Meeting 2: Tosspon’s English 105 Review Chpt 1: Prewrites Thesis Statements – Chpt 2 Description – Chpt 11 Reading/Writing – Chpt 8

Your Diagnostic Essays Check your . Open the attachment. Review my comments by clicking on “Review” and then clicking “Next” or “Accept” on the menu bar.

Grammar Log For each #’d error (not ALL errors), use the Grammar Log to correct. This is worth 10 points per paper. No errors means you automatically get the 10 points. #6 In the beginning the dog wasn’t sure what he wanted to do. In the beginning, the dog wasn’t sure what he wanted to do. Correct the error Find how to Correct your Errors by using the syllabus (pg 9) and the green handbook.

Common Errors We will be adding these to our weekly lesson Fragments Run Ons Hook/Introductions Wordiness Semicolons ESL? Verb Tense Shifts? See pages (green)

REVIEW CHPT 1 Awesome. PreWrites, etc

When you Write. First: Select a subject Start early Find the best space for you Select something in which you currently have a strong interest Narrow a large topic

Practice a Pre-Write: Looping! Practice B, pg 18 Select two of the large subjects. –With a partner, use looping (described on pg 9) –create a focused topic for 3-5 pg essay How? Freewrite for 5 minutes about the topic. When time’s up, look back for the “center of gravity” sentence. Use that “center of gravity” sentence freewrite THAT as your jumping-off point. Review the 2 nd freewrite. Find another “center of gravity”. Begin a 3 rd Freewrite using that paragraph. How? Freewrite for 5 minutes about the topic. When time’s up, look back for the “center of gravity” sentence. Use that “center of gravity” sentence freewrite THAT as your jumping-off point. Review the 2 nd freewrite. Find another “center of gravity”. Begin a 3 rd Freewrite using that paragraph.

Discover your Audience How to Identify your readers –Who is the audience? –Why are they reading it – what do they hope to gain? –What knowledge does your audience have about the subject? –What is your audience’s attitude towards your subject?

Special qualities of your audience? 1.They don’t like to be bored. (if you are bored writing it, they’ll be bored reading it) 2.They hate confusion and disorder 3.They WANT to think and learn 4.They want to see/feel what YOU see/feel 5.They are turned off by pretentious/phony voices.

Chapter 2 Pg 31

The Thesis What is a working thesis What does a “working thesis” do? Can “Working thesis” change?

JigSaw: group work Each group assigned a section Read the section Explain to the class what it is as group explains, read along, highlight. –We will be playing a game w/ this info Good thesis -States opinion (pg 33) -Asserts 1 idea (pg 33-34) -Has something to say (pg 34-35) -Is limited to fit (pg 35-36) -Clearly/specifically stated (36) -1 st or 2 nd paragraph (36-37) Good thesis -States opinion (pg 33) -Asserts 1 idea (pg 33-34) -Has something to say (pg 34-35) -Is limited to fit (pg 35-36) -Clearly/specifically stated (36) -1 st or 2 nd paragraph (36-37) Avoid Common Errors -Don’t just announce topic -Don’t clutter with “I think” -Don’t just state a fact -Don’t ask it as a question Avoid Common Errors -Don’t just announce topic -Don’t clutter with “I think” -Don’t just state a fact -Don’t ask it as a question

Game! Pin the Thesis Groups each will get a set of thesis statements. Record the #’s you have! Decide which are “adequate” and which are “inadequate” –Use tape to put statements onto the corresponding location. –Be prepared to justify your choice to the class. On 1 page per group, rewrite the inadequate thesis statements.

Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33) States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subject Assert ONE main idea Have something worthwhile to say Limit thesis to fit the assignment State thesis clearly, in specific terms In first or second paragraph.

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Essay Map Use the handout to help you develop a topic. Choose from the list on pg 40 or pg 18. Narrow the topic (what specific related things are you going to talk about, and what is your opinion about it) Take those “reasons” and summarize them in the first 1-2 of paragraphs (map for your reader).

Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33) States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subject/topic Assert ONE main idea Have something worthwhile to say Limited to fit the assignment Stated clearly, in specific terms In first or second paragraph. –1 st Paragraph should be a “hook”

Jeopardy Quiz! jeopardylabs.com/play/heald-english-105-week-22 May get in groups of 4, may use notes/book/syllabus/handouts =D Categories: Syllabus Chapter 1, Chapter 2 Pre-Writing Strategies Classmates

Description: Chpt 11, pg 323 What is description? Read “Tree Climbing” pg 333 What do you notice? How is description used? –each description had a purpose! –Used specific/appropriate details –Vivid descriptions!

Vivid descriptions (pg 326) Sensory details Sight – The clean white corridors of the hospital resembled the set of a sci-fi movie. Sound/Hearing At night, the only sounds … quiet squeakings of sensible white shoes. Smell The green beans … smelled stale and waxy Touch The hospital bed sheets felt as rough and heavy as a feed sack. Taste Every four hours…whose aftertaste reminded me of the stale licorice my great-aunt kept in candy dishes around her house.

Problems to avoid (pg 327) Remember your audience Erratic organization Sudden change in perspective They haven’t seen it! Be specific, not vague (big, beautiful, bad, scary Arrange your details: first to last, left to right, top to bottom, head to foot, the most startling to least, most important to least. Stay consistent – if you’re describing interior or at a distance, stay there or explain the shift. “as the car approached I could see…” etc.

Practice! Paintings tell a Story First, brainstorm what the character(s) may see, feel, hear, smell, taste, touch. Tell the story of this painting (may work in groups or solo). You may use this as a pre-write for your Description Essay. Due next week.

Descriptive Essay: Draft beginning of class next week, 50pts ) Choose a topic from pg –You may propose a topic if none appeal to you. I must approve your proposal. Write a 2-3 pg essay –MLA Format

Prewrite! Use one of the pre-writing strategies from Chpt 1