  NOT: A girl sat down.  A shy, young girl sat down in the corner on a dirty, brown chair.  An exhausted teenage girl sat down heavily onto the plush recliner and closed her eyes. Add details

  The kindergartener swallowed his cookie.  Snow fell from tree branches. Add details to these sentences.  The famished kindergartener hurriedly swallowed his chocolate chip cookie.  Fluffy white snow fell lightly from tree branches as they waved in the wind.

  NOT: The lady had flowers.  The gardener grew lilies.  The actress carried a bouquet of roses.  The saleswoman held up purple daisies for each customer to see. Be Specific

  In the morning, a dog walked into the building.  A boy said, “I like to play games.”  The girl sat in a chair. Make these sentences more specific:  At dawn, a German Shepherd wandered into the pet shop.  A young man exclaimed, “I enjoy playing Pictionary!”  The ten-year-old plopped onto a sofa.

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 intensely, powerfully, shockingly, richly, immeasurably, unusually very

 amiable, helpful, admirable, comforting, enjoyable, sweet, eye-catching, pleasant, soothing, radiant good

 wicked, evil, merciless, cruel, plotting, hideous, despicable, terrifying, grotesque, horrifying, unbelievable, selfish bad

 overjoyed, pleased, content, delighted, cheerful, laughing, upbeat, positive, elated happy

 depressed, displeased, grieved, distressed, sorrowful, weeping, teary- eyed, heartbroken, heavyhearted, melancholy sad

 bitter, annoyed, fiery, cross, displeased, resentful, raging, wrathful, sullen, indignant, huffy angry

 Assignment: Add 5 details or specifics to this paragraph to improve it. This weekend I visited my grandmother in her town. She baked cookies for me and took me to a store. She bought clothes and books for me. Then, we went to her home and watched movies.