2. Do Now (5 minutes silently) REFLECTION: Reread your essay.

3. Data Tracker Copy the data tracker on the right-hand board. It should go on the inside cover of your notebook OR on a separate sheet of paper that you will keep in your work folder for the rest of the year.

4. “Insanity: doing the same thing over and over again and expecting different results.” Albert Einstein Reflection

5. BIG GOALS! 1. We will be able to write a research paper that includes evidence from primary sources and secondary sources in a way that persuades the reader.

6. BIG GOALS! 2. We will grow in complexity as writers and take part in the writing process in order to be a part of the global conversations happening around us.

7. BIG GOALS! Why? 1. Because we all have something important to say! 2. Because your college classes will require that you write anywhere from 6-50 page papers!

8. So How Did We Do? Rubric Review 1-23-45-67-8 Criteria A: Producing Text -Either picks a position that does not address the prompt (ie focuses on analyzing the quote) or does not establish a position; minimal exploration -Insufficient or inappropriate details and examples that do not develop ideas - Adequately defines a position that demonstrate some insight and some reflection - Some details and examples that develop ideas, but evidence could be more specific or developed - Clearly defines an argumentative position around the prompt, showing considerable and substantial insight and exploration of prompt -Sufficient details and examples develop ideas and offer consistent support of thesis - Clearly and maturely develops a consistent argumentative position that demonstrates a high degree of insight and perceptive exploration -Extensive relevant details and examples develop ideas with precision

9. Average 3-4 Category Why? Good theses Struggling with blended quotes Lack of topic sentences Lack of introductions Some paragraphs with no evidence Many using evidence they don’t explain

10. Class examples: list positives and negatives (be kind) 1. Throughout the book we discover that Holden’s past has shaped who he is as a person. Holden feels as if it his responsibility “to catch [all these innocent children] if they start to go over the cliff…” (Salinger 93). Back in the 1950’s families were described as a “perfect, well-educated family” when in reality all families were dysfunctional. 2. J.D. Salinger wrote The Catcher in the Rye in order to inform teenagers and parents how some teenagers act the same way as Holden Caulfield and that they shouldn’t be acting like that because they will end up bad. “I forgot to tell you that. They kicked me out.” (Salinger 4) 3. “One of my troubles is, I never care too much when I lose something—it used to drive my mother crazy when I was as kid,” shows that Holden was a very careless child and materialistic things dint’ bother him. Holden also mentions that he might be “yellow” or “partly yellow” or how he sums it up “doesn’t give much of a damn if they lose their gloves.”

11. So how do we improve?

12. The Jane Schaffer Writing Strategy Basics for Response-to-LiteratureEssays The 5 Sentence Paragraph

13. The Prompt Before writing anything, know your assignment— READ THE PROMPT ! What are you being asked to do? Response-to-Literature Writing= writing that discusses what is of value in a work of literature. Literary Response requires a careful, critical look at the reading.

14. Writing Workshop Instructions Make sure that your table has 4 different colored writing utensils. Make a legend at the top of your paper for each color that you use. For example: –Topic Sentence: Red Pen –Concrete detail: Blue marker –Etc.

15. Step 1: TOPIC SENTENCE In the fairy tale “The Three Little Pigs,” the third pig is very wise. For example, remembering his mother’s warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. When the wolf came along, “he could not, with all his huffing and puffing, blow the house down” (Jacobs 10). This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf. In conclusion, the third pig outsmarts not only his brothers but the “big, bad” wolf as well. (Jacobs 3).

16. Step 1: Topic SENTENCE A Topic Sentence (TS) is the top bun of a hamburger. TS = first sentence of the paragraph. It shows the main idea and introduces the “topic” of the paragraph.

17. 1) In the fairy tale “The Three Little Pigs,” the third pig is very wise. Example Topic Sentence (TS)

18. Your Turn! Pick a color and underline each topic sentence in your paper. If there isn’t one, just skip this step, but make a note on your paper to add one when you revise your paper.

19. Step 2: CONCRETE DETAILS In the fairy tale “The Three Little Pigs,” the third pig is very wise. For example, remembering his mother’s warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. When the wolf came along, “he could not, with all his huffing and puffing, blow the house down” (Jacobs 10). This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf. In conclusion, the third pig outsmarts not only his brothers but the “big, bad” wolf as well. (Jacobs 3).

20. Step 2: CONCRETE DETAILS Concrete Details (CD) are the meat of the hamburger. CDs = Support for your TS. (facts, quotes, examples, etc. from text) CDs can’t be argued with—a CD is evidence that supports your point!

21. Example Concrete Detail (CD) 2 2 For example, remembering his mother’s warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. When the wolf came along, “he could not, with all his huffing and puffing, blow the house down” (Jacobs 10).

22. Your Turn! Pick a different color and underline each concrete detail in your paper. This will mostly be quotes, but some of you might have used other evidence. Some of you didn’t have evidence, so just mark that you need to add this when you revise.

23. Step 3: COMMENTARY In the fairy tale “The Three Little Pigs,” the third pig is very wise. For example, remembering his mother’s warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. When the wolf came along, “he could not, with all his huffing and puffing, blow the house down” (Jacobs 10). This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf. In conclusion, the third pig outsmarts not only his brothers but the “big, bad” wolf as well. (Jacobs 3).

24. Step 3: COMMENTARY Commentary Sentences (CM) are the “extras” on the hamburger—the tomato, cheese, lettuce, mayo—they make it delicious! CMs = your analysis, interpretation, explanation, or insight into how the text proves your claim in your topic sentence.

25. Example Commentary Sentences (2 CMs) 3) The wolf is unable to blow down the brick house. 4) This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf.

26. Step 4: CONCLUDING (Circle) SENTENCE A concluding sentence (CS) is the bottom bun of the hamburger. A CS wraps up the paragraph. It should go back to your thesis statement to show how this paragraph supported your point.

27. Example Concluding Sentence (CS) 5) In conclusion, the third pig outsmarts not only his brothers but the “big, bad” wolf as well.

28. TS, CD, CM, CS—Now What? CHUNKING !!! For a literary response writing, we use a combination (or “ratio”) of 1:2. That means… for every 1 CD… you will have 2 CMs. A combination of aCD and the CMs that explain it is called a CHUNK.

29. One Chunk: 1 CD + 2 CM For example, remembering his mother’s warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. The wolf is unable to blow down the brick house. This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf. Ratio = 1:2

30. One-Chunk Body Paragraph Sentence #1 - TS – States your claim/opinionSentence #1 - TS – States your claim/opinion Sentence #2 – CD - starts with “For example”Sentence #2 – CD - starts with “For example” Sentence #3 – CM - (“This shows that...”)Sentence #3 – CM - (“This shows that...”) Sentence #4 – CM - (“This also show that..” “This is because...” “This is important because...”)Sentence #4 – CM - (“This also show that..” “This is because...” “This is important because...”) Sentence#5 – CS – Concluding, or “Circle” Sentence – Sums it up and ties back to the thesisSentence#5 – CS – Concluding, or “Circle” Sentence – Sums it up and ties back to the thesis (“As a result...”) (“As a result...”)

31. Step 6: A Whole Paragraph In the fairy tale “The Three Little Pigs,” the third pig is very wise. For example, remembering his mother’s warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. The wolf is unable to blow down the brick house. This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf. In conclusion, the third pig outsmarts not only his brothers but the “big, bad” wolf as well.

32. NOW Let’smake sure our burgers are complete and ready to eat (grade)!

33. Independent Practice (35 minutes) 1.Box all citations. They should look like this: (Salinger 40). If you are uncertain, please raise your hand or ask a table partner. 2.Go back and add any missing sentences you missed from the 5 required. 3.Look at each note I made and make corrections where necessary. 4.Rewrite a neat, final draft with corrections made.

34. Exit Ticket On a sticky note (found on your desk), write which part of the paragraph you plan on improving when we write our next essay. Put your full name on it and stick it on the back of the door on your way out.