GOOD MORNING! “One day I will find the right words, and they will be simple.” ~Jack Kerouac 28 Oct Please pick up a folder from the table, and write down the learning target in your notebook Learning Target: List this week’s steps for completing your portfolio piece

Agenda 10/28/13  Senior Project Proposal Follow Up  Grade Lit Crit quiz  Bellwork  Review plan for the week  Portfolio organization time Homework reminder: Be ready to bring a copy of your portfolio piece selection for editing during class on TUESDAY

Senior Project Proposal Follow Up  Are you approved? WOO HOO! 20 points have been added the grade book.  Upload your FINAL approved proposal to Google Drive (don’t convert!)  Place your PAPER copy of the approved proposal in your classroom portfolio folder  Fill out the Google Form with the information about your proposal (see next slides!)  Start logging hours on your Google Drive document! Remember, update as you do the hours…don’t wait until the first hour log check to do this!

Not Approved?  Chat with me if you are unclear about what the issue is or how to fix it.  Fix those issues, and bring your old copy AND your new copy to Mrs. Downs for approval.  Bring the approved copy to me, and I’ll update your grade in the gradebook  Do this all by THIS FRIDAY, Nov. 1 st, and then follow the “woo hoo, you’re approved!” directions

Grade quizzes~  In a group of 3-4:  Read through your answers  IN A DIFFERENT COLOR PEN/PENCIL, add anything to your answers you can to make them “full credit” answers  Talk to each other, review your notes, and ask me questions if you are not sure about your answers  You’ll turn these BACK in at 10:25

Bellwork10/28/13  What’s your usual revision process for a piece of writing? Who helps you, or how do you help yourself?  If not required by a teacher, would you usually skip a rough draft and go right for the final? Why?

Revision  “If a teacher told me to revise, I thought that meant my writing was a broken-down car that needed to go to the repair shop. I felt insulted. I didn't realize the teacher was saying, "Make it shine. It's worth it." Now I see revision as a beautiful word of hope. It's a new vision of something. It means you don't have to be perfect the first time.” ~Naomi Shihab Nye  “Only a mediocre person is always at his best. ” ~W. Somerset Maugham  “The first draft of anything is s***.” ~Ernest Hemingway

The week’s plan  Work hard on your writing this week! This draft is you showing the best you can possibly do given the time to edit and revise.  The actual paper copy of your updated essay is due at the beginning of class Friday (attach all previous versions/editing/charts)  We’ll be in Lab 100 Wednesday and Thursday  We’re getting Googly with it! (na na na, na na na na….)  Create a folder in your Google Drive titled “Writing Portfolio”  Save the finalized essay in there  Share it with me! (Note this is for storage and later sharing-this is not the one I’m grading…don’t forget the paper copy due at the beginning of class Friday!)  Follow the link on my blog to your online reflection question survey (due by the end of the day Friday…but don’t forget!)

What are the steps? 1. Choose which piece you’re going to revise (bring it to class Tuesday) 2. Create a plan for improvement (in class Tuesday) 3. Implement specific strategies for improving your writing (In and out of class Tuesday-Thursday) 4. Produce an updated copy of your writing demonstrating growth in one or more areas (due at the beginning of class Friday!) Learning Target: List this week’s steps for completing your portfolio piece

Portfolio Folder Organization  Write your name on a label  Put the label on your folder  Put your folder in a folder and update the name label.  What should you keep in your portfolio folder:  Pink writing handout  Yellow portfolio growth chart  Any pieces of writing you work on during the year (remember to include drafts!)  This is also a smart place to keep any paperwork for your senior project!

Portfolio Growth Chart  Copy down the details from the example, and think through how you can fill in the remaining sections for your own work!

How to improve particular traits  Look at your pink handout “Traits of Strong Writing”  Look at the “DPA” rubric. Where do you think you need the most help?  Have your partner read the work-what’s strong, what’s an area of growth?  Remember…it doesn’t have to be “bad” to be “better!”  Think about solutions-this is a ask for advice step!  Use the handout from today to help here  Links to various helpful tools for specific categories of improvement are listed on my blog!

Your plan for improvement chart  Create this chart in Word/Excel, or just do it on notebook paper  Should include multiple examples of problems and solutions, with plentiful evidence supporting your fixes  Will be turned in along with your portfolio piece

Plan for Improvement  Once you’ve chosen your writing to revise, make this chart (how many lines will depend on your writing, but should be at least 3) ProblemSolutionEvidence

Example ProblemSolutionEvidence Confusing sentence structures that are kind of “rambly” -Read the sentences out loud -Cut out prepositional phrases to make sentence more direct Before: “O’Brien, in his novel, shows the reader, through his choices, how it felt to be in war, in Vietnam.” After: “In The Things They Carried, O’Brien communicates what it felt like to be in the Vietnam War.”