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Basic Information 18 Boy Beijing No.161 High School Class 2 Grade 3 Hobby: playing basketball and listening to music Nickname Who is it ? Favorite singer Amei
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Put the key words into sentences Boy 18 Beijing No.161 High School Class 2 Grade 3 Nickname: Favorite singer: Amei Hobby: playing basketball
Li Zhuoxi is a boy. He is 18 years old. He studies in No.161 High School He is in Class 2, Grade 3. His nickname is His favorite singer is Amei. His hobby is playing basketball. Put the sentences into a paragraph
How to put them into a coherent paragraph? Li Zhuoxi is a boy. He is 18 years old. Li Zhuoxi is a boy and he is 18 years old. Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy.
How to put them into a coherent paragraph? Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy. He studies in No.161 High School He is in Class 2, Grade 3. Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy, who studies in Class 2 Grade 3, No.161 High School.
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Checking Is there a good topic sentence? Is it well organized? Are the ideas clear? Are there any grammatical structures you need to improve? Is the spelling correct? Are the punctuation and capitalization correct?
Possible Version Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy, who studies in Class 2 Grade 3, No.161 High School. As his best friend, I usually call him his nickname,. Frankly speaking, he is lazybones, for he is always late for everything. He hates all the subjects, especially English.
Possible Version Li Zhuoxi is an 18-year-old boy, who studies in Class 2 Grade 3, No.161 High School. As his best friend, I usually call him his nickname,. Frankly speaking, he is lazybones, for he is always late for everything. He hates all the subjects, especially English.
Although he has no interest in study, he is good at singing. In his spare time, he likes playing basketball and listening to popular music. His favorite singer is Amei. In spite of all his shortcomings, he is a kind-hearted person, a person who is always ready to help others. I like him as much as he likes Amei.
Although he has no interest in study, he is good at singing. In his spare time, he likes playing basketball and listening to popular music. His favorite singer is Amei. In spite of all his shortcomings, he is a kind-hearted person, a person who is always ready to help others. I like him as much as he likes Amei.
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Writing in use: What a Sunday! From Monday to Friday, he studies at school, and on Saturday he usually goes to Xin Dong Fang (New Oriental School ) to learn English. Then what does he do on Sunday?
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Writing You write a passage about his Sunday and then give some comments on it.
Possible version For Li Zhuoxi, Sunday doesn’t mean having a rest and doing whatever he likes. On the contrary, it is as busy as the other six days. Early in the morning his father makes him review what he has learned in Xin Dong Fang on Saturday. After breakfast, his father takes him to an art school, where he learns how to draw pictures. In the afternoon, he has to practise playing the piano again and again until his mother feels satisfied. After supper, he has to do his homework until night. What a busy Sunday!
In my opinion, his parents are too strict with him, expecting him to become famous in the future. But it is improper for parents to keep their children so busy that they don’t have any time of their own. (130 words)
Homework Improve your writing and write your final draft. Write a passage about one of your classmates.
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