1 English 1010 Writing Workshop Spring 2013 Meet twice a week M, Th (Sec.1a) Monday 4:10-6:00 (2-116) Thursday 4:10-6:00 (1-308) Austin Casey Phone: Website: Office Hours: Wednesday 6-8, Thursday (ICB319)

2 English 1010 Writing Workshop Spring 2013 Meet twice a week T, Th (Sec.1b) Tuesday 4:10-6:00 (2-105) Thursday 8:00-9:50 (2-215) Austin Casey Phone: Website: Office Hours: Wednesday 6-8, Thursday (ICB319)

3 Today: HW Due: P Handouts: Homework: Essay 1: Rough Draft (Monday)

Essay 1: Problems 1. Don't use pronouns or linking words in the thesis, it should be a stand alone statement. 2. Single space the heading 3. Make a unique and interesting title

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Descriptive Writing The great thing about descriptive writing is that you get to choose what the topic is going to be and what details you want to include It is up to you. Think about someone or something interesting Remember to set the mood. Make the reader feel the thing you are talking about. Use a lot of adjectives and adverbs p

Strong sensory details (sight, touch, taste, hearing, feelings, thoughts) Sight: Her face looked worn and tired Touch: Her hair was smooth Taste: The pie was tart and sweet Hearing: His voice always sounds rough Feelings: I felt warm around my mother Thoughts: I thought he looked busy

Supporting Evidence p.57 what is good supporting evidence? Vague Support = Not enough information Specific Support = better evidence to support the topic sentence or thesis Example 1: what disturbances? Every age group? Everyone? Example 2: what do you mean messy? Please explain Example 3: moving around? What are they doing? What kind of disturbance? Please explain

Activity: Identify Essay Parts p Work on numbers 1-5 Can you find the topic, thesis and supporting evidence?

Activity: Choose one, write topic, thesis, supporting evidence What is the most important quality of a good friend? What do you think can make friends break up? Why do modern people have fewer friends these days? What do you think of the educational system in your country? How can teachers encourage creativity in students? Who is the most successful person you know? Do you think an adventurous spirit is born or nurtured? What kind of people are more likely to succeed? Who do you admire the most?

Example 1. What is the most important quality of a good friend? Topic: Important quality of friends Thesis: Friendship can teach us the benefits of teamwork, as well as how to get along with others and be successful, therefore trust is an essential quality in a good friend.

Metaphors and Similes Make comparisons of two dissimilar things. Similes use the word as/like Metaphors do not Ex: Simile – Bill was like an annoying bird chirping in my ear Ex: Metaphor – Bill was an annoying bird chirping in my ear

Metaphors and Similes Ex: Simile – Bill ran as fast as a cheetah in the school marathon. Ex: Metaphor – Bill was a cheetah in the school marathon. Similes make the sentence meaning more clear and therefore are used for rare comparisons. Metaphors are more ambiguous and are more poetic.

Common Similes "as old as dirt" "slow as molasses" "white as a ghost". “run like the wind”

Common Metaphors Bill is a pig This room is an oven. = a hot room The crowd began to simmer down. = calm down You are a recipe for disaster = someone who's personality will always cause trouble (note: “recipe for disaster” is a set phrase you cannot change it) A wire is a highway for electrons (it is not actually a highway) Veins are highways for blood The lawyer grilled the witness = the witness felt so hot due to questioning by the lawyer

Very Common Metaphors – Cooking Boiling mad = very angry The netizens flamed Bill on the blog = said bad things about him James cooked Bill = yelled at him He knew that he was going to be toast when he faced his parents

Activity: Make a sentence using: To be boiling mad To flame someone To cook someone To be toast Make a sentence 1-4.

Examples: 1. Jane was boiling mad when she discovered her boyfriend playing badminton with another girl. 2. A hobby of lonely or shy people is often to flame others on internet blogs. 3. The doctor cooked the trainee for making a critical mistake in the medical exam. 4. I'm going to be toast when my father finds out that I missed 2 Biology classes.

Activity – make a metaphor with the following word sets Car, refrigerator Tommy, pig Cindy, mule Bill, glass of water Chad, airplane

Activity – make a metaphor or simile with the following word sets Even though it was a burning hot day, my car was as cool as a refrigerator thanks to the new air conditioner. Tommy is as cute as a pig. Cindy is a mule when it comes to her studies, she won't even take a break to eat lunch until her homework is finished! Bill is as plain as a glass of water. (also pure, boring, dull, transparent) Chad was an airplane in track, gaining the gold medal in running.

24 TOEFL Writing Question 2: Independent Task Essay based on your own personal experience and ideas. Rang of topics – politics, health, economy, business, education, the environment, social issues 30 minutes, 300+ words long. Introduction Body: main part of the essay - should give your reasons with details that support your opinion. Conclusion: restate your view and summarize the reasons you gave to support it.

Activity: Make an Outline (Task 2: independent Task) p.41 is helpful. Some people think that the government should not spend so much money for the space program, and instead should spend the money in other key areas. However, others believe that excelling in space exploration is the key to promoting the government's international image and prestige as well as developing technology. Do you agree or disagree? Introduction (with hook) Thesis _______________________ Body Topic sentence 1 ( with evidence) Topic sentence 2 (with evidence Conclusion Summary

26 Make an outline for Task 2 Intro: paraphrase the question, write your thesis (Topic+Opinion) Body 1: main point Body 2: main point Conclusion: paraphrase the thesis

27 Paraphrase the question: circle key words Some people think that the government should not spend so much money for the space program, and instead should spend the money in other key areas. However, others believe that excelling in space exploration is the key to promoting the government's international image and prestige as well as developing technology. Do you agree or disagree?

28 Paraphrase the question: circle key words 1. the government = national funds 2. space program = exploring the cosmos 3. should spend = should allocate 4. promoting = spreading 5. developing technology = improving society through technology

29 paraphrase When faced with the question of whether or not our government should allocate tax dollars toward space exploration, there are two opposing views. One holds that going to space will increase our technological capacity, while others believe it is a waste of money and it can be used in other ways. I agree that the government should spend time and resources on space exploration because it has numerous benefits.

30 TOEFL: Useful Idioms 1. paint the town red = ? 2. kill two birds with one stone = ? 3. don't cry over spilled milk = ? 4. the early bird catches the worm = ? 5. butterflies in the stomach = ? 6. fish out of water = ? 7. give it a whirl = ? 8. tip of the iceberg = ? 9. black sheep = ? 10. bring home the bacon = ?

31 TOEFL: Useful Idioms 1. paint the town red = have an amazing night around town! 2. kill two birds with one stone = accomplish 2 things at once 3. don't cry over spilled milk = don't worry about a small thing 4. the early bird catches the worm = early person has advantage 5. butterflies in the stomach = nervous 6. fish out of water = in a new environment 7. give it a whirl = give it a try 8. tip of the iceberg = just a small part of the whole 9. black sheep = sb who is different than others in a group 10. bring home the bacon = the bread winner, provide for the family

32 Vocabulary Handout: target words

33 Peer Review Use the rubric, use p Check for: The heading (single space, name, class section, professor, and date) The title (is it interesting?) Paragraph indentations (5 spaces for new paragraphs, or press Tab button) Spelling, grammar, double spaced, 12 point Times New Roman, words Do they have introduction with thesis and hook? Do they have 3 paragraphs body, with 3 topic sentences? Do they have a conclusion with closing statement?

34 Peer Review p.175 Look at “Family Portrait” This is the first draft for “Family Portrait”. The peer review on the left, helps the writer to better develop her ideas. Reader's comments Do you think these are helpful? Most of them ask the writer to describe things better and in more detail

35 Peer Review What is their hook? Circle it. What is their thesis? Circle it. What are their topic sentences? Circle them. What is their topic? Write it. What is their opinion about the topic? Write it. Give them feedback! Help them to correct spelling, or make something more clear.

Journal 1 Do you prefer to shop online or at a real store? Write a short essay comparing and contrasting the experience of shopping at these two different kinds of stores. Use specific reasons and examples to illustrate the stores' similarities and differences. Write 250+ words and make sure there is a thesis, introductory sentence, and concluding sentence

A Nice Story It was a nice day so nice Mary decided to go for a nice walk in the nice park near her nice hotel. She thought it was a nice idea to nicely phone her nice friend Chris so that after their nice walk they could go for a nice coffee in one of the nice cafes which were near the edge of the nice town. The nice neighborhood was nicely famous for nice souvenirs.

A Nice Story Notice the gender neutral name Chris Other gender neutral names are Jamie, Gene and Casey

A Nice Story: Example It was a fine spring day so studious Mary decided to go for a brisk walk in the botanical park near her 5 star hotel. She thought it was an excellent idea to suddenly phone her best friend Chris so that after their power walk they could go for an authentic coffee in one of the traditional cafes which were near the edge of the Italian town. The local neighborhood was especially famous for coffee-related souvenirs.

A Great Story It was a great great day in the great countryside in the great land of greatness. Two great friends decided to greatly eat some great great dishes. However there was a great great man blocking their way. They had to speak to him greatly to greatly calm him down. After several great minutes the great man greatly backed away and greatly said “sorry to disturb you”. The great friends were grateful and greatly continued their great day.

Extra: Read the following slides on your own:

42 Essay 1: Peer Reviews A peer review is when you change essays with a partner and correct each others mistakes and give each other feedback. Check for: The heading (single space, name, class section, professor, and date) The title (is it interesting?) Paragraph indentations (5 spaces for new paragraphs, or press Tab button) Spelling, grammar, double spaced, 12 point Times New Roman, words Do they have introduction with thesis and hook? Do they have 3 paragraphs body, with 3 topic sentences? Do they have a conclusion with closing statement?

43 Essay 2: Goal To inform the reader about something (a person, place, or thing) Try to teach them something interesting Try to use a lot of adjectives and adverbs to describe something in detail

44 Essay 2: Topic examples a person: Someone you know is better. If you don't know them it could be difficult. You will have to describe this person in detail. a place: A place you know is better. Difficult if you haven’t been there. You need to study this place. : a thing: Something you can personally observe. You can see it first hand. You will watch it closely and describe it in detail. Note: Don't use events or subjects.

45 Essay 1: Requirements As always, you will need: : your supporting evidence Facts: your supporting evidence introduction, thesis, 3 paragraphs with topic sentences, and conclusion with clincher statement. Good organization: introduction, thesis, 3 paragraphs with topic sentences, and conclusion with clincher statement. Also good between paragraphs. Also good transitions between paragraphs.

46 Essay 1: Topic: The great thing about descriptive writing is that you get to choose what the topic is going to be and what details you want to include It is up to you. Think about someone or something interesting Remember to set the mood. Make the reader feel the thing you are talking about. Use a lot of adjectives and adverbs p

47 Supporting Evidence: Do p

48 Activity: Homework for Week 4 Homework for Week 4 Essay 1: First 100 words Make sure you print it and bring it to class.

49 Reminder Assignments: You will write 4 essays and make a portfolio. 1. Remembering an Event ( words) Something that happened to you. An interesting event that you remember clearly. 2. Writing a Profile ( words) You will describe something or someone. 3. Proposing a Solution ( words) You will discuss a problem and explain how to fix it 4. Justifying an Evaluation ( words) You will give evidence to support a decision. 5.Portfolio You will choose 5 journal entries to put in your portfolio. 6. Journal Entries These will be given by the instructor. They will cover various topics.

50 Course Schedule: Lesson ALesson B Week 3Essay 1: Profile Week 4Essay 1 First 100 words DuePeer Reviews Week 5Essay 1 Rough Draft Due (550+ words) Journal 1 Due Week 6 Essay 1 Final Draft Due (550+ words) Journal 2 Due

51 Homework: Essay: Rough draft ( words) p activity 1-4 all