10/21/20151 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Barry Gilmore Hutchison School Memphis, TN Handouts/Presentation: Writing With Audience, Purpose, and Context in Mind Dr. Sue Gilmore MLK Magnet School Nashville, TN

10/21/20152 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context What matters in student writing? The Role of Classroom Discussion Discussion and Questions Content Area and Writing Strategies for Writing Revision

10/21/20153 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context What matters in student writing?

10/21/20154 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Topic Thesis Argument Choice Motivation Discussion Audience Context Style and Tone Content Awareness Flexibility Command Collaboration Rewriting Reshaping Revision Publication Format Technology Input: The Idea Process: Considering Purpose Output: The Product What Matters in Student Writing Make a list: Lovers in literature

10/21/20155 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Starting with Discussion: Surveys

10/21/20156 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Students take the survey Class lines up from Discuss: What do the extremes represent? Which individual items were easiest/hardest to answer? Where did you put a 1 or 5? What does this survey tell us about the class? About ourselves individually? How do these statements relate to scenes or characters in the book? How do they relate to other texts?

10/21/20157 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Sample ninth grade thesis statements 1.While Romeo is captivated by Juliet’s beauty, Juliet is aware that “looking” and “liking” are two different things and that Romeo’s love may not be true. 1.Shakespeare suggests that the older one gets, the more likely one is to see love as a practical arrangement and not an emotional impulse.

10/21/20158 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Brainstorming Categories Happy endings/Unhappy endings Get what they deserve/Don’t get what they deserve Couples/Love triangles Loyalty/Betrayals Books by women/books by men

10/21/20159 Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Books My Students Are Discussing Now

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context What matters in student writing? The Role of Classroom Discussion Discussion and Questions Content Area and Writing Strategies for Writing Revision

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context What matters in student writing? The Role of Classroom Discussion Discussion and Questions Content Area and Writing Strategies for Writing Revision Names are a very important part of one’s personality. The name Sarah, for instance, come from the Bible. This shows that names have a long tradition for many people. Tradition helps to determien the adult one becomes.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context In regards to the object I would bring to college with me, I have chosen the cork bulletin board that hangs on the wall above my bed. This object may seem to be just a bunch of simple words and pieces of paper to the casual observer, but due to a large number of years during which the bulletin board has been collecting scraps and mementos of my life, it has become a meaningful repository of memories that I treasure. There are a pictures, concert tickets, and even immature love letters, all of which are like a puzzle that together forms the pieces of my life. Knowing its with me, college will be easier to take and I won’t feel homesick, but instead I will look forward to the new tacks, nametags and bumper-stickers I can fill it with depending on my future.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Re-examining vision: topic, approach, voice, point of view, direction Revisiting organization: structure, order, argument Editing for style: reconsidering syntax, imagery, clarity Proofreading: grammar The Revision Cone

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10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context It was the playbill that won the first tack in the cork board; “The Phantom of the Opera” inspired me not only to seek out the ones refused compassion from the world, but also to learn the ways of the theatre, to desire to create the next Don Juan who would bring the ghosts of people’s hearts up from the basements to the center stage. Then, rolling across the board, a time-stream of pictures: friends, family, boys, better times. The one my eyes always find amidst the multitude is of a young girl and a handsome boy, his arms wrapped around her with a smile and glowing face, the same tack pinning down a ticket to a concert, a first date, a first kiss.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context The simple words, the simple pieces of paper, the simple incidents that make a person; how can someone put into words the colorfulness of the mind and soul without showing the cork board, filled with not only thousands of tacks, but empty holes, from papers taken out and never replaced? Try reading between the lines of immature love letters, asking what happened at the birthday parties, concerts and movies after reading the invitations and tickets, studying the expressions of faces in the dozens of pictures, attending the various conventions commemorated by nametags, laughing at all the cheap bumper-stickers with mind-provoking sayings, or crying on the drawings from appreciative camp children. Here before me, staring me in the face at every break and eve, is all the inspiration I need to fit together the puzzle of my life: just a smaller piece of the puzzle I will find myself connected to when my new cork-board is being filled on the first day of college.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Ideas for Modeling Mark and share in pairs Mark and share—raising hands Mark and share—choral reading Dividing up sentences Color marking

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context More General Strategies Metacognition Include revision in assessment Limited focus revision Shorten the word count Typing Discuss the audience (and provide one)

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Names are a very important part of one’s personality. The name Sarah, for instance, come from the Bible. This shows that names have a long tradition for many people. Tradition helps to determien the adult one becomes.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context My name is Sarah. It’s a name from the Bible, but that’s not why I like it. I love my name because it rolls on your tongue, because my mother gave it to me as a gift, and because it ends with the sound you make when you see a beautiful mountain or sunrise. I like to think of my mother holding me after I was born, looking down at me wrapped up like a present and saying my name: Sarah. I don’t know what the grown-up Sarah looks like yet, just like I don’t know what grown-up Sarah does for a job, where she lives, or whether she has a family of her own. When she looks back, I don’t know what she’ll remember about me. But we’ll have one thing in common: a name.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Dear Joel, Did you know that my name comes from the Bible? Actually, I’m not sure who Sarah was, but my mom told me she learned about my name in Sunday School when she was a kid. Sarah

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Dear Sarah, That’s cool. Joel is a religious name, too. It means God. So I’m like God, only I don’t really think that so don’t think I’m full of myself please. You should find out more about your name. Let me know if you do. Your friend (but not God), Joel

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Hey Joel, I don’t think your God either. Sarah P.S. Hey I’m just kidding and I think Joel is a cool name.

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Sarah. HA HA HA. I just asked Ms. R about you’re name and she says Sarah was Abraham’s wife and she had a baby when she was 90!!! I don’t know who Abraham was, though, but he’s in the bible too. You should write about that. Joel

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context That’s a good idea but I don’t want to have a baby when I’m 90 because I couldn’t pick it up or something. Babys are gross anyway. Do you want babies someday? Sarah

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Dear Sarah, No way. Joel

10/21/ Gilmore & GilmoreWriting for Audience, Purpose, and Context Barry Gilmore