Weeds and Roses

 Yes, the purpose is given to you, but…  What should you do with this?  Which parts are okay to keep word for word?  What do you do with the word for word parts?  Which parts are not? “United States President Abraham Lincoln surprised his audience—which expected a lengthy speech on politics, slavery and states’ rights—with a short speech in which he contemplated the effects of the Civil War and offered his vision for the future of the nation.”

“Abraham Lincoln’s Second Inaugural Address was a very unique speech in that it was not made to talk about politics, but rather to give hope and encouragement to a divided nation battered by a four year long civil war.”  Great sentence, huh? But let’s get picky. How can we make this more clear, less wordy?  Rule of 25 or less.

“Abraham Lincoln’s Second Inaugural Address was a very unique speech in that it was not made to talk about politics, but rather to give hope and encouragement to a divided nation battered by a four year long civil war.” (39 words) “Abraham Lincoln’s Second Inaugural Address was unique; it spoke not about politics, but rather gave hope and encouragement to a divided nation battered by a four year civil war.” (29 words)

 Prompt makes shift in the piece clear: contemplation and vision  You have to find it  Got one, but not the other?  Success of not discussing both sides?

 Same, same, but different from Weed #2  Say more, notice more, discuss more  Remember what we did with Oke piece?

“He uses parallel sentence structure multiple times to achieve these comparisons: ‘All dreaded it, all sought to avert it,’ and ‘but one of them would make war rather than let the nation survive, and the other would accept war rather than let it perish.’ He uses this sentence structure to reflect on the similarities in both parties that caused the war to start. The author is attempting to rid all finger-pointing as to who started the war by parallely comparing both sides, holding them in equal light. This is meant to cause the audience to contemplate the blame that they may be giving.”

“Lincoln further utilizes repition; he sues the word ‘war’ a total of six times in two complex sentences. Lincoln seeks to send his audience thinking as they must contemplate the negative connotation of war in t heir minds. War is often associated with blood and death, so Lincoln’s use of the word sets off a serious tone that could knock the foolishness out of many close- minded people.”

 “If the author had used the word ‘play’ instead of game…”  How many things could the author have done?  What does the prompt ask you to discuss?  Use to help brainstorm, but do not include it in your writing

 Use a colon between an introduction and quote if:  Intro clause is independent  Quote explains intro clause  Ms. K doesn’t like driving in the snow: “My car spun out six times yesterday!”  You try one!

 Nice work including all given information: date, author, title (occasion). This shows you read, understand and realize it’s importance!  Various introductions are working. Check out the difference between these two:

 “On March 4 th, 1865, re-elected President Abraham Lincoln gave his second Inaugural Address. This speech, most expected, was to be long and full of references to politics, slavery and state’s right, but instead, Lincoln gave a speech wash was short and to the point. He first contemplates the effects the Civil War had on our country, it’s people and they way they coincided. A short time later, Lincoln offers his vision for the future. The way in which President Lincoln presents his speech using anaphora, apostrophe and repeated words helps to convey the purpose of the speech to his audience.”

“The Civil War was a war that threatened to tear America apart. It was long and extremely bloody. Death was its middle name. The South fought to keep the slaves; the North fought to free them. President Lincoln fought to keep the Union together, because he saw America as a beacon of freedom for countries that would soon follow in her path. In his second Inaugural Address, President Lincoln used rhetorical strategies to contemplate the Civil War’s effects on America, and to offer a vision for America’s future.”

“President Abraham Lincoln, one of the most celebrated presidents, is well known for his involvement in the Civil War and the emancipation of slaves. He was the man who brought he United States through war and emerged with the Union intact. He liberated millions of men and women who had been oppressed for their entire lives and gave them a chance for a new existence. Yet before his actions became a reality, he had to successfully win the war. In his Second Inaugural Address, Lincoln thoughtfully reflected upon the effects of the war that ravaged the country and also proposed a plan to preserve the Union. Through his use of rhetorical strategies, Lincoln was able to effectively and eloquently convey his message.”

“He uses this allusion to the Bible to emphasize the fact that God has a plan for everyone and those who fight it and commit crimes…will not have as good of a life. Lincoln references God to increase his ethos, because in the late 1800’s most citizens of the United States were God- fearing Christen people who at the time of the war both asked for Him to let their side win. God reminded people of church and a feeling of belonging and togetherness, which made Northerners want to preserve the Union even more, leading to Lincoln’s vision for the future. It also reminded the citizens of all that they had lost to the Civil War and all they could gain back if the Union won.”

“Lincoln continues in a contemplative tone in the following paragraphs when he makes several allusions to the Bible. Lincoln makes a harsh point that of the two sides—North and South— ’Both read the same Bible and pray to the same God.’ Lincoln suggests to his audience that in many ways, one’s enemy is in fact, very similar to oneself. The opposing side is not some abominable monster, but a person, who has fears and quarrels, the same as any other human being.”

 What does “with” mean?  Why is that specific word repeated?  What is that device called when you include extra conjunctions?

 AP Write moved to Wednesday  Two passages to discuss, similar to Oke