1. Rough Draft Some Common Issues

2. How do you organize a standard 5 paragraph essay? 1. Plan- pick your ideas that you will cover within the essay 2. Introduction- what, in general is your essay about? Thesis Statement- what specifically are you going to address? 3. Body of essay- 1 paragraph for each idea 4. Conclusion- wrap up your essay

3. Planning web (5 paragraph) Aztecs CultureReligionMilitary

4. What if you have to write an essay longer than 5 paragraphs? 1. Plan 2. Intro with thesis 3. Body- one paragraph for each idea 4. Conclusion For this essay- minimum of 5 ideas for your body of the essay!

5. 7 Paragraph Aztecs GovernmentMilitary ReligionCultureOrigins Conquered by Spanish

6. Rough Draft Problems No introductions (except 2 attempts) No introductions (except 2 attempts) Include a “grabber.” Something to get the reader’s attention Include a “grabber.” Something to get the reader’s attention Thesis statement- what will be discussed throughout paper Thesis statement- what will be discussed throughout paper Indent paragraphs Indent paragraphs Topic sentences for paras. Topic sentences for paras.

7. Use third person-No “I”s or “you”s Use third person-No “I”s or “you”s Watch for word repetition/word choice Watch for word repetition/word choice Transition from one section to another Transition from one section to another Use details and specific examples- the more details you use the better the grade. Use no more than 2-3 quotes to bring your paper to life. Use details and specific examples- the more details you use the better the grade. Use no more than 2-3 quotes to bring your paper to life.

8. Concluding paragraph-wrap things up in an neat little bow! Concluding paragraph-wrap things up in an neat little bow! What about in paper citing? Where did you get the details and examples? What about in paper citing? Where did you get the details and examples? Have other people proof-read your paper: Mom, Dad, Grandparents, each other… Have other people proof-read your paper: Mom, Dad, Grandparents, each other…

9. Don’t forget a title page. Also, make sure your rough draft and your first bibliography are attached to you final draft-Due Thursday Oct. 28th!! Don’t forget a title page. Also, make sure your rough draft and your first bibliography are attached to you final draft-Due Thursday Oct. 28th!!

10. Sample Intro When the Pittsburgh pirates arrived for the first spring training in Fort Myers, Florida in Februay 1955, they brought something the residents of the city were not used to, African Americans who were not accustomed to life in segregated America. Major League Basdeball had integrated in 1947 when Jackie Robinson first played for the Brooklyn Dodgers since that time black baseball players had filled the rosters of all the teams. In their travels to different cities all players were treated the same. That would change in Fort myers. African American ball players could not stay in the fancy hotel their whit e teammates did; they stayed in boarding houses in the Dunbar region of the city. Also black players could not travel, dine, golf, or enjoy other social activities with their teammates. At the same time the city’s people had to adjust their way of thinking when confronted with African Americans. Spring training presented African American ball players with many problems their Caucasian counterparts did not have to face. This study examines how the community of Fort Myers and the Pirates organization adjusted to segregation and themeasures taken to integrate spring training. When the Pittsburgh pirates arrived for the first spring training in Fort Myers, Florida in Februay 1955, they brought something the residents of the city were not used to, African Americans who were not accustomed to life in segregated America. Major League Basdeball had integrated in 1947 when Jackie Robinson first played for the Brooklyn Dodgers since that time black baseball players had filled the rosters of all the teams. In their travels to different cities all players were treated the same. That would change in Fort myers. African American ball players could not stay in the fancy hotel their whit e teammates did; they stayed in boarding houses in the Dunbar region of the city. Also black players could not travel, dine, golf, or enjoy other social activities with their teammates. At the same time the city’s people had to adjust their way of thinking when confronted with African Americans. Spring training presented African American ball players with many problems their Caucasian counterparts did not have to face. This study examines how the community of Fort Myers and the Pirates organization adjusted to segregation and themeasures taken to integrate spring training.

11. Sample Intro When the Pittsburgh Pirates arrived for spring training in Fort Myers, Florida in February 1955, they brought something the residents of the city were not used to seeing on the ballfield: African Americans. Many of these players were not accustomed to life in segregated America. Major League Baseball had integrated in 1947 when Jackie Robinson first played for the Brooklyn Dodgers. Since that time black baseball players had filled the rosters of all the teams. In their travels to different cities, in the north, all players were allowed to travel and eat as a team. That would change in Fort Myers. African American ball players could not stay in the fancy hotel their white teammates did; they stayed in boarding houses in the Dunbar region of the city.

12. Also, black players could not travel, dine, golf, or enjoy other social activities with their teammates. At the same time the city’s people had to adjust their way of thinking when confronted with African Americans as they rooted for them while on the baseball diamond. Spring training presented African American ball players with many problems their Caucasian counterparts did not have to face, while at the same time, the citizens of Fort Myers had to adjust to a new reality. This study examines how the community of Fort Myers, and the Pirates organization, adjusted to segregation and the measures taken to integrate spring training. Also, black players could not travel, dine, golf, or enjoy other social activities with their teammates. At the same time the city’s people had to adjust their way of thinking when confronted with African Americans as they rooted for them while on the baseball diamond. Spring training presented African American ball players with many problems their Caucasian counterparts did not have to face, while at the same time, the citizens of Fort Myers had to adjust to a new reality. This study examines how the community of Fort Myers, and the Pirates organization, adjusted to segregation and the measures taken to integrate spring training.