Do Now #30: Which of the following sentences would work better as a thesis statement? Be prepared to explain your reasons for your choice. Which of the following sentences would work better as a thesis statement? Be prepared to explain your reasons for your choice. A.Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television or film. B.Video games are not as mindless as people think.

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? THESIS Main Idea Logical Center Determines Content Sentence

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? TOPIC TOPIC General General Objective Objective Word or phrase Word or phrase What do you see? What do you see? THESIS THESIS Specific Specific Subjective Subjective Sentence Sentence What are you saying ABOUT what you see? What are you saying ABOUT what you see?

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? TOPIC TOPIC Analogy between his love and summer Analogy between his love and summer Shakespeare compares his love to summer Shakespeare compares his love to summer. THESIS THESIS Shakespeare draws an analogy between his love and summer to develop the timeless nature of her beauty. Shakespeare draws an analogy between his love and summer to develop the timeless nature of her beauty.

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? Effective: Effective: Significance—Why is what you see important? Significance—Why is what you see important? Consequence—What is the effect or result of what you see? Consequence—What is the effect or result of what you see? Reason—Why did the author do this? What is the purpose of what you see? Reason—Why did the author do this? What is the purpose of what you see? Ineffective: Ineffective: Too Factual Too Factual Too Broad Too Broad Too Vague Too Vague

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? Too Factual: The first polygraph was developed by Dr. John A. Larson. Too Factual: The first polygraph was developed by Dr. John A. Larson. Revised: Because the polygraph has not been proved reliable, even under the most controlled conditions, its use by private employers should be banned (Consequence). Revised: Because the polygraph has not been proved reliable, even under the most controlled conditions, its use by private employers should be banned (Consequence).

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? Too Broad: Mapping the human genome has many implications for health and science. Too Broad: Mapping the human genome has many implications for health and science. Revised: Although scientists can now detect genetic predisposition to specific diseases, not everyone should be tested for these diseases. (Significance) Revised: Although scientists can now detect genetic predisposition to specific diseases, not everyone should be tested for these diseases. (Significance)

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? Too Vague: The way the TV show ER portrays doctors and nurses is interesting. Too Vague: The way the TV show ER portrays doctors and nurses is interesting. Revised: The writers of ER dramatize the experiences of doctors and nurses to portray health care professionals as unfailingly caring and noble. (Reason) Revised: The writers of ER dramatize the experiences of doctors and nurses to portray health care professionals as unfailingly caring and noble. (Reason)

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? TopicAngleThesis

Sometimes our words fall short of their mark in expressing our true feelings. When we struggle we often resort to songs or poems. Write an essay in which you compare and contrast a song or poem with that of Shakespeare’s Sonnet 18. Consider the literary techniques each author uses to express the speaker’s feelings towards his or her subject. Sometimes our words fall short of their mark in expressing our true feelings. When we struggle we often resort to songs or poems. Write an essay in which you compare and contrast a song or poem with that of Shakespeare’s Sonnet 18. Consider the literary techniques each author uses to express the speaker’s feelings towards his or her subject.

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? SignificanceConsequenceReason

Exchange your thesis with a partner for review and respond to these questions in writing: 1.D oes the thesis state a significance, a consequence, or a reason? 2.I s the thesis too obvious? If you cannot oppose it, it might be too factual. 3.C an you support the thesis with the evidence available? If it requires a book to prove, it is too broad. 4.I s any language too vague in the thesis? Could it be made more specific?

Aim: How do you compose an effective thesis? A.Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television or film. B.Video games are not as mindless as people think.