do you like your room? OR What do you like about your room? OR Do you know why I hate my room?

StatisticHook Statistic Hook People magazine conducted a survey last summer of parents across the country. The survey results revealed that 92% of parents are unhappy with state of their children’s rooms. I’m afraid that my my parents would agree with that statistic, because my room is disgusting! NOTE: When using a STATISTICS hook, be sure to tell WHO did the research. You can also tell WHEN the research was conducted!

HISMOPHooks HISMOP Hooks My room is a garbage dump! Dad swears that I’ll need to call in a hazardous materials team to help me clean it. Although Dad has a flair for the dramatic, I have to hand it to him this time: my room is pure gross! OR Shhh...Did you hear that squeaking? I don’t know if it’s the family of rats that have moved into my closet or the shelf brackets whining under the weight of the junk atop them, but whatever it is, it can’t be good. Simply stated, my room is filthy!

Unusual FactHook Unusual Fact Hook I read in a scientific magazine that the average bedroom has thousands of different types of bacteria. My room isn’t an average room, so I would bet it has millions of different types. I wanted to call in some professionals to do the task, but Mom wouldn’t hear of it. Today is the day I face the music and clean my putrid room.

DialogueHook Dialogue Hook “My, heavens, Jamie,” Mom screamed last night, “clean up this pig sty!” Mom and I don’t see eye to eye on this issue. To her my room is a pig sty, but to me it’s paradise. NOTE: When using a DIALOGUE hook, be sure to PUNCTUATE it correctly with commas and quotation marks, and don’t forget to add a TAG!

ScenarioHook #1 Scenario Hook #1 Poor old Mom waltzed into my room yesterday to collect my laundry, and she’s still trying to find her way out of the maze of clothes, games, and books littering the floor. I think I’ll send a search team after her if she doesn’t surface sometime today. That room is a mess!

ScenarioHook #2 Scenario Hook #2 As I lay on the sofa watching Saturday morning cartoons, I notice my dog dragging a pair of pants, a remote control airplane, and then a science book into the den. I soon realize that all of these items have come from my room. You know your room is a mess when even your DOG nags you to clean it.

Some Final HOOK Tips… It’s OK to combine different types of hooks in your introduction. Try to add some humor in your hooks; it’s a great way to “grab” the reader!

Conclusions: T-SD-? SENTENCERestate your THESIS SENTENCE and how you feel about your topic (don’t use the word-for-word topic sentence you used to finish your introduction). SUPPORTING DETAILSRemind readers of your SUPPORTING DETAILS in one sentence (don’t forget to separate each detail with a comma). QUESTIONAsk a thoughtful QUESTION to get the reader thinking.

Sample Conclusion As you can see, my room is beyond nasty. There are mountains of clothes on the floor, colonies of dust bunnies under the furniture, and petrified food in every crevice. Do you think it’s time to clean it up?

Change Essay Final draft expectation: You will be required to incorporate stylistic language into all 6 of your paragraphs.

For Extra Credit If you finish your rough draft early today, craft additional introduction paragraphs or additional conclusion paragraphs for your change essay. Try to use SHUDS techniques. Worth 3 bonus points for each paragraph.