Unit 1 Women of achievement

Stephen Hawking Jay Chou Who is the person you admire most and why? +people around you

Structure: (Part1): (Part2): (Part3): （ background/achievement/appearance... ） Reasons why you admire him/her Evaluatio n (What you think of him/her) Title: The Person I Admire Most An introduction to the person. *Ordinary people: character and examples *Famous people: achievement and spirit

Let’s make comments ( 评论 ) according to the following assessment ( 评价标准 ) ！ A student’s sample

The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. He likes singing and surfing the Internet. Liu Xiang like sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. He trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His succeed makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. 评价标准 Assessment YesNoTake notes Structureparagraphing topic sentence X His spirit and......

The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. He likes singing and surfing the Internet. Liu Xiang like sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. He trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His succeed makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. Contentto the point details stated X He likes singing and surfing the Internet.

The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. Liu Xiang like sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. He trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His succeed makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. Language correct tense correct spelling modifying words linking words X liked success but However and At first In the end In a word liked X but, however, and, at first, in the end confident, deeply,... success

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Post-writing 1.Peer assessment ( 同伴评价 ) Exchange your writing with your partner, make comments and fill in the form ( 表格 ). Rewrite!

The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. As far as I know, Liu Xiang liked sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. Besides, he trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His success makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. The 2nd draft Language advanced vocabulary （高级词汇） was crazy about It is his spirit and great determination that inspire me most. Only with this spirit can we achieve our goals in life. various sentence patterns （多样化句型）

Post-writing 2. Group assessment ( 小组评价 ) Choose one article and share it in groups of 3. Languageadvanced vocabulary various sentence patterns Rewrite! If yes, underline with “ ”. If need improving, underline with “ ”.

3. Teacher assessment ( 教师评价 ) I’ll make comments and grade( 定档 ) it. ASSESSMENT (for 3rd draft) 【各档次的给分范围和要求】 第五档 ( 很好 ): (13-15 分 ) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或 较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第四档 ( 好 ): (11-12 分 ) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 虽漏掉 1 、 2 个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较 复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 6. 达到了预期的写作目的。 第三档 ( 适当 ): (8-10 分 ) 1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 6. 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。

The Person I Admire Most In my life there are many people who are really worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. It is his spirit and great determination that inspire me most. As far as I know, Liu Xiang was crazy about sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. Besides, he trained very hard. In the end, he keeps the best record of seconds in 110- meter hurdles until now. His success makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. Only with this spirit can we achieve our goals in life. The 3rd draft 第五档 ( 很好 ): (13-15 分 ) 1. 完全完成了题目规定的任务。 2. 内容要点清晰。 3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 4. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 5. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 教师评价 ( 定档 grade) 第五档 ( 很好 ): 13 分

Homework: 1.Gather useful sentences about describing people. 2. Hand in the 3rd draft after class!

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