CW Writing a Horror Story: Introduce a problem Wednesday 17 th October /10/12 Learning Objectives: 1.To be able to use the conventions of dialogue in our own writing. Writing Assessment Foci STARTER: List as many different ways of saying “said” as you can yelled whispered

Learning outcomes CoreExtensionKiller To be able to list synonyms for “said” To be able to use synonyms for “said” to reflect an emotion or action To be able to create an atmosphere through appropriate use of dialogue Write down the underlined words in bold!

All-write-round-robin List as many different ways of saying “said” Consider different emotions. STAND UP TO SHARE

On your whiteboards: What is happening and how is the character feeling? 1.“Who’s there?” she whispered. 2.“But it’s only early yet,” she pleaded 3.“You need to leave now!” he yelled. 4.“It’s beautiful!” she cried. 5.“There’s somebody following us,” John muttered.

Fill in the missing word 1.“Why are you late?” Miss O’Connor _______. 2.“I need to get to London,” Sophie _________. 3.“Chocolate is my favourite treat,” Jack _____. 4.“Look at the end of the garden!” Sam _____. 5.“Wait, it’s almost finished,” Beth ________. BeggedDemanded AnnouncedMurmured SighedAskedWailedLaughed

Learning outcomes CoreExtensionKiller To be able to list synonyms for “said” To be able to use synonyms for “said” to reflect an emotion or action To be able to create an atmosphere through appropriate use of dialogue

Golden Rules of Dialogue 1.All dialogue must be contained in quotation marks. 2.Before the end of the quotation marks, you must punctuate (, ! ?. ) 3.Include dialogue tags – who said what and how 4.New speaker, new line ‘Who’s there?’ Mark whispered desperately. ‘Your worst nightmare!’ replied the figure in a low, menacing voice. ‘Please, I just want to go home,” he begged.

APPLYING THE SKILLS Write three – four lines of dialogue to show either: 1.Two people alone in an abandoned house. 2.Two people caught in a thunderstorm. 3.Two people lost in a forest. Peer Assess: 1.All dialogue contained in quotation marks. 2.Punctuated before the end of the quotation marks (, ! ?. ) 3.Include dialogue tags – who said what and how 4.New speaker, new line WWW: EBI:

Learning outcomes CoreExtensionKiller To be able to list synonyms for “said” To be able to use synonyms for “said” to reflect an emotion or action To be able to create an atmosphere through appropriate use of dialogue

Example of a problem paragraph How can we improve it? (VCOP) Walking towards the old door, I felt scared, but I knew we had to go in. “Hurry up!” Sarah said. “It’s our only choice.” Squeezing the handle, I pulled down and walked in. A light from a candle was burning in the corner of the room. I felt for a light switch, but could feel nothing but wet walls. I held Sarah’s hand. Walking forward, we stopped. “Can you hear that?” I said. “Don’t be silly, there’s nothing there,” Sarah replied. The light flickered more intensively and then out it went. We were placed into darkness...

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Self Assessment: Red Pen Plenary CoreExtensionKiller To be able to list synonyms for “said” To be able to use synonyms for “said” to reflect an emotion or action To be able to create an atmosphere through appropriate use of dialogue WWW: I am happy because I have used.... EBI: Next time I need to....