Style Crib Sheet Steve Whitmore October 2012

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Style Crib Sheet Steve Whitmore October 2012 When printed at six sheets per page, this file can be used as a handy reference to help you identify patterns of stylistic problems in your writing. Style Crib Sheet

Weak Endings Subject/Verb/Object Weak Ending The information provided in the report suggesting the cause of the crash was due to mechanical failure is not persuasive for the most part. Style Crib Sheet

Weak Endings Look for sentences that trail off rather lamely. Also look for lengthy qualifiers tagged on at the end of the sentence and move them to the front of the sentence. Avoid small phrases introducing a list when a colon will suffice. Style Crib Sheet

Embedded Phrases Subject Embedded Phrase Verb/Object This practice, while satisfying the client on whose project we are working, leads to several of our other clients’ needs not being met. Style Crib Sheet

Embedded Phrases The occasional embedded phrase is OK for stylistic variety, but avoid separating the verb from its subject. Place the embedded phrase at the beginning or end of the sentence. Split long sentences into shorter ones. Avoid placing references in the middle of sentences and never place figures in the middle of sentences. Style Crib Sheet

Empty Sentence Openers There is/are . . . (that/which) It is . . . (that) There are many aspects of the problem that have not yet been considered. It is probable that we should measure the wind characteristics at the site. Style Crib Sheet

Empty Sentence Openers Avoid replacing the empty opener with the word exists: There is an obvious way to handle the problem.  An obvious way exists to handle the problem. Don’t change it is when it refers back to a known thing: Bob spent six hours writing the program, so it is his property. Style Crib Sheet

Empty Sentence Openers Remember to remove that or which if used: There are ten activities that are affected by the change.  Ten activities that are affected by the change Empty sentence openers can appear in the middle of sentences as well as the beginnings. Avoid trying to find or eliminate empty openers while drafting. Wait until revising (unless you enjoy writer’s block ;-) Style Crib Sheet

Passive Voice To Be + Verb-ed An explanation of atmospheric stability and a detailed evaluation of its application to this air quality evaluation is contained in Appendix A. Style Crib Sheet

Abuses of Passive Voice Communicating objectivity Creating false objectivity Changing sentence emphasis Using habitually Avoiding blaming someone Avoiding responsibility Omitting unknown agents Obscuring meaning Style Crib Sheet

Unnecessary Repetition S/V/Word#1 Word#1 . . . Word#2 Word#2 . . . Word#3 To my knowledge, no Mission Statement exists. This being said, either there is no Mission Statement, or the one that exists is not being made readily available to all employees. Style Crib Sheet

Unnecessary Repetition Avoid “chaining” sentences together by repeating the last words of a sentence as the 1st words of the next sentence. Ensure you edit “stream-of-consciousness” writing. Avoid starting strings of sentences with phrases such as “I think” or “I believe.” We assume you think it if you wrote it. Style Crib Sheet

Vague “This” Subjects This (???) Verb/Object The next recommendation is to clarify the rewards structure. This is required to maintain motivation on projects where many extra hours are required and no overtime policy exists. This can be critical for commitment from employees. Style Crib Sheet

Vague “This” Subjects Place a word or phrase immediately after the word “this” when it starts a sentence. Avoid strings of vague “this” subjects. Style Crib Sheet

^ Parallel Structure Phrase and/or/but/etc. Phrase Balance Balance This discussion prompted me to contact PTE for further information and the support package that PTE can offer for PC/FOCUS. Style Crib Sheet

Parallel Structure Use the same verb form when linking ideas together using a coordinating conjunction. Split excessively long sentences in two to avoid parallelism problems. Repeat prepositions in lengthy prepositional phrases. Try to balance length as well as structure. Style Crib Sheet

Parallel Structure Verb Noun Verb Noun Verb Noun In order to improve our facilities, we must do the following: • repair our existing PCs • purchase 11 more hard drives • security is insufficient • expand our operating hours Style Crib Sheet

Parallel Structure Ensure lists are parallel by starting all items with nouns or verbs. Avoid mixing complete sentences and sentence fragments in lists. Beware of Microsoft’s automated features! Style Crib Sheet

Short Sentences Short Sentence Short Sentence Short Sentence The culture of the organization is inconsistent with the rest of the world. The company values long-term employees. Provides generous remuneration, benefits, pensions, etc. The organization is too steep. It needs some flattening. The current organization encourages CYA and non-communication. This needs to be addressed. Failures rewarded, fence-sitters punished. (Average sentence length = 6 words.) Style Crib Sheet

Short Sentences Avoid strings of short, unclearly related sentences – especially in introductory paragraphs. Recognize that a style heavily dependent upon empty sentence openers and vague “this” subjects is often lacking in transitions. Sentences can easily be combined by using simple connections such as and, that, or which or by embedding parts of one sentence in another. Be cautious when using “as” or “since.” The average sentence length in academic journals is 21-23 words. Style Crib Sheet

Short Sentences When writing for popular magazines, user manuals or procedural instructions, shorten sentence length to 15-18 words. The occasional short sentence is a powerful technique to create emphasis. Style Crib Sheet

Comma Omissions ^ Subject/Verb/Object and Subject/Verb/Object A precision full-wave rectifier is constructed using precision diodes and a square-wave generator is assembled using a schmitt trigger. Style Crib Sheet

Comma Omissions ^ Introduction Subject/Verb/Object By participating more in scheduling release dates can be planned so that projects dovetail. Style Crib Sheet

Comma Omissions Always place a comma after introductory prepositional phrases. Always place a comma between two complete sentences joined by a coordinating conjunction (and, but, yet, so, and yet). See the material on punctuation for other rules of punctuation. Style Crib Sheet

Noun Strings Noun Noun Noun Noun Noun Noun The wind pattern was further illustrated following a recovery boiler electrostatic precipitator fire at the site in 1988. Style Crib Sheet

Noun Strings Break up noun strings with prepositions. If possible, turn some nouns into verbs. Use hyphens to indicate closely related words. Use acronyms when feasible. Eliminate words that are not needed in the noun string. 4 nouns in a string is hard to understand; 5 or more nouns in a string is excessive. Style Crib Sheet

Prepositional Phrases in . . . on . . . of . . . of . . . of . . . at . . . Another component needed for the completion of the project is the reassignment of project team members to the next project and the rewarding of team members for their role in the project. Style Crib Sheet

Prepositional Phrases Avoid idioms that contain prepositions (e.g., goes on = further). Change noun forms to verb forms (e.g., analysis of = analysing). Make short noun strings (3 to 4 nouns). Break long sentences into shorter ones. 2 ofs in a row is awkward; 3 or more is nearly impossible to understand. Style Crib Sheet

General Language Aspect Partly Basically Perfectly Big/Little Situation Clear/Unclear Somewhat Good/Bad Thing Important This Interesting To a certain extent Kind of/Sort of To some degree Large/Small Type More or less Very much/Very little Number of /Lots of Way Approximately 60% of our work is of a repeat nature with only minor variations. This repeat work is specifically of the inspection and quality control type and does not require higher education. Style Crib Sheet

General Language Avoid general language whenever possible by eliminating or by finding alternatives in a thesaurus. Alternatives can be found in a good thesaurus such as the following: Urdang, L. & LaRoche, N. (Eds). (1978). The Synonym Finder. Emmaus, PA: Rodale Press. Style Crib Sheet

Nominalizations Verb Form Noun Form require requirement of impose imposition of discuss discussion of resemble resemblance to remove removal of fear fear of Our request is that on your return, you conduct a review of the data and provide an immediate report. Style Crib Sheet

Nominalizations Look for the articles and prepositions that accompany nouns (especially of). Transform nouns to verbs wherever possible. Avoid combining a noun-based style, heavy use of prepositions, and the passive voice. This combination is extremely difficult for readers! Style Crib Sheet

Talkie Verbs (Be) Drive Go Look Seem Bring Face Grow Make Show Carry Feel Have Place Take Come Find Hold Put Think Deal Get Keep Say Try Do Give Know See Turn Because of the team’s ignorance, no one could know at the beginning what the product was going to look like or how long it was going to take them to make it. Style Crib Sheet

Talkie Verbs Learn to recognize the verbs you most commonly use in speech and edit for them. Look for the “real” verb hidden in a nominalization following the talkie verb. Use a good thesaurus to suggest alternatives. If you use a dictation program, you must learn to edit for this pattern! Style Crib Sheet

Wordy Expressions Wordy Expressions Concise Substitutions are indicative of indicate at a rapid rate rapidly at that point in time then at the present time now, today aware of the fact that know bring the matter to a conclusion conclude due to the fact that given that, because have to must in a great number of cases often in close proximity near the majority of most the reason why is that because It is necessary that someone make a decision on a personal basis due to the fact that the preponderance of us cannot form a consensus of opinion about how to bring the matter to a conclusion. Style Crib Sheet

Wordy Expressions We all use wordy phrases that we pick up in conversation or from TV. Learn to recognize your favorite wordy phrases and edit for them. Ask a friend or colleague to look for them in your writing if you have difficulty recognizing them. Style Crib Sheet