Editing #1 This is very easy…if you have written a rough draft #1.

You need these things: Orange Stamp Sheet Pen or pencil 2 different colored markers SILENCE If you do not have ATLEAST 3 pages written or 1 ½ typed you will work on your essay and edit for homework. ◦ This is your ONLY option for today. ◦ You will show me an edited draft at the beginning of class tomorrow

MLA Format Write this down: Your Name Mrs. Nemec English II- (class period) 9 February 2011 This is important and necessary to your paper

Intro. Using one of your markers, highlight the first sentence. ◦ Does it start in the middle of your memory? ◦ If someone read it could they draw an accurate picture of the scene around them? This is the way to start your essay.

Intro. continued… Read your first paragraph. Using your pen/ pencil underline: ◦ The characters ◦ The event ◦ The setting All of these things should be in your intro.

Body paragraphs Using your pen/ pencil number your body paragraphs ◦ Do your paragraphs “flow” into one another? ◦ Do they change when the scene or topics change? ◦ Is there a new paragraph when the speaker of dialogue changes?

Dialogue Read through your paper. Take a marker and highlight your dialogue. You should only have 4 to 5 sentences of dialogue. If you have more than 4-5 lines, pick the most important/ most powerful lines of dialogue to keep.

Conclusion Read through your conclusion. ◦ Circle anytime you use the words: courage, relief, personal growth, regret or change in belief.  If you use these words more than twice try to find another way to say it. Highlight the last sentence of your essay. ◦ Does it give your paper a sense of finality and closure?

Extras After you have read through your paper, circle to 2 places where you need to add in more detail. ◦ Remember detail should incorporate the 5 senses (taste, touch, smell, hear and see) ◦ Make sure you have at the least-Circle and Identify these, please.  1 simile  1 metaphor  And 2 other literary devices.

Rough Draft 2: By Monday, this paper should be corrected, typed, double spaced and ready for a 2 nd editing. (2 pages)