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TLQ How do I correctly use quotations?

Evidence/Quotations Quotations are used as evidence because they come directly from the book. Thesis + 3 Evidence (TLQ) Reasoning + Concluding Sentence = Extended Response

T stands for TRANSITION For example, For instance, Another example is In addition, Moreover, Transitions should be used before any piece of evidence/quote.

L stands for LEAD-IN Lead-ins give the reader information about the “scene” from where the quote is extracted. It should contain both  Speaker  Situation For example, when Rainsford returns to Zaroff’s home, he says,

Q stands for QUOTE Your evidence is a quote—anything from the text, regardless of if it has been “spoken” by a character or not. However, quotes should support the topic you are writing about. For example, when Rainsford returns to Zaroff’s home, he says, “I am still a beast at bay.” (103).

What follows a quote? Add one to two sentences of reasoning/analysis that shows the importance of the quote/situation as related to your topic. For example, when Zaroff suggested that Rainsford go hunting he gave him no alternative but to play when he said, “There’s always Ivan” (100). This shows that Rainsford was acting in self-defense when he accepted the terms of the game. If he didn’t agree to be hunted, Ivan would have torn him to shreds.

In the short story “The Most Dangerous Game” by Richard Connell, the aristocratic General Zaroff is motivated by arrogance to challenge the talented hunter Sanger Rainsnford to go hunting. Initially, General Zaroff welcomes Mr. Rainsford as he realizes his new guest is the “celebrated hunter”(4). Although, an “affable host” Zaroff begins to show his desire to prove himself when Rainsford perceived Zaroff to be “studying him” (5). After dinner, Rainsford realizes Zaroff’s arrogance when the general states, “Life is for the strong, to be lived by the strong, and, if need be, taken by the strong” (8). Zaroff demonstrates much bravado by stating he is stronger than others and views those who are weak as worth hunting. Although a wonderful host, his arrogance will ultimately cost him a chance to win at his own game. General Zaroff is only motivated by his own arrogance. Example:

Wednesday 10/14: “The Monkey’s Paw” Extended Response Prompt: Write an extended response explaining how W.W. Jacobs creates a mood of suspense in “The Monkey’s Paw”. Your response should include a thesis, evidence, reasoning and a concluding sentence.  Formal tone  Present tense  Thesis- title, author, and claim  Evidence (TLQ)- transition, lead in w/ context of your quote (direct quote/evidence) and cite your page#.  Reasoning- analysis the connects how your evidence supports your claim.  Concluding statement- rewords the claim you made in your thesis

Thursday 10/15 - Self-Reflection…. Use colors to color code your response:  Black- thesis; underline title, author, subject and claim/opinion/thinking  Blue– transition  Red– lead-in; circle the place reference word  Green– quote (look carefully at punctuation and page citation).  Purple- reasoning/analysis  Black- concluding sentence; underline subject and claim/opinion/thinking On the bottom of your paragraph paper or the back, reflect on your response by answering the following questions:  What did you learn today?  What are you confused by?  What is different about this process compared to what you did before? How is it similar? Explain.

Homework Revise your “The Monkey’s Paw” responses to ensure that you have followed these rules.  Formal tone  Present tense  Thesis- title, author, and claim  Evidence (TLQ)- transition, lead in w/ context of your quote (direct quote/evidence) and cite your page#.  Reasoning- analysis the connects how your evidence supports your claim.  Concluding statement- rewords the claim you made in your thesis