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Wordiness MENUEXIT Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. Can you spot the unnecessary words in this sentence? All things considered, swimming is literally the best exercise due to the fact that it maintains aerobic fitness and employs all muscles throughout the body. Click to view the unnecessary words PREVIOUS

Wordiness PREVIOUS Click to see a revision MENUEXIT Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. Can you spot the unnecessary words in this sentence? All things considered, swimming is literally the best exercise due to the fact that it maintains aerobic fitness and employs all muscles throughout the body. Wordiness

PREVIOUS Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases. All things considered, swimming is literally the best exercise due to the fact that it maintains aerobic fitness and employs all muscles throughout the body. ORIGINAL REVISED Swimming is the best exercise because it maintains aerobic fitness and employs all muscles throughout the body. MENUEXIT Next Wordiness

Use the following strategies to revise wordy sentences. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENUEXIT MENU Wordiness Eliminate padding Delete repeated ideas Reduce the number of modifiers Change clauses to phrases Remove unnecessary information

Wordiness MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Wordiness Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENUEXIT Next Eliminate Padding Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. all things considered as a matter of fact due to the fact that by and large as the case may be Wordiness Phrases to watch out for include the following:

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENUEXIT Click to view the unnecessary phrase Eliminate Padding Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence? Balancing the budget is impossible without some kind of financial restraint. Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness PREVIOUS Click to see a revision MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence? Balancing the budget is impossible without some kind of financial restraint. Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENUEXIT Wordiness Eliminate Padding Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence? Balancing the budget is impossible without some kind of financial restraint. Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Balancing the budget is impossible without some kind of financial restraint.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases. Balancing the budget is impossible without some financial restraint.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Balancing the budget is impossible without kind financial restraint. Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Balancing the budget is impossible without d financial restraint. Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Eliminate Padding Balancing the budget is impossible without financial restraint. Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENUEXIT Menu Eliminate Padding Balancing the budget is impossible without financial restraint. Wordiness Be sure your sentences don’t contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

Wordiness Delete Repeated Ideas Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. Wordiness MENUEXIT Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS Delete Repeated Ideas Which idea is repeated in the following sentence? Let’s examine in depth the reasons for the conflict. Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. Wordiness MENUEXIT Click to view the repeated idea

Wordiness PREVIOUS Delete Repeated Ideas Which idea is repeated in the following sentence? Let’s examine in depth the reasons for the conflict. Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to see a revision

Wordiness PREVIOUS Delete Repeated Ideas Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways. Let’s examine in depth the reasons for the conflict. ORIGINAL Let’s examine the reasons for the conflict. REVISED MENUEXIT Wordiness Menu

Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Wordiness Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. Where are the modifiers in the following sentence? He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to view the modifiers

Wordiness PREVIOUS Reduce the Number of Modifiers Where are the modifiers in the following sentence? Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value. MENUEXIT Wordiness Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS Reduce the Number of Modifiers Which modifiers could be removed? Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to see the unnecessary modifiers

Wordiness PREVIOUS Reduce the Number of Modifiers Which modifiers could be removed? Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to see a revision i

Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Which modifiers could be removed? Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value. MENUEXIT Wordiness i CLOSE The strong word intrinsic already implies inherent.

Wordiness PREVIOUS MENUEXIT Wordiness Reduce the Number of Modifiers Which modifiers could be removed? Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value.

Wordiness He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inherent, intrinsic value. Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Wordiness

Reduce the Number of Modifiers He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inhere, intrinsic value. Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Wordiness

Reduce the Number of Modifiers He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has inhe, intrinsic value. Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Wordiness

Reduce the Number of Modifiers He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has in intrinsic value. Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Wordiness

Reduce the Number of Modifiers He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has intrinsic value. Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Wordiness

PREVIOUS Wordiness He chose medicine as a profession because helping others has intrinsic value. Reduce the Number of Modifiers Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentence’s effectiveness. MENUEXIT Menu

Wordiness Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS Change Clauses to Phrases Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. The rental contract, which is signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. In the following sentence, which clause could be changed to a phrase? MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to view the clause

Wordiness PREVIOUS Change Clauses to Phrases The rental contract, which is signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. In the following sentence, which clause could be changed to a phrase? Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS Change Clauses to Phrases The rental contract, which is signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. How could you rewrite this clause as a phrase? Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to see a revision

Wordiness PREVIOUS Change Clauses to Phrases The rental contract, which is signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. How could you rewrite this clause as a phrase? Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness

The rental contract, which is signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. Change Clauses to Phrases Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness

The rental contract, which signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. Change Clauses to Phrases Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness

Change Clauses to Phrases Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. The rental contract, wh signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness

PREVIOUS The rental contract, signed by both parties, is a binding agreement. Change Clauses to Phrases Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase. Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases. MENUEXIT Wordiness Menu

Wordiness Remove Unnecessary Information Only include information that is important for your reader to know. MENUEXIT Wordiness Continue…

Wordiness PREVIOUS Remove Unnecessary Information Only include information that is important for your reader to know. What information could be removed from the following sentence? The gravitational pull of the moon, which will rise tonight at 7:00, causes tides in the ocean. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to view the unnecessary words

Wordiness PREVIOUS Remove Unnecessary Information What information could be removed from the following sentence? The gravitational pull of the moon, which will rise tonight at 7:00, causes tides in the ocean. Only include information that is important for your reader to know. MENUEXIT Wordiness Click to see a revision i

Wordiness PREVIOUS Wordiness Remove Unnecessary Information The gravitational pull of the moon, which will rise tonight at 7:00, causes tides in the ocean. ORIGINAL The gravitational pull of the moon causes tides in the ocean. REVISED Only include information that is important for your reader to know. MENU Menu EXIT

Wordiness The gravitational pull of the moon, which will rise tonight at 7:00, causes tides in the ocean. Remove Unnecessary Information MENUEXIT Only include information that is important for your reader to know. i CLOSE The statement that the moon will rise tonight at 7:00 has nothing to do with it causing tides in the ocean. Those words should be removed. Wordiness What information could be removed from the following sentence?