Full Draft Workshop. Grab ALL Colors of Highlighters (Pink, Yellow, Green). April 28, 2014

Labeling for YOUR PARTNER’s beliefs (wait on the compare/contrast part) Make a key at the top of your paper using your highlighters Sample: Green=Statement (What they believe in response to the prompt questions) Pink=Proof (from his or her own life/world around him or her. This is the answer to why they believe what they do. If they quoted a holy text, you can highlight that pink as well, but they still have to have the part from their own life/world around them in their essay) Yellow=Commentary (explanation of the example from above and how it proves their belief to them) Highlight the body paragraphs for statement, proof, and commentary using your key IN THE MARGINS: WRITE DOWN WHAT YOUR PARTNER IS MISSING

Labeling for compare/contrast Sample: Green=Statement (what their philosopher believes about the topic) Pink=Proof (quote supporting what they said their philosopher believes. They should have TWO of these PER SECTION!) Yellow=Commentary (their explanation of the quote and WHY they agree or disagree with this viewpoint) Highlight the body paragraphs for statement, proof, and commentary using your key IN THE MARGINS: WRITE DOWN WHAT YOUR PARTNER IS MISSING

Prompt Check: Free Will Who controls your future? A greater power? Something else? Are you totally free? Write down any part of the prompt that they are missing (they CAN combine answers depending on what their stance is) Have they included TWO direct quotes from a philosopher or a religious tradition (THAT IS NOT THEIR OWN RELIGION)? Are these correctly cited? When in doubt, write “check citation format.”

Prompt Check: Creation How did we get here? How was the earth formed? Are science and religion compatible? Why/why not? Write down any part of the prompt that they are missing (they CAN combine answers depending on what their stance is) Have they included TWO direct quotes from a philosopher or a religious tradition (THAT IS NOT THEIR OWN RELIGION)? Are these correctly cited? When in doubt, write “check citation format.”

Prompt Check: Afterlife What happens after we die? Is there a heaven and hell? If so, how do you picture them? If not, what do you see instead? Write down any part of the prompt that they are missing (they CAN combine answers depending on what their stance is) Have they included TWO direct quotes from a philosopher or a religious tradition (THAT IS NOT THEIR OWN RELIGION)? Are these correctly cited? When in doubt, write “check citation format.”

Prompt Check: Origin of Morals What came first, religion or morals? Is there a universal moral code? If so, what is included in this universal moral code? How do you know it is universal and what is it based on? If not, how do you determine right from wrong? Why is that your system? Write down any part of the prompt that they are missing (they CAN combine answers depending on what their stance is) Have they included TWO direct quotes from a philosopher or a religious tradition (THAT IS NOT THEIR OWN RELIGION)? Are these correctly cited? When in doubt, write “check citation format.”

Philosopher Check One existentialist One religious/cultural tradition that is DIFFERENT than your partner’s religious/cultural tradition One humanist, scientist, “thinker,” or earlier period philosopher Suggestions: Einstein, Hawking, Rousseau, Locke, Aristotle, Bacon, Chomsky, Descartes, Emerson, Hobbes, Plato, Rand, Spinoza, Schopenhauer, Lao Tzu One of these categories repeated in one of the sections (because you have 4 sections, and 3 options for compare/contrast)

Check Accuracy Does anything look wrong to you? Did they say that existentialists believe in predetermination or that Mill doesn’t care about happiness? Write notes next to anything that looks “off” to you. Does your partner contradict themselves in their paper? Either in the same section or across sections Write notes next to anything that looks contradictory

Get Rid of Fluff If it doesn’t add value to your partner’s essay, cross it out. Any statements that are repetitive (they said the same thing, just phrased differently) Any information that doesn’t connect to the prompt

Check the Introduction’s Grabber Does your partner have one? Is it effective? Did your partner use a random quote that seems out of place? Let him/her know. If your partner starts off with a question, does it work or does it seem out of place or unrelated? Let him/her know. Give an example of a grabber your partner could use.

Introduction What should I talk about? How you came to believe what you believe Upbringing, literature you have read, religion, etc How your understanding of the world has changed over time (remember, philosophical journey) Eventually narrow down to your thesis statement

Thesis Statement Highlight green words in green Check that they are green and NOUNS Answer the prompt: After looking at a variety of different philosophers and my own philosophy, what do I believe? Check thesis against beliefs identified in claims. Does it match or does it contradict what the writer says in the body of the paper? Make sure it isn’t three-prong Shouldn’t just list green words or beliefs Give your partner notes now. Try to write a green word thesis they could use for their paper. REMEMBER: THIS IS A COMPARE/CONTRAST ESSAY

Conclusion What should I talk about? Always go forward in a conclusion Answer Prompt 5 (So what is the point then?) How you think exploring other beliefs has impacted you How you see your philosophy impact the way you live your life in the future

Mechanics Check The moment you’ve all been waiting for! Check for: Comma usage Plural vs. Possessive (peoples vs. people’s, etc.) Capitalization of proper nouns Names (including the singular God) Run-on sentences and sentence fragments Spelling (remember it’s erratic behavior, not erotic behavior) Word choice that isn’t quite right. Calling philosophers by their first name (Sartre, not Jean-Paul). You are not friends. Anything else you see. Even if you aren’t sure, mark it. You know when something doesn’t look or sound quite right. Your partner will know to double-check.

Language Register Check Are they staying in formal register? Look back at notes to check. Can use “I,” “me,” “my,” “our,” and “we” ABSOLUTELY NO “YOU” or “YOUR” Check for casual sounding language. Avoid anything that sounds conversational. Yes, this is about you, but it is still a formal essay. Use a pen or a pencil to circle any register drops and write “register” next to these circled areas.

Devil’s Advocate Time! Swap papers with someone (I suggest you swap with someone you will disagree with) Now go through and argue all of their points. What are holes in their arguments? What are things that they may not have thought about? Be ruthless! Pretend you are that annoying little kid that keeps asking “but why” when somebody explains something. Point out when your partner doesn’t get to the heart of why they believe what they believe. “Because I grew up that way” or “Because it is in my holy text” is not enough. Why, as an adult, do they believe this or agree/disagree with the philosopher.

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