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**Thanks to the Purdue OWL

 Using fewer, more effective words to get across your main point  Replace vague words with more specific, powerful words  Global v. Local Revision

 WORDY: Working as someone who flips burgers was an experience that really helped me learn a lot. (16 words)  CONCISE: Working as a burger flipper was an educational experience. (9 words)

 WORDY: The teacher demonstrated some of the various ways and methods for cutting words from my essay that I had written for class. (22 words)  CONCISE: The teacher demonstrated methods for cutting words from my essay. (10 words)

 Wordy: The supposed crash of a UFO in Roswell, New Mexico aroused interest in extraterrestrial life. This crash is rumored to have occurred in (24 words)  Concise: The supposed 1947 crash of a UFO in Roswell, New Mexico aroused interest in extraterrestrial life. (16 words)

 WORDY: Imagine a mental picture of someone engaged in the intellectual activity of trying to learn what the rules are for how to play the game of chess. (27 words)  CONCISE: Imagine someone trying to learn the rules of chess. (9 words)

 WORDY: For all intents and purposes, American industrial productivity generally depends on certain factors that are really more psychological in kind than of any given technological aspect. (26 words)  CONCISE: American industrial productivity depends more on psychological than on technological factors. (11 words)

 Kind of  Sort of  Type of  Really  Basically  For all intents and purposes  Definitely  Actually  Generally  Individual  Specific  Particular

 WORDY: Her father considered the “text- friendly” mittens an unneeded luxury.  CONCISE: Her father considered the “text- friendly” mittens a luxury.

 Past memories  Various differences  Each individual ____  Basic fundamentals  True facts  Important essentials  Future plans  Terrible tragedy  End result  Final outcome  Free gift  Past history  Unexpected surprise  Sudden crisis

 Large in size  Often times  Heavy in weight  Period in time  Round in shape  Honest in character  Unusual in nature  Extreme in degree  Of a strange type  Of cheap quality  Of an uncertain condition WORDY: During that time period, many car buyers preferred cars that were pink in color and shiny in appearance. (18 words) CONCISE: During that period, many car buyers preferred pink, shiny cars. (10 words)

 WORDY: The employee with ambition… (4 words)  CONCISE: The ambitious employee… (3 words)  WORDY: The department showing the best performance…(6 words)  CONCISE: The best-performing department…(4 words)

 WORDY: The report, which was recently released…(6 words)  CONCISE: The recently released report… (4 words)  WORDY: All applicants who are interested in the job must…(9 words)  CONCISE: All job applicants must…(4 words)

 Change all passive verbs to active  WORDY: The beer was consumed by Santa Claus. (7 words)  CONCISE: Santa Claus consumed the beer. (5 words)

 WORDY: The function of this department is the collection of funds.  CONCISE: This department collects funds.

 WORDY: The duty of a police officer is to arrest unlawful citizens and to put them in jail.  CONCISE: Police officers arrests and jails unlawful citizens.

 WORDY: In accordance with your request… (5 words)  CONCISE: As you requested… (3 words)

 The reason for…  For the reason that…  Owing/due to the fact that…  In light of the fact that…  Considering the fact that…  On the grounds that…  This is why…. = “Because” = “Since” = “Why”