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通过描述一件你亲身经历的事情 来说明主题 “Honesty makes a difference”, 要求 120 词以上。

一 审题 文体、 时态、 人称 二 列要点 三段 用动词短语列出（尽量使用 最有把握的） 三 写作 加主语、连接词，运用多种句式： 从句、非谓语、倒装、 there be 、 it 等 四 检查

Honesty makes a difference “Who did this?” asked my teacher once more. She seldom became angry, but she was this time. She held up a piece of broken glass and asked, “Who broke this window?”

I was the one who broke the window. I had not meant to do it. It was caused by an inaccurate throw of a basketball. If I admitted, I would be in a lot of trouble. How would I be able to pay for a big window like that? I didn’t even get an allowance. “My father is going to have a fit,” I thought. I didn’t want to raise my hand. But then a force much stronger than me changed my mind. I had to tell the truth.

I couldn’t believe what happened the next day! My teacher went to my desk with a book I was longing for and said, “You will not be punished as long as you remember that I am not rewarding you for your misdeed, but for your honesty.”

The book is gone and all that remains of that day is my memory and the lesson my teacher taught me!

1. Honesty is always an essential principle of living. （严宇晴 ）

2. As far as I’m concerned, I think honesty is one of the most important characters. （周建飞）

3. The more good qualities we have, the more achievement we will have. （郑蓉 ）

4. From then on, we know honesty is very important in our life. （李晓琴）

5. I thought I should do something meaningful instead of staying at home and watching TV. （彭芳）

值得探讨的句子

1. You must remember that whenever you must honesty. （优美句子） You must remember that whenever it is, you should be honest.

2. As a old saying goes, “There is no substitute” for honesty. （优美句子） As an old saying goes, there is no substitute for honesty.

3. There are a lot other things we can do. （优美句子） There are a lot of other things we can do. There are many other things we can do.

4. Because of my careless and absent-minded, I failed the exam. （优美句子） Because of my carelessness and absent-mindedness, I failed in the exam. Because I was careless and absent-minded, I failed in the exam.

5. Luckily, next examination, I was achieved a satisfied marks, which made myself more confidence. （优美句子） Luckily, in the next examination, I achieved satisfying marks, which made myself more confident.

6. As we know, honesty is very important in our life. It’s our Chinese traditional culture, until recently. I understand it really mean. （优美句子） As we know, honesty is very important in our life. Until recently, it’s our Chinese traditional culture. I understand its real meaning.

As we know, honesty is very important in our life. Until recently, it’s our Chinese traditional culture ， whose real meaning I understand.

7. Everything is all right. If only you mend your way. （优美句子） Everything is all right. If only you mended your ways.

8. We are always teached that honesty is our racial’s traditional spirits and it plays an important role in our life. （优美句子） We are always taught that honesty is our traditional virtue, which plays an important role in our life.

9. As far as I am concerned, honesty should always be an important feature valued by Chinese people. （优美句子） As far as I am concerned, honesty should always be a virtue valued by Chinese people.

10. My parents, who always taught us to say the truth no matter what. （优美句子） My parents always taught us to say the truth no matter what.

11. Honesty is a fundemental personality of a person who eager to become a successful people in the future. （优美句子） Honesty is a fundemental personality of a person who is eager to become successful in the future.

12. I didn’t go home instead waiting for the owner of wallet. I didn’t go home instead of waiting for the owner of wallet. （同学的修改） I didn’t go home. Instead, I waited for the owner of the wallet. I waited for the owner of the wallet instead of going home.

13. I did a meaning things. I did a meaningful things. （同学的修改） I did a meaningful thing.

14. My math is so poor that I can’t answer it. My math is so poor that I couldn’t answer it. （同学的修改） My math is so poor that I can’t work it out.

15. But I didn’t went go because I wasn’t want to. But I didn’t went because I wasn’t want to. （同学的修改） But I didn’t go because I was unwilling to.

16. Because she not could went to travel. Because she couldn’t went to travel. （同学的修改） Because she couldn’t go travelling.

17. The more you honesty, the more success you achieved. The more honesty you have, the more success you achieved. （同学的修改） The more honesty you have, the more success you achieve.

18. It is so embarrassed for me. It was so embarrassed for me. （同学的修改） It was so embarrassing for me.

19. I ask for the two boy a few question. I asked for the two boy a few questions. （同学的修改） I asked the two boys a few questions.

20. I pick up a purse, and return it back. I picked up a purse, and return it back. （同学的修改） I picked up a purse, and returned it to the owner. （建议）

21. I broken windows glass. I broken glass on the wall in the class. （同学的修改） I broke the window. （建议） window 窗户，窗玻璃

值得学习的修改

1. Our love play computer. We like playing computer games. （同学的修改）

2. I don’t know behind my body have a vase. I didn’t know a vase behind my body. （同学的修改） I didn’t know that there was a vase behind my body. （建议）

3. The vase was break up. The vase was broken up. （同学的修改）

4. She didn’t say anything to me, only to smile. She didn’t say anything to me, only smiling. （同学的修改）

5. A idea soon occurred to me. An idea soon occurred to me. （同学的修改）

6. I was make a mistake. I made such a mistake. （同学的修改）

7. Finally, my told she, my cut the flowers, but she didn’t blame my. Finally, I told her that I cut the flowers, but she didn’t blame me. （同学的修改）

8. If you didn’t told your mother, she must blame you. If you didn’t tell your mother, she would blame you. （同学的修改）

9. I’m children known honesty. I knew honesy in childhood. （同学的修改）

10. My sister very surprised. My sister was very surprised. （同学的修改）

11. We should try out best to avoid told lies. We should try our best to avoid telling lies. （同学的修改）

12. I don’t know what about the TV. I don’t know what the TV was about. （同学的修改）

13. My parents were go out. My parents went out. （同学的修改）

14. In my class take place a things. A thing took place in my class. （同学的修改）

15. I’m are best friends. We became best friends. （同学的修改）

16. I’m are not best friends in now. We are not best friends now. （同学的修改）

17. I like the people is honesty. I like the people who is honest. （同学的修改） I like the people who are honest. （建议）