DO NOW – 10/6/15 Write responses to the questions below in CN – write at least 2-3 sentences per question. 1) Which is the better sentence (explain why)? a.John grew red and yellow flowers outside. b.John planted roses and tulips in the garden. 1) Which is the better sentence (explain why)? a.John grew red and yellow flowers outside. b.John planted roses and tulips in the garden.

Topic / Objective & Essential Question Topic / Objective: 1) To practice adding sensory details to sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives. Essential Question: 1) How can I improve my sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives? Topic / Objective: 1) To practice adding sensory details to sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives. Essential Question: 1) How can I improve my sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives?

Look over the feedback cheatsheet 1) Don’t be too harsh – build confidence. 2) Don’t be too easy – be constructive. 3) Look at specific phrases for different purposes. 1) Don’t be too harsh – build confidence. 2) Don’t be too easy – be constructive. 3) Look at specific phrases for different purposes.

How would you improve this passage? (write changes on the handout) I was nervous. My teammates were doing different things. Then the coached walked in. He was serious. He started the prayer—this was routine. After the prayer, he led us out to play the game. (2 minutes)

Great writing uses sensory details Why? A: Because it helps to bring the reader into the story. We live through our senses – sight, sound, taste, smell, and touch.

Make your writing “N.A.S.T.Y” 1) Names. 2) Actions. 3) Senses. 4) Talking. 5) WhY does this matter?

Make your writing “N.A.S.T.Y” 1)Names – Add names to things. Strive for proper nouns first (a “747” instead of a “plane”), and then revise for more descriptive nouns.

What are descriptive nouns? * Descriptive nouns are nouns (persons, places, things, ideas) that have details built-in.

Which is more descriptive? 1)Fruit or 2) Apple

Make your writing “N.A.S.T.Y” 2) Actions – Change simple verbs to descriptive, “action” verbs.

Action Verbs – Which is better? 1)Susy went over to her father and helped him up from the floor. 2)Susy ran over to her father and lifted him up from the floor.

Action Verbs – Which is better? Susy ran over to her father and lifted him up from the floor. Q: Why are “ran” and “lifted” better verbs than “went” and “helped”?

We’ll continue with making our writing “NASTY”... Let’s practice revising sentences to make them more interesting and engaging by adding NAMES and by changing simple verbs into strong, ACTION verbs. On your handout, rewrite sentences 1-4 by adding names and rewriting the verbs. Let’s practice revising sentences to make them more interesting and engaging by adding NAMES and by changing simple verbs into strong, ACTION verbs. On your handout, rewrite sentences 1-4 by adding names and rewriting the verbs.