1 English 1010 Writing Workshop Spring 2013 Meet twice a week M, Th (Sec.1a) Monday 4:10-6:00 (2-116) Thursday 4:10-6:00 (2-221) Austin Casey Phone: Website: Office Hours: Wednesday 6-8, Thursday (ICB319)

2 English 1010 Writing Workshop Spring 2013 Meet twice a week T, Th (Sec.1b) Tuesday 4:10-6:00 (2-105) Thursday 8:00-9:50 (2-215) Austin Casey Phone: Website: Office Hours: Wednesday 6-8, Thursday (ICB319)

Class Schedule

4 Today: H.W. Due: Grammar Part 3 Personal Statements The Hook in your essay: 5 types TOEFL information + Idioms Make an outline Adjective use (a nice story) Journal introduction Handouts: TOEFL examples (75,90) idioms, vocab handout Homework: Essay 1 – first 100 words, grammar worksheet Part 4, read vocab handout list 1

5 Hook: p The hook is part of your introduction 1.use an anecdote 2. use a riddle 3. use fragment technique 4. use quotations 5. use a shocking statement

Anecdote A short story within an introduction to make the point clear. Example: Sally got out of bed, and looked at the alarm clock. She was running late! She would have to hurry to catch the bus. This was one of those days that she was glad that her school had a uniform policy…she wouldn’t have to waste much time picking out an outfit.

Riddles Get your reader’s attention with a challenging thought. What’s plain, and boring? What makes all students in a school building look the same and lose their individuality? If you guessed UNIFORMS, you’re correct!

Fragment technique Uses 3 short fragments to create an image. Example: A brand new fishing pole, a bucket of worms, and a warm spring day! These things are all useful to catch a big big fish.

Quotations Conversational “Mom, I’ve decided to become a soldier!” Famous Quote "War is nothing without a solider to fight it." - Tom Cruise

Shocking statements Provides statistics or facts that startles readers to pull them into your story. Example Can you believe that over 90% of students at our school don't like the school lunches, but only 5% take the time to make their own lunch?

11 Writing Steps Prewriting (brainstorming) 100 word outline (typed) Rough Draft (revised) Final Draft (with references)

12 Organizing Your Ideas Make an Outline Breeds HealthNutrition Behavior Grooming Dogs

13 Organizing Your Ideas Make an Outline Research Discovery Technology Science

14 TOEFL Writing Question 2: Independent Task Essay based on your own personal experience and ideas. Rang of topics – politics, health, economy, business, education, the environment, social issues 30 minutes, 300+ words long. Introduction Body: main part of the essay - should give your reasons with details that support your opinion. Conclusion: restate your view and summarize the reasons you gave to support it.

15 TOEFL Writing Question 2: Independent Task Grading: organization and language use. Development is how much support do you give to your opinion. Did you give details, examples and reasons? For organization, does your essay make sense? Language use covers grammar, spelling, vocabulary, word choice and sentence structure. Show a range of vocabulary and sentence types.

16 Activity: Make an Outline (Task 2: independent Task) p.41 is helpful. Some people think that strict punishments for driving offenses are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Introduction Hook: catch reader's interest Thesis _______________________ Body Topic sentence 1 ( with evidence) Topic sentence 2 (with evidence Conclusion Summary (General closing remarks)

17 Make an outline for Task 2 Intro: paraphrase the question, write your thesis (Topic+Opinion) Body 1: main point Body 2: main point Conclusion: paraphrase the thesis

18 Paraphrase the question: circle key words Some people think that strict punishments for driving offenses are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety.

19 Paraphrase the question: circle key words Some people think that strict punishments for driving offenses are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others however believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Make synonyms: Ex: 1. strict punishments = severe penalties

20 Paraphrase the question: circle key words 1. strict punishments = severe penalties 2. driving offenses = road infringements, automotive disasters, vehicular incidents, vehicle collisions, car crashes, collision accidents 3. reducing traffic accidents = lowering traffic risks, decrease car crashes 4. effective = useful, adequate, ample 5. improving road safety = guaranteeing safety on the road, enhancing road security, lower the dangers of road traffic

21 paraphrase Various citizens believe that steeper automotive fines are essential to lowering vehicular incidents while others believe there can be other more adequate measures. I support that _____ because ______.

22 TOEFL: Useful Idioms 1. when in Rome, do as Romans do = ? 2. Actions speak louder than words = ? 3. The best of both worlds = ? 4. Cost an arm and a leg = ? 5. Cut corners = ? 6. Sit on the fence = ? 7. Turn your back on = ? 8. Clean up your act = ? 9. Flesh and blood = ? 10. benefit of the doubt = ? 11. a safe bet = ? 12. bread and butter = ?

23 TOEFL HELP Most common idioms: 1. when in Rome, do as Romans do = When in another place, must adapt to local customs 2. Actions speak louder than words = it is better to show me than just tell me, I believe your actions more than your words 3. The best of both worlds = have double advantages (and no disadvantages) 4. Cost an arm and a leg = very expensive 5. Cut corners = when something is done badly to save money Sit on the fence = when someone does not make a choice Turn your back on = give up; abandon Clean up your act = improve your behavior Flesh and blood = family & relatives benefit of the doubt = believe someone without proof a safe bet = probably true, will happen bread and butter = regular income

24 TOEFL HELP Most common idioms: 6. Sit on the fence = when someone does not make a choice 7. Turn your back on = give up; abandon 8. Clean up your act = improve your behavior 9. Flesh and blood = family & relatives 10.benefit of the doubt = believe someone without proof 11. a safe bet = probably true, will happen 12. bread and butter = regular income

25 Vocabulary Handout

26 Writing your essay Steps Directions like this: Decide on your topic. Prepare an outline or diagram of your ideas. Write your thesis statement. Write the body. Write the main points. Write the subpoints. Elaborate on the subpoints. Write the introduction. Write the conclusion. Add the finishing touches.

27 Some DOS and DON’Ts Do: Divide into 5 paragraphs Have a thesis statement in your introduction Come up with 3 main points to support your argument—these will be your 3 body paragraphs Have a conclusion that contains a clincher statement Come up with a catchy title Don’t Begin with “hello my name is___ and I’m going to write about____” Take out the word I (instead of I think we shouldn’t wear uniforms say “Uniforms shouldn’t be required” Be unclear. Show your opinion. Forget to support your opinions with your personal experiences Tips for your Essay 1

28 Peer Review What is their hook? Circle it. What is their thesis? Circle it. What are their topic sentences? Circle them. What is their topic? Write it. What is their opinion about the topic? Write it. Give them feedback! Help them to correct spelling, or make something more clear.

Journal 1 Do you prefer to shop online or at a real store? Write a short essay comparing and contrasting the experience of shopping at these two different kinds of stores. Use specific reasons and examples to illustrate the stores' similarities and differences. Write 250+ words and make sure there is a thesis, introductory sentence, and concluding sentence

A Nice Story It was a nice day so nice Mary decided to go for a nice walk in the nice park near her nice hotel. She thought it was a nice idea to nicely phone her nice friend Chris so that after their nice walk they could go for a nice coffee in one of the nice cafes which were near the edge of the nice town. The nice neighborhood was nicely famous for nice souvenirs.

A Nice Story Notice the gender neutral name Chris Other gender neutral names are Jamie, Gene and Casey

A Nice Story: Example It was a fine spring day so studious Mary decided to go for a brisk walk in the botanical park near her 5 star hotel. She thought it was an excellent idea to suddenly phone her best friend Chris so that after their power walk they could go for an authentic coffee in one of the traditional cafes which were near the edge of the Italian town. The local neighborhood was especially famous for coffee-related souvenirs.

A Great Story It was a great great day in the great countryside in the great land of greatness. Two great friends decided to greatly eat some great great dishes. However there was a great great man blocking their way. They had to speak to him greatly to greatly calm him down. After several great minutes the great man greatly backed away and greatly said “sorry to disturb you”. The great friends were grateful and greatly continued their great day.

34 Activity: Homework for Week 4 Homework for Week 4 Essay 1: First 100 words Make sure you print it and bring it to class.

35 Reminder Assignments: You will write 4 essays and make a portfolio. 1. Remembering an Event ( words) Something that happened to you. An interesting event that you remember clearly. 2. Writing a Profile ( words) You will describe something or someone. 3. Proposing a Solution ( words) You will discuss a problem and explain how to fix it 4. Justifying an Evaluation ( words) You will give evidence to support a decision. 5.Portfolio You will choose 5 journal entries to put in your portfolio. 6. Journal Entries These will be given by the instructor. They will cover various topics.

36 Course Schedule: Lesson ALesson B Week 3Essay 1: Profile Week 4Essay 1 First 100 words DuePeer Reviews Week 5Essay 1 Rough Draft Due (550+ words) Journal 1 Due Week 6 Essay 1 Final Draft Due (550+ words) Journal 2 Due

37 Homework: Essay: first 100+ words due Week 4, rough draft on Week 5 ( words) Grammar Worksheet Part 4