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请根据下面六幅图的提示和所提供的主题句，写一篇题 为 “ Changes in Our Life ” 的英文短文。词数 100 左 右。（ 2004 年北京春） 开头已为你写好： Over the past twenty years or so, great changes have taken place in our life. Take my family for example. ______________________ ________________ 内容要点 文章结构 时态 中心话题 人称 文体

change 内容要点 文章结构 时态 中心话题 人称 文体 the simple present tense; the simple past tense the first person Comparative composition

过去现在 1. 寄信打电话 2. 听收音机看电视 3. 住房拥挤住房宽敞 内容要点

Point-by-Point Structure A – PastB – Present 1 A – Past B – Present 2 A – PastB – Present 3 Contacting others Getting information Housing conditions

Over the past twenty years or so, great changes have taken place in our life. Take my family for example. My parents contacted others mainly by sending them letters in the past, but now we call long distance at home. And once my parents listened to the radio for news and other information, but now we watch the news and other programs on TV. Another change is in the housing conditions. When they got married about twenty years ago, my parents lived in a small room crowded with furniture, but now we have moved into a big new three-room apartment. In short, changes in our life in the past twenty years have brought us comfort and convenience. Changes in our life

Over the past twenty years or so, great changes have taken place in our life. Take my family for example. My parents contacted others mainly by sending them letters in the past, but now we call long distance at home. And once my parents listened to the radio for news and other information, but now we watch the news and other programs on TV. Another change is in the housing conditions. When they got married about twenty years ago, my parents lived in a small room crowded with furniture, but now we have moved into a big new three-room apartment. In short, changes in our life in the past twenty years have brought us comfort and convenience. Changes in our life

Outline Topic sentence: Support 1 contacting others in the past now Support 2 getting information once now Support 3 Another change is in the housing conditions when they got married twenty years ago, now Conclusion: great changes have taken place in our life. contacted others mainly by sending them letters we call long distance at home listened to the radio for news and other information we watch the news and other programs on TV lived in a small room crowded with furniture we have moved into a big new three-room apartment changes in our life in the past twenty years have brought us comfort and convenience.

Over the past twenty years or so, great changes have taken place in our life. Take my family for example. My parents contacted others mainly by sending them letters in the past, but now we call long distance at home. And once my parents listened to the radio for news and other information, but now we watch the news and other programs on TV. Another change is in the housing conditions. When they got married about twenty years ago, my parents lived in a small room crowded with furniture, but now we have moved into a big new three-room apartment. In short, changes in our life in the past twenty years have brought us comfort and convenience. Changes in our life

Remember these words and phrases that can help you make a contrast: but\ however\ while, on the contrary, on the other hand, compared with…, be different from, unlike… in contrast, take … for example 常用关联词：

1.My parents contacted others mainly by sending them letters in the past, but now we call long distance at home. 2. And once my parents listened to the radio for news and other information, but now we watch the news and other programs on TV. 3. When they got married about twenty years ago, my parents lived in a small room crowded with furniture, but now we have moved into a big new three-room apartment. 巩固句型

4 4. I used to go to school by bike, but now I prefer to walk with my friends. 5. I no longer stay up late, on the contrary, I go to bed at 10 pm. 6. I used to write letters to my friends, but now I send them s 7. Tom liked to collect stamps when he was young, although now he enjoys climbing. 8. We played basketball in the past, while we play football now.

1. 过去, 我周末还要写许多作业, 上课 ; 4. 过去, 晚上我要学习到深夜 I used to have to work even at weekends doing endless homework and attending classes as well. In the past I had to work far into the night, 2. 现在我有自己的时间了 Now I have more free time. I can follow my own interests such as reading books, visiting museums, and taking computer lessons. 3. 现在我能做些自己喜欢的事了，读书、参观博物馆或 是学电脑 5. 现在我可以看电视新闻读报, 而且还能很早睡觉. Now I can watch news on TV or read newspapers. What's more, I can go to bed earlier. Translation

practice 假设你是李华，你的澳大利亚朋友 Dick 听说中国的中小学正 在减轻学生的学习负担，来信询问有关情况。请你根据下表 提供的信息，写一封回信，谈一谈减负给你的学习和生活带 来的变化。 (01 全国高考 ) 注意： l ．词数 100 左右； 2 ．开头已为你写好。 生词：减轻学习负担一 reduce learning load Dear Dick, How nice to hear from again

change 内容要点 文章结构 时态 中心 人称 文体 the simple present tense; the simple past tense the first person Comparative composition

过去现在 写作业，上课参观，学习 写作业看课外读物 熬夜早睡觉 内容要点

Outline Topic sentence: Support 1 in day time in the past now Support 2 in the evening in the past now Support 3 at night in the past now Conclusion: great changes have taken place in our life at weekends. did homework, attended class read books, visit museums, and take computer lessons did homework watch the news on TV and read newspapers happy, a better life, enjoy learning … stayed up into night go to bed earlier

Writing the composition

Evaluation: Questions Your evaluation ( 评价 ) Is there a right topic?Yes No Is the person right? Yes No Is the tense right?Yes No Does the composition have a good structure Yes So-so No How is the language?Excellent Good Acceptable How is the handwriting?Excellent Good Acceptable Underline any words, expressions or phrases you like.

Dear Dick, How nice to hear from you again. You want to know what is going on in schools in China? In short, things have begun to improve since schools were called on to reduce learning load. I don't know about others, but I used to have to work even at weekends doing endless homework and attending classes as well. Now I have more free time. I can follow my own interests such as reading books, visiting museums, and taking computer lessons. In the evenings I can watch news on TV or read newspapers. What's more, I can go to bed earlier. As far as I know, everyone is happy about this new arrangement of things. Best wishes,

（ 2001 ）假设你是李华在一所中学读书。最近收到美国朋友 Smith 先生的来信，希望了解学校变化情况，给他写回信介绍变化。 老教学楼 新操场 老教学楼 Homework