Issue 1- Essay Help

2011 Question: How important was the role of popular pressure in spreading democracy in Britain between 1851 and 1928?  popular pressure is the identified factor -Remember to always refer to the question in your essay. Since it is asking about the role of popular pressure, a paragraph on popular pressure should follow the introduction. Referring to the question and answering the question is vital in gaining analysis marks in every paragraph. - When writing the whole of your essay, you must have a logical order for your body paragraphs. For example, after your second paragraph on pressure groups, order the factors in your body paragraphs from strongest to weakest.

Introductions Sentence 1: Background -Give a general statement about democracy in Britain between 1851 and Between 1851 and 1918, Britain…. Sentence 2: refer to the question and state the level of significance of the identified factor -It has been argued that popular pressure was a significant reason for the spread of democracy, however it will be argued that…

Introductions Sentence 3: Which factor is of greatest importance? -If the factor of greatest importance is the identified factor, sentence 3 is the on the next strongest factor. However, the factor of greatest importance was… Sentence 4: which factor is next in the hierarchy? A factor of great importance was… Sentence 5: which factor is next in the hierarchy? A factor of moderate importance was…

Sentence 6: which factor is next in the hierarchy? A factor of lesser importance was… Sentence 7: which factor is next in the hierarchy? The factor of least importance was… Sentence 8: The final sentence of your intro is the thesis sentence. Here you will state your answer to the question as well as the factor you believe is the most important. Although pressure groups are of ________ importance, the factor of greatest importance was….

Section 1 Opener: state the level of significance of the identified factor. (use the same or similar sentence from your intro). Sentence 2: offer an example from your notes to achieve ku marks. This is an example of how pressure groups led to the spread of democracy. You must have names, dates, places to achieve ku marks. Sentence 3: explain why this example is relevant

Sentence 4 and 5: state your opinion on this example, mentioning why it is strong and/or weak. Use evidence from your notes. You must state your opinion towards the evidence, or lack of evidence. Evidence indicates that… Due to the lack of evidence, it can be said that… However, this is a weak argument because…. This offers a strong argument because… Therefore…

Sentences 6 and 7: Here, add in the opinions of historians (known as historiography). Also, state what you think about the opinions of these historians. If you have no historiography for this section, skip this. Sentence 8 and 9: Answer the question and state your argument. By now you have come to a conclusion about whether or not the identified factor is strong or weak.

Section 2 Opener: state the level of significance of your strongest factor. (use the same or similar sentence from your intro). Sentence 2: offer an example from your notes to achieve ku marks. This is an example of how your strongest factor led to the spread of democracy. You must have names, dates, places to achieve ku marks. Sentence 3: explain why this example is relevant

Sentence 4 and 5: state your opinion on this example, mentioning why it is strong and/or weak. Use evidence from your notes. You must state your opinion towards the evidence, or lack of evidence. Evidence indicates that… Due to the lack of evidence, it can be said that… However, this is a weak argument because…. This offers a strong argument because… Therefore… - mention both strengths and weaknesses if they exist

Sentences 6 and 7: Here, add in the opinions of historians (known as historiography). Also, state what you think about the opinions of these historians. If you have no historiography for this section, skip this. Sentence 8 and 9: Answer the question and state your argument. Say why this factor is stronger than the identified factor.

Section 6 Opener: state the level of significance of your weakest factor. (use the same or a similar sentence from your intro). Sentence 2: offer an example from your notes to achieve ku marks. This is an example of how your weakest factor led to the spread of democracy. You must have names, dates, places to achieve ku marks. Sentence 3: explain why this example is relevant

Sentence 4 and 5: state your opinion on this example, mentioning why it is strong and/or weak. Use evidence from your notes. You must state your opinion towards the evidence, or lack of evidence. Evidence indicates that… Due to the lack of evidence, it can be said that… However, this is a weak argument because…. This offers a strong argument because… Therefore…

Conclusions Sentence 1: Restate your thesis Sentence 2: discuss your opinion from section 1 of your essay Sentence 3,4,5,6,7: discuss your opinion from each section. SOMEWHERE in your conclusion, you must offer the strengths and weaknesses of one of the sections. If you do not, you cannot receive 4/4 for structuure