Your unit 7 discussion instructions: Be sure to read the readings on transitions first. Post your introduction, body paragraph(s), or conclusion on the board. Show how you have included internal transitions to unify your paragraph. Also, indicate what type of transition you will use to link the paragraph to other ideas in your essay. **Please remind us of your thesis, and specify which particular paragraph this is (intro, body 1, 2, 3, or conclusion).

What do I address in my peer responses for Unit 7 discussion? Examine their paragraph and their transitions… Do the paragraphs have effective focuses? Does the writer stay focused throughout the paragraph? If it’s an intro, is it engaging? Is the thesis clear? If it’s a body paragraph, is the topic sentence clear? How effective are the writer’s transitions within the paragraph? Note any gaps you see, any places where they seem to jump abruptly between points. How else might the writer develop the paragraph? What should they add/change/delete??? Why?

What are transitions? Why are they important? Where can they occur in your essay? What are some effective phrases, words to use when transitioning within a paragraph? Can you offer any strategies for making a transition between paragraph?

Let’s say you’ve just written a body paragraph about how schools are replacing unhealthy items in vending machines with healthy drinks and snacks. In the next paragraph let’s say you want to discuss how schools are expanding lunch menus to offer more nutritional options…… How could you transition between this first paragraph to the next one??? Any sample opening lines come to mind…..

Common Transitional Phrases To Show Connection and, also, as well, further, furthermore, in addition, moreover, next, second, too To Give Examples for example, for instance, to illustrate, as indicated by, in fact To Compare on the other hand, in the same manner, similarly, likewise To Contrast but, however, on the other hand, in contrast, nevertheless, still, even though, on the contrary, yet, although To Summarize or Conclude in other words, in short, in summary, to sum up, that is, therefore To Show Time after, as, before, next, during, later, finally, meanwhile, then, when, while, immediately To Indicate Relationships if, so, therefore, consequently, thus, as a result, for this reason, since To Indicate Differences of course, naturally, although it is true that, granted that

Checklist for Unit 7 Project: My draft is at least 3 full double-spaced pages long (12-point font), not counting title and reference pages. My draft includes a title page in APA format. My draft includes five well-developed paragraphs: an intro paragraph, 3 body paragraphs, and a concluding paragraph. The last sentence of the introduction is my thesis statement. My thesis statement contains 3 key points that become the focuses of my 3 body paragraphs. Each body paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence. I have used at least 2 sources in my essay. (3 will be required for final, but just 2 are required for this draft) I have cited all sources both in-text and in a reference page, following APA guidelines. I have checked my paper for major grammatical, punctuation, and spelling errors.

References Ferguson, A., Liss, S., Dowell, W., Drummond, T., Grace, J., Harrington, M., et.al. (1999, July 12). Inside the crazy culture of kids sports. Time, 154(2), Retrieved February 7, 2005, from MasterFile Premier database. Lancaster, S. (2001, January 22). Fixing kids’sports. Christian Science Monitor, 93(39), 13. Retrieved February 7, 2005, from MasterFile Premier database. Lord, M. (2000, May 15). When cheers turn into jeers (and tears). U.S. News & World Report, 128 (19), 52. Retrieved February 2, 2005, from MasterFile Premier database. Mom! It’s only a game. (1999, December 10). Christian Science Monitor, 92(12), 11. Retrieved February 7, 2005, from MasterFile Premier database.

"Kids under the knife." Springen, Karen. Newsweek; 11/1/2004, Vol. 144 Issue 18, p59- 60, 2p, 3c This info is what you see in Unit 1’s listings of sources. Is it in proper APA reference page citation form? Which of this info would you not need for a reference page citation?

In text-citation Bookmarking your favorite APA citation website and referring to it often is the number one tip most students prefer when learning APA (“Zany ways,” 2004). Should match up with full citation in reference page………

References Hughes, M. (2004). How to Master APA Style. New York: Citation Central. Leigh, V., Mitchell, M., & Wilkes, A. (1993). Gone With the References. Atlanta: Reference Press. Lucas, G. (1977). Why I’m going to make a trilogy: The secret cult of citations. Retrieved May 19, 2004 from Lucas, G. (2005). Why I won’t make another trilogy: The importance of citations. Retrieved May 19, 2005 from LexisNexis. Zany ways to learn citation. (2004, May). Citation Psychology Today, 98(11),

Maggie’s Intro in her essay on sports and parents: Walk past any athletic field on any given day of the week and there are dozens of young athletes either practicing baseball, soccer, or football, or playing a game against another team. By the time they reach age 12, three- quarters of those players drop out (Lord, 2000; Lancaster, 2001). With childhood obesity at such a high level, we all know, it is much better for the children to participate in organized sports than to sit in front of a TV or computer. Unfortunately, young athletes are becoming discouraged and dropping out of organized sports, not because of their own physical limitations and skills or understanding of the game, but because of the conduct of both parents and coaches, and lack of sportsmanship.

Maggie’s Conclusion: Many people studying youth sports agree that this conduct on the part of parents and coaches as well as lack of sportsmanship needs to change if we want to stop discouraging these young athletes and causing them to drop out of sports. These young athletes need motivators in the form of parents and coaches. With supportive parents and coaches, who knows: another Mickey Mantle, Donovan McNabb, or Curt Schilling may be out there on that Little League baseball or Pee- Wee football field.

Let’s compare: Intro: Walk past any athletic field on any given day of the week and there are dozens of young athletes either practicing baseball, soccer, or football, or playing a game against another team. By the time they reach age 12, three- quarters of those players drop out (Lord, 2000; Lancaster, 2001). With childhood obesity at such a high level, we all know, it is much better for the children to participate in organized sports than to sit in front of a TV or computer. Unfortunately, young athletes are becoming discouraged and dropping out of organized sports, not because of their own physical limitations and skills or understanding of the game, but because of the conduct of both parents and coaches, and lack of sportsmanship. Conclusion: Many people studying youth sports agree that this conduct on the part of parents and coaches as well as lack of sportsmanship needs to change if we want to stop discouraging these young athletes and causing them to drop out of sports. These young athletes need motivators in the form of parents and coaches. With supportive parents and coaches, who knows: another Mickey Mantle, Donovan McNabb, or Curt Schilling may be out there on that Little League baseball or Pee-Wee football field.

A. “Obesity is one of the most serious health problems facing the youth of the United States, and evidence suggests that the problem is worsening rapidly. The increase in the prevalence of childhood obesity, outlined by Troiano and Flegal,( n1) parallels the large increase in the prevalence of adult obesity that has occurred over the past 2 decades” (Hill and Trowbridge, 1998, pg. 571).n1 B. “Childhood obesity has been the focus of public and media attention in recent months. It is highlighted as a major risk factor in many health conditions, including those covered in government health priority planning such as coronary heart disease and diabetes” (Laing, 2002, pg. 14) C. “If the schools in your district are like most in the United States, there is a good chance that today’s lunch features pizza, hot dogs, chicken nuggets or maybe hamburgers with processed cheese. Is serving these types of foods really in the best interest of our children’s health? ((Wallace, 2009, pg. 36). D “French philosopher Jean-Jacques Rousseau argued in the 18th century that children shouldn't be considered miniature adults, and doctors have generally agreed--until now. But kids today are developing very adult health problems, from aging arteries to prediabetes to hypertension and high cholesterol” (Kotz, 2009, no pag.).