7 Dec 2015 Today we will learn…...How another writer can help us to improve our writing...about those items that we need to check to help us improve our essay BEFORE we submit it to be scored.

IF If you only have1 printed copy instead of 2, PUT YOUR 1 PRINTED COPY ON THE TABLE (90%) If you have your essay on a usb drive, but not printed, PUT YOUR USB DRIVE IN THE BOWL ON THE TABLE (85%) If you haven’t finished your 2 nd draft, pick up the laptop that matches your desk number and start typing. (1%) If you haven’t finished your rough draft, “SHAME ON YOU. FINISH WRITING YOUR ROUGH DRAFT. (0%) If you have 2 printed copies, BRAVO!!, YOU EARNED AN “A” (100%) Take time to number the lines along the left edge of the paper. If you have to access your 2 nd draft online ( or cloud), but not printed, LOG ON TO ONE OF THE COMPUTERS BY THE DOOR & PRINT IT. (85%)

THE PLAN….. Staple & submit your hand written rough drafts. Take out 2 of your 2 nd draft. Scores taken for 2 nd drafts copies. Initial Self Revision Peer editing Read through the feedback Write the needed changes on the paper. Bring a digital copy of your essay On a flash drive Sent in an to yourself Retrieved from a cloud. Revise your LIP + Simple thesis to a LIP+ Complete thesis. Check the format (MLA) Complete revisions, correct any mistakes. Save your 3 rd draft to the HAND IN folder or print it using the classroom computers TOMORROW’S PLANTODAY’S PLAN

Before another writer goes through your essay please check your essay for the following: 1.Read through your essay and circle the words “you” “yours” or “you’re” If they are part of a quote, it is fine. If they are not part of a quote, it will need to be fixed. 2.Count your paragraphs. You should have 5. If you have fewer than 5, mark where you need to add a paragraph. 3.Do you use the character’s name in the claim sentences? You must use the character’s name in the claim sentence before you can use pronouns. 4.Are your sentences different lengths (short: 3-8 words; medium: 9-20 words, & long: 20+ words)? Writing sentences which are all mostly the same length makes for a lack of rhythm.

PEER EDIT EXERCISE You will need 2 copies of your 2 nd draft. 2 PEER EDIT SHEETS 2 PEER EDIT T-CHARTS A pen Highlighters - If your name is not on your 2 nd draft, write your name at the top. Write your name on your peer edit sheets and peer edit t-charts. Exchange an essay + edit sheets + t-charts with 2 other peers.

PEER EDIT EXERCISE Step 1: read the essay Step 2: highlight the LIP + SIMPLE THESIS BLUE OR PURPLE Step 3: highlight the claim sentence green. Step 4: read all the way through the peer edit sheet before you begin. Step 5: complete the peer edit sheet. Provide THOUGHTFUL feedback to the writer in your answers. Step 6: staple the completed Peer Edit Sheet and Peer T-chart to the back of the writer’s 2 nd draft copy and return it to the writer. RETURN TO YOUR DESK AND REPEAT STEPS 1-6 FOR THE 2 ND ESSAY YOU RECEIVED.

READ THROUGH THE EDIT SHEET. DID THE EDITOR ANSWER “NO” WHERE YOU HOPED FOR A “YES” ? WHAT WAS THE FEEDBACK? DOES THE T-CHART HE/SHE CREATED MATCH WHAT YOU THOUGHT YOU WROTE? WRITE YOUR CORRECTIONS & REVISIONS ON YOUR DRAFT. WE WILL TYPE IN MINOR CHANGES TOMORROW IN CLASS. IF YOU HAVE SOME MAJOR CHANGES TO MAKE, DO IT TONIGHT AS HOMEWORK.

TOMORROW YOU MUST BRING: YOUR ESSAY IN A DIGITAL FORM YOUR 2 ND DRAFT COPIES W/ PEER EDIT SHEET PEER T-CHART REVISE YOUR ESSAY, CREATING A FINAL DRAFT, USING THE LAP TOP SUBMIT THE 2 ND DRAFT COPIES WITH PEER EDIT/T-CHARTS: 40 POINTS SUBMIT A DIGITAL COPY OF YOUR FINAL DRAFT TO THE “HAND IN” FOLDER: 200 POINTS TOMORROW’S PLAN