ORIENTATION LECTURE 0.3

LECTURE OUTLINE Weekly Deadlines Weekly Deadlines Materials Taxonomy Materials Taxonomy Assignment 1 Assignment 1

An Introduction to Assignment I

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THE OBJECTIVE To write a 200+ word essay, which will be an introduction to the chosen material. To write a 200+ word essay, which will be an introduction to the chosen material. The material for the lecture, but not the first assignment, is “Oxygen”. The material for the lecture, but not the first assignment, is “Oxygen”. To rank the use of English in the essay according to a sequence of “Grading Questions” To rank the use of English in the essay according to a sequence of “Grading Questions” To re-write the essay To re-write the essay

THE RESOURCES [1] WebElements TM, the periodic table on the WWW. Mark Winter: The University of Sheffield and WebElement Ltd., UK © Mark Winter, Accessed 06/16/2008 [1] WebElements TM, the periodic table on the WWW. Mark Winter: The University of Sheffield and WebElement Ltd., UK © Mark Winter, Accessed 06/16/ /text/O/key.html /text/O/key.html /text/O/key.html /text/O/key.html [2] “Oxygen”. From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia. Licensed to the public under the GNU Free Documentation License. Accessed 06/16/2008 [2] “Oxygen”. From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia. Licensed to the public under the GNU Free Documentation License. Accessed 06/16/

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 1. Does the first sentence of the essay accurately introduce and/or reflect the subject matter of the essay? 1. Does the first sentence of the essay accurately introduce and/or reflect the subject matter of the essay? No. The first sentence: “ does not introduce the content of the essay. No. The first sentence: “Oxygen has been around for a long time, and not many people know that it was first formed from the metabolic action of primitive anaerobes.”, does not introduce the content of the essay.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 2. Is the text grammatically correct, properly punctuated, and free of spelling/typographical errors? 2. Is the text grammatically correct, properly punctuated, and free of spelling/typographical errors? No. The English is poor but, I believe, grammatically correct. However, the third column of the table is headed “pbb by atoms”, when it should be “ppb by atoms”. The third paragraph starts with the word “To” when it should be “Too”. In the same sentence, “ No. The English is poor but, I believe, grammatically correct. However, the third column of the table is headed “pbb by atoms”, when it should be “ppb by atoms”. The third paragraph starts with the word “To” when it should be “Too”. In the same sentence, “tetrogenic” should be “teratogenic”.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 3. Is the essay free of inconsequential verbiage? 3. Is the essay free of inconsequential verbiage? No. The author begins two sentences with “In fact….”. Example, last sentence, first paragraph: No. The author begins two sentences with “In fact….”. Example, last sentence, first paragraph: “In fact, oxygen is the third most abundant element in the sun…” Unless the author deals routinely with speculations, the phrase is useless, or inconsequential verbiage. Unless the author deals routinely with speculations, the phrase is useless, or inconsequential verbiage.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK The second sentence of the second paragraph reads: “Oxygen is actually present in many organic compounds.” The word “actually” is redundant; either oxygen is, or is not present in many organic compounds. The second sentence of the second paragraph reads: “Oxygen is actually present in many organic compounds.” The word “actually” is redundant; either oxygen is, or is not present in many organic compounds.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 4. Is the essay free from colloquialisms: words or phrases that are part of the vernacular? 4. Is the essay free from colloquialisms: words or phrases that are part of the vernacular? No. The sentence, “ (first sentence of first paragraph) is conversational/colloquial and practically meaningless. The phrase “not many people know” is somewhat insulting! No. The sentence, “Oxygen has been around for a long time, and not many people know that it was first formed from the metabolic action of primitive anaerobes.” (first sentence of first paragraph) is conversational/colloquial and practically meaningless. The phrase “not many people know” is somewhat insulting!

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 5. Is the essay free from hyperbole, or exaggeration? 5. Is the essay free from hyperbole, or exaggeration? No. The first sentence of the fourth paragraph, “ lthough arguably true, is pure hyperbole. No. The first sentence of the fourth paragraph, “It is no exaggeration to say that oxygen has changed the history of the world forever”, although arguably true, is pure hyperbole.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 6. Is each sentence, free of non sequitur, e.g., does the second part of a sentence bear a relationship to the first part? 6. Is each sentence, free of non sequitur, e.g., does the second part of a sentence bear a relationship to the first part? No. The sentence “Because oxygen is highly reactive, it is found in the atmosphere as O 2 or O 3 (ozone)”, consists of two phrases which are supposedly connected through the use of the word “Because”. However, the second phrase is not a consequence of the first. No. The sentence “Because oxygen is highly reactive, it is found in the atmosphere as O 2 or O 3 (ozone)”, consists of two phrases which are supposedly connected through the use of the word “Because”. However, the second phrase is not a consequence of the first.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 7. Is the content presented in a logical fashion? For example, does one sentence flow naturally from the one preceding? 7. Is the content presented in a logical fashion? For example, does one sentence flow naturally from the one preceding? No. Logic is wholly lacking. For example, in the fourth sentence in the first paragraph, “…o the author jumps from the abundance of oxygen in the sun, to its effects on the northern/southern lights. No. Logic is wholly lacking. For example, in the fourth sentence in the first paragraph, “…oxygen is the third most abundant element in the sun, and in excited states, is responsible for the red and green colors of the aurora,” the author jumps from the abundance of oxygen in the sun, to its effects on the northern/southern lights.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK: PLAGIARISM 8. Is the essay clearly the work of the author, i.e., is it free of plagiarism? 8. Is the essay clearly the work of the author, i.e., is it free of plagiarism? No! The author is guilty of plagiarism, and should be reported to the Office of Judicial Affairs. No! The author is guilty of plagiarism, and should be reported to the Office of Judicial Affairs.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK: PLAGIARISM The second paragraph, “Oxygen atoms are present in water (H 2 O)…” is taken word for word (with one minor alteration) from ref [1], vid: The second paragraph, “Oxygen atoms are present in water (H 2 O)…” is taken word for word (with one minor alteration) from ref [1], vid:

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK: PLAGIARISM Oxygen atoms are present in water (H 2 O) and water is essential to all life. Oxygen is actually present in many organic compounds. Most organisms use oxygen for respiration. While oxygen (O 2 ) is necessary for life, oxygen as ozone (O 3 ) is highly toxic. On the other hand, ozone is an important component of the atmosphere (the ozone layer) and helps to shield us from harmful ultraviolet rays from the sun [2]. “Oxygen atoms are present in water (H2O) and water is essential to all life. Oxygen is also present in many organic compounds. Most organisms use oxygen for respiration. While oxygen (O2) is necessary for life, oxygen as ozone (O3) is highly toxic. On the other hand, ozone is an important component of the atmosphere (the ozone layer) and helps to shield us from harmful ultraviolet rays from the sun.” “Oxygen atoms are present in water (H2O) and water is essential to all life. Oxygen is also present in many organic compounds. Most organisms use oxygen for respiration. While oxygen (O2) is necessary for life, oxygen as ozone (O3) is highly toxic. On the other hand, ozone is an important component of the atmosphere (the ozone layer) and helps to shield us from harmful ultraviolet rays from the sun.”

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK: PLAGIARISM The table is taken from ref [1] and is not cited – this is also plagiarism. Note that the table should have both a table number and a table heading. The table is taken from ref [1] and is not cited – this is also plagiarism. Note that the table should have both a table number and a table heading.

ACCEPTABLE CITATION PRACTICE Note that the citation reads “adapted from…”, because I changed the units from ppb to wt% Note that the citation reads “adapted from…”, because I changed the units from ppb to wt%

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK: PLAGIARISM The sentence should enclose the phrase “convulsions, pulmonary changes and tetrogenic effects” in quotation marks, as it is a direct quotation from reference [1]. Even though the author attributes the information to the correct source, he/she does not indicate that it is a direct quotation. The sentence “To much oxygen causes convulsions, pulmonary changes and tetrogenic effects [1]…” should enclose the phrase “convulsions, pulmonary changes and tetrogenic effects” in quotation marks, as it is a direct quotation from reference [1]. Even though the author attributes the information to the correct source, he/she does not indicate that it is a direct quotation.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK: PLAGIARISM If I find evidence that anyone in the class is guilty of plagiarism, I will report him/her to the Office of Judicial Affairs, and he/she will receive a failing grade in the class. If I find evidence that anyone in the class is guilty of plagiarism, I will report him/her to the Office of Judicial Affairs, and he/she will receive a failing grade in the class.

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 9. Is the essay free of scientific errors? 9. Is the essay free of scientific errors? Yes. Something has to be OK! Yes. Something has to be OK!

THE GRADING QUESTIONS, PLUS FEEDBACK 10. Is the text of the required length – 200 words minimum (the minimum excludes tabular material, references, figure captions, etc.)? 10. Is the text of the required length – 200 words minimum (the minimum excludes tabular material, references, figure captions, etc.)? Yes. The word-count, text only, is 217. Yes. The word-count, text only, is 217.