February 12, 2013  Essay #1 Review  Essay #2 Peer Critique  Assignment ENGLISH 091

Writing should be parallel: Not Parallel: The girl ran and was jumping all around. Parallel: The girl was running and jumping all around. SHOW instead of TELL. Avoid ambiguous words such as STUFF, VERY and THINGS. There are no such words as: theirself, hisself, alright. Write themselves, himself, all right. Do not capitalize subjects like biology, math, science, history. Revision Review

A-lot is two words – very, thing, you, I Avoid beginning sentences with conjunctions (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) Avoid contractions, but if it fits the style, you may use them. There are no such words as: theirself, hisself, alright. Write themselves, himself, all right. The party would (of, have) made me happy. Use the word “finish” instead of “done” Use “who” when referring to people. Revision Review

Avoid overusing these adjectives: Many Pretty Nice/Kind Pleasant Tall/short/fat/skinny Big/little Shimmering Absolutely Same exact Truly unique Quite Funny Many Incredible A lot Bad/good Roaring Interesting Amazing Any

Revision Review Avoid overusing these adverbs: Very So Kind of Really Totally Actually Seems Suddenly Probably Could have Hopefully Just Perfect Viciously Usually

College writing is different from creative or journalistic writing! Do not write the way you speak (should of vs should have) Do not use slang, text-speak, or short-hand Do not expect your reader to know what you mean. Do not write in fragments. Use complete sentences. Do not omit articles and pronouns. Always use Standard Written English (SWE) Revision Review

Bad Habits to Avoid in Academic Writing Second person “you” Inconsistent person Inconsistent tense Abbreviations Do not use: ya, thru, wanna, gonna Do not use: etc., & Avoid ending verbs with “en” or “in” instead of “ing”: waitin, watchen Revision Review

Pronoun/Antecedent Agreement and Reference Pronouns take the place of nouns (he, she, it, they, I, you) The antecedent is the word to which the pronoun refers. For example: Mary went to the store and she bought candy. (Mary is the antecedent for the pronoun she.) Who or That. Who refers to a person, that to a thing/object. “Angela is the girl WHO likes to shop.” Revision Review

Mechanical Rules Numbers – Never begin a sentence with a number.(Spell it out.) MLA and APA style guides state that you spell out numbers 0-9. Revision Review

Commonly Misspelled Words your you’re to too two theretheirthey’re itsit’s quitequiet thanthen whosewho’s Revision Review

Unnecessary Repetition A round circle Refer back An eyewitness present at the scene The whole entire world Repeat that again Revision Review

The Four-Step Peer Critique PART II 1.Review the comments from your peer reviewer. 2.Meet with your peer reviewer for 5 minutes to ask any clarifying questions. 3.TAKE 2: Take 10 minutes and review your comments and add/revise based on what you learned today. 4.Return the paper back to its owner.

Assignment Assignment #1: Assignment #1: Based on the feedback from your peer reviewer, revise ESSAY #1. Include a paragraph that explains the changes you made and why. Your essay MUST be in final draft form. Attach your previous draft and peer critique when you turn it in. DUE DUE: February 19, 2013 (in class) Assignment #2: Assignment #2: You will exchange ESSAY #2 (TRAIT) with a classmate and complete the Four-Step Peer Critique. Your peer critique MUST be detailed, specific, and constructive in order to receive full credit. DUE DUE: February 19, 2013 (in class) We will NOT have class on February 14 th. Take this time to revise your paper and complete your peer critique.