如何增强书面表达的效果如何增强书面表达的效果

江苏高考英语书面表达的评分标准： 第五档（很好）（ 21 － 25 分）： 覆盖所有主要内容；应用了较多的语法结构和 词汇；语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为 尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；应用 简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑； 达到了预期的写作目的。

1. 使用较高级的词汇 3. 使用恰当的连接词 词汇反映你知识贮存量的 多少，也是衡量英语水平 的一个重要标志。 运用得当的句子结构可以 给文章增色不少，从而使 整篇文章因此而生辉 。 使用恰当连接词，对写一 篇有 “ 英语味 ” 的文章很重 要，能使文章上下衔接自 然、紧凑。 增强语言表达效果增强语言表达效果 2. 使用较丰富的句式

1. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. 2.Suddenly I thought out a good idea. 3.The students there needn’t pay for their books. 4. So the plan was a failure. The plan turned out to be a failure. Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable. 一、使用较高级的词汇 A good idea occurred to me./ A good idea suddenly struck me. Books are offered for free to the students there. All of a sudden, a good idea flashed into my mind. Free books are available here for the students. As a result/consequence, the plan was a failure.

5. Our school is at the foot of the hill. 6. She went to Austria in order to study music. 7. We human beings should live peacefully with animals. 8.In our school, there are twenty-six classes. 9.You can find my house easily. She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music. Our school is located at the foot of the hill. Our school is made up of / consists of twenty–six classes. You’ll have no trouble / difficulty finding my house. You can find my house without any difficulty. We human beings should live in harmony with animals.

1 The place is well known for its nice lakes. Its water is clear and looks colorful.( 使用定语从句 ) 2. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things. （使用名词 性从句） 3. Though I’m weak, I’ll make great efforts to do it. ( 使用倒装句 ) 4. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.( 使用强调句型 ) 5. I passed the physics exam because of your help.( 用虚拟语气） The place is well known for its nice lakes, whose water is clear and looks colorful. What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things. 二、使用较丰富的句式 Weak as I am, I’ll make great efforts to do it. It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened. I couldn’t have passed the physics exam but for/ without your help.

6. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. ( 使用 with 复合结构 ) 7. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用 V-ing 形 式 ) 8.The driver escaped and left the old man lying on the ground.( 使用非 谓语 ) 9 ． He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. ( 使用倒装句 ) No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. Singing and laughing, they went back to school. The driver escaped, leaving the old man lying on the ground. She walked out of the lab with many students following her.

三、使用恰当的连接词 逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇 列 举 型列 举 型 对 称 型对 称 型 转 折 型转 折 型 因 果 型因 果 型 条 件 型条 件 型 让 步 型让 步 型 递 进 型递 进 型 见 解 型见 解 型 first (ly); to begin/ start with; second (ly) ;finally, above all, in the end, meanwhile, eventually on one hand, on the other hand ; on the contrary, for one thing, for another thing; but, however, while, though, nevertheless, otherwise because, since, thanks to, as a result/ consequence as / so long as, on condition that, unless, provided (that) though, as, even if/though, whether, while who (what, when, where )ever what’s more, besides, in addition (to), moreover as well (as), to make the matter worse, what’s worse personally speaking, in one’s opinion/ view,to one’s mind

1. 书籍就像好的朋友。它能帮助我们更好的了解世界，有助 于开拓我们的视野。因此，尽可能多读书对我们大有裨益。 2. 然而，任何事物都有两面性，这也不另外。电视对我们 也有危害。 Just like good friends, books can make us have a better understanding of the world. What’s more, they help to broaden our horizons. Therefore, reading as many books as possible is of great benefit to us. However / Nevertheless, every coin has its two sides and this is without exception. TV can do some harm to us as well. 三、使用恰当的连接词优化段落

3. 我们的生活发生很大变化有三个原因 : 一是人们 的生活水平已大大改善 ; 其次, 多数人有好的收入, 付得 起需要和想要的 ; 另外, 越来越多的人想尽情地享受生活。 There are three reasons for the changes that have taken place in our life. Firstly, people’s living standard has been greatly improved. Secondly, most people are well paid, and they can afford what they need or like. Last but not least, more and more people prefer to enjoy their life to the fullest.

4. 和汽车相比，自行车有它的优点。它不消耗自然资源；它不 会导致污染问题；最为重要的是，它还会对你的健康有益。 Compared with cars, bicycles have several advantages as follows. On one hand, they do not consume natural resources. On the other hand, they will not bring about pollution problem. Most importantly, they contribute to people’s health by giving them a lot of physical exercise.

联合国教科文组织某考察团正 在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是 接待人员, 请根据下列提示以发言 稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况： 1) 大小：近 100 户人家，约 500 口人。 2) 变化：过去很穷， 78 年后变 化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。 现已旧貌换新颜。 3) 教育：原来的学校很小，现 已经过改建。新建的教学楼有 4 层， 是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄 儿童在此免费就读。 注意： 1 ）要点齐全，前后连贯。 2 ）词数： 120 左右。 四、优化篇章 Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school.This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. The school here was very small. Now it has been rebuilt. The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys. It is the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age children can study here. They enjoy free education in it. Thank you. (words:88)

Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school! This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. ① This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② However, it has changed a lot since 1978 ③ and has been developing very fast. People here ④ live a much better life than before. Now it is taking on a new look.

In the past, the school here was very small.Now it has been rebuilt. The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys. It is the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age children can study here. They enjoy free education in it. Thank you. In the past, the school here was very small ⑤ and most children couldn’t afford to go to school. ⑥ But now it has been rebuilt ⑦ and ⑧ which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. ⑨ What’s more, they enjoy free education. ⑩ May you enjoy your stay here the newly built teaching building / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you.

Ladies and gentlemen, Welcome to our school ! ① This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② However, it has changed a lot since 1978 ③ and has been developing very fast. ④ People here lead a much better life than before. Now it is taking on a new look. In the past, the school here was very small ⑤ and most children couldn’t afford to go to school. ⑥ But now it has been rebuilt ⑦ and the newly built teaching building, ⑧ which has 4 storeys,is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school- age children can study here. ⑨ What’s more, they enjoy free education. ⑩ May you enjoy your stay here / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you.

考场高分范文赏析 ( 1) （江苏 06 高考试题： 24 分） To begin with, it’s a basic requirement for volunteers to be polite to everyone, especially to the foreign visitors. Secondly, they’d better hold on to their jobs. As is known to all, China is a country with a long history. So it is the volunteers’ obligation to introduce China’s history and culture to the foreigners. On the other hand, volunteers should avoid behaving improperly. They shouldn’t forget to shoulder their responsibilities. Last but not least, they shouldn’t spoil our country’s image. If I have the honour to be chosen as a volunteer, I’ll spare no pains to practise my oral English. Besides hard and creative work, I’ll take the golden opportunity to make people from all over the world know China more. (words: 122)

考场高分范文赏析 ( 1) To begin with, it’s a basic requirement for volunteers to be polite to everyone, especially to the foreign visitors. Secondly, they’d better hold on to their jobs. As is known to all, China is a country with a long history. So it is the volunteers’ obligation to introduce China’s history and culture to the foreigners. On the other hand, volunteers should avoid behaving improperly. They shouldn’t forget to shoulder their responsibilities. Last but not least, they shouldn’t spoil our country’s image. If I have the honour to be chosen as a volunteer, I’ll spare no pains to practise my oral English. Besides hard and creative work, I’ll take the golden opportunity to make people from all over the world know China more. (words: 122)

五、考场高分范文赏析 ( 2) (04 浙江高考试题： 23 分 ) Dear Steve, Thank you very much for your last letter, asking me something about how to choose a dictionary for learning Chinese. Here I strongly recommend you the following two which may be useful to you. One of them is the English-Chinese/Chinese-English Dictionary, which will cost you 52 yuan. It contains some 18,000 English words and 20,000 Chinese words. With lots of examples showing how to use the words, it will be much valuable for the beginners like you. The other one, Xinhua Dictionary, which charges you only 11 yuan and has a collection of 10,000 Chinese words. It is the most commonly used one in China. If you need my help with your Chinese please don’t hesitate to write to me. (120 words)

考场高分范文赏析 ( 2) Dear Steve, Thank you very much for your last letter, asking me something about how to choose a dictionary for learning Chinese. Here I strongly recommend you the following two which may be useful to you. One of them is the English-Chinese/Chinese-English Dictionary, which will cost you 52 yuan. It contains some 18,000 English words and 20,000 Chinese words. With lots of examples showing how to use the words, it will be much valuable for the beginners like you. The other one, Xinhua Dictionary, which charges you only 11 yuan and has a collection of 10,000 Chinese words. It is the most commonly used one in China. If you need my help with your Chinese please don’t hesitate to write to me. (120 words)

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