REVISE AND EDIT Word Crimes The writing process REVISE AND EDIT Word Crimes

REVISE VS. EDIT WE HAVE NOW FINISHED THE “HARD” PART OF THE WRITING PROCESS. NOW WE ARE WORKING ON THE “ART” PART. THIS IS WHERE WE MAKE OUR PAPER INTO A WORK OF ART REVISE AND EDIT ARE 2 DIFFERENT WORDS…IT IS NOT CALLED THE REVISE OR EDIT STEP…IT IS REVISE AND EDIT!

REVISE AND EDIT--DEFINED REVISE—GLOBAL —LARGE CHANGES IN OVERALL ORGANIZATION AND PHRASING EDIT—LOCAL—CHANGES IN THE WORD BY WORD ASPECT OF YOUR WRITING. WE HAVE STARTED TO RELY ON THE COMPUTER TO DO OUR REVISING AND EDITING. THAT IS NOT ALWAYS A GOOD IDEA. LET ME SHOW YOU WHAT I MEAN.

PUNCTUATION NOT IMPORTANT? HA! A WOMAN WITHOUT HER MAN IS NOTHING A woman, without her man, is nothing. A woman: without her, man is nothing.

One little comma…. Billy asked, “Is it time to eat, Grandma?” Billy asked, “Is it time to eat Grandma?” The student, said the teacher, is crazy. The student said the teacher is crazy. Slow, children crossing. Slow children crossing.

The man dropped the bullet in his mouth. When I sing well, ladies scream. When I sing, well, ladies scream. Watch out—man-eating apes. Watch out—man eating apes.

SPELL CHEQUER Eye halve a spelling chequer It came with my pea sea. It plainly marques four my revue Miss steaks eye kin knot sea. Eye strike a key and type a word And weight four it two say Weather eye am wrong oar write It shows me strait a weigh. As soon as a mist ache is maid It nose bee fore two long And eye can put the error rite Its rarely ever wrong. Eye have run this poem threw it I am shore your pleased two no Its letter perfect in it’s weigh My chequer tolled me sew.

HAVE YOU EVER HEARD ANYONE SPEAK IN A MONOTONE? SENTENCE VARIETY HAVE YOU EVER HEARD ANYONE SPEAK IN A MONOTONE? Monotone BORING ISN’T IT? WELL THAT IS WHAT OUR WRITING “SOUNDS” LIKE WHEN OUR SENTENCES HAVE NO VARIETY!! WE ARE MONOTONE! WE CAN AVOID THIS BY DOING A FEW SIMPLE THINGS: 1. VARY THE LENGTH OF OUR SENTENCES—MOST OF OUR SENTENCES TEND TO BE THE SAME LENGTH—VERY LITTLE VARIETY 2. VARY THE WORD ORDER AND/OR BEGINNINGS OF OUR SENTENCES.—MOST SENTENCES FOLLOW A SET PATTERN. SUBJECT VERB. SUBJECT VERB. SUBJECT VERB

WE ARE GOING TO PRACTICE WRITING WITH SOME VARIETY YOU WILL NEED A PIECE OF PAPER—LABELED, AND SOMETHING TO WRITE WITH. YOU WILL BE WRITING SENTENCES FOLLOWING THE CRITERIA I GIVE YOU. YOU MAY CHANGE YOUR TOPIC WITH EVERY SENTENCE, OR WRITE ON THE SAME TOPIC THE ENTIRE TIME…IT IS UP TO YOU. HOWEVER, THOSE OF YOU WRITING ABOUT FLYING GREEN MONKEYS THAT EAT CHEERIOS FOR BREAKFAST MAY RECEIVE A REFERRAL TO THE COUNSELOR…JUST TO BE ON THE SAFE SIDE. 

STRUCTURED SENTENCE DRILLS Write a sentence which begins with an “ING” verb (a participle). Write a sentence which does NOT begin with a noun, pronoun, “A”, “AN”, or “THE.” Write a sentence beginning with “When.” (The sentence cannot be a question.) Write a sentence beginning with “Because.” Make sure that it is a complete sentence and contains a comma. Write a sentence beginning with “Whatever.” Write a sentence beginning with a prepositional phrase. Write a sentence beginning “IF.” Write a sentence beginning “Although.” Write a sentence beginning “While.” Write a sentence of at least 15 words without using “and” or “but.” Write a sentence beginning with a past-tense verb Write a sentence beginning with an adverb.

13. Write a sentence containing five or more adjectives…each of the adjectives must have at least 2 syllables. 14. Write a sentence which does not contain any form of the word “BE” or any contractions using the verb “TO BE.” 15. Write a sentence beginning with two adjectives. These two adjectives must be joined with the word “and”. 16. Begin a sentence with “as if”. 17. Write a short sentence…no more than 5 words. 18. Write a sentence containing a list of at least three things. Punctuate correctly and use parallel structure.

REALLY IMPORTANT INFO!!! REMEMBER WHAT WE TALKED ABOUT WHEN WE DID STRUCTURED SENTENCE DRILLS. DURING THE REVISE AND EDIT STEP IS WHEN WE MAKE SURE TO USE VARIETY. ALWAYS…ALWAYS…ALWAYS… PROOFREAD YOUR PAPER OUT LOUD.

REVISE AND EDIT ROUND TABLE WE ARE NOW GOING TO REVISE AND EDIT THE ROUGH DRAFTS OF YOUR ESSAYS. WE ARE GOING TO DO THIS BY USING A TECHNIQUE I LIKE TO CALL THE REVISE AND EDIT ROUND TABLE… YOU WILL TAKE A REVISE AND EDIT ROAD MAP. THIS ROAD MAP WILL BE YOUR GUIDE AROUND THE ROOM TODAY. IT SHOULD ALSO BE KEPT IN YOUR WRITING SECTION TO BE USED AS A REFERENCE LATER.

ROUND TABLE GUIDELINES WHEN MOVING AROUND THE ROOM PLEASE REMEMBER THAT YOU DO NOT NEED TO TRAVEL WITH YOUR FRIENDS. GO TO A TABLE ONLY IF THERE IS ROOM FOR YOU. CHECK OFF EACH STATION AS YOU VISIT IT. READ THE DIRECTIONS CAREFULLY!!! SOME STATIONS HAVE HANDOUTS—TAKE THOSE AND PLACE IN WRITING SECTION ROUGH DRAFT ROOKIE AND FINAL FINALE MUST BE DONE IN ORDER!!!