Body Paragraph #2

Like all of my remaining body paragraphs, my second has to flow from my first, since they are part of the same essay. Otherwise, the process is the same as it was with the first body paragraph. Let's take another look at the part of the Outline that will become my next paragraph:

Peddle/Lever bikes A. next step after push bikes/1839 B. made by Macmillan 1. from Scotland 2. a blacksmith a. used knowledge of shaping metal C. pedals and levers attached to back tire 1. wood tires: rough

I happen to have written "next step after push bikes" in my outline. If I hadn't, I would want to add something like that in the topic sentence. My goal is to have both paragraphs flow, but feel complete.

Let's take a look at what I came up with: The first true pedal and lever bike, and the next step after the push model, was made in 1839 by Kirkpatrick Macmillan, a blacksmith from Scotland. He likely used his knowledge of forging metals to experiment and come up with the working system. However, the invention did not mean Macmillan’s bike looked like the Cont’d.↓

bikes of today. Instead of a chain, the pedals were attached to the aforementioned levers that lead to the back tire. The contraption looked something like a strange machine at a gym, some sort of elliptical device. The machine worked, but the ride was probably not very smooth, given the fact that the tires were hardwood.

Notice the phrase "however," which helps the information to flow. The rest of the paragraph was derived from only one note-card about the wood tires.

I made a comparison to something the readers and I already know: elliptical devices. Since that is “from my head” (prior knowledge), I did not need a note-card. The phrase "probably not very smooth" is a reasoned judgment I made, so I did not need a note-card for that either.

Continue like this with any remaining body paragraphs you have.